Now I "get" your description. It took me a couple of entries, but now I understand- if it wasn't for your wife, you wouldn't have written these stories down- right?
Well I'm glad that you did, they are very cute. I used to work in a bookstore, and this would be the sort of book that I would see someone reading that would suddenly just burst out laughing about!
It is so sad to realize that a parent could destroy their child so carelessly or perhaps I should say greedily. To steal the innocence of a child is unforgivable. I am sorry that you have the knowledge of such things to write about them so heroically.
Interesting beginning... I was disappointed how quickly it ended. You have some potential here; of course you will need to expand upon your characters as well as giving them something to do...
One small typo-
* I ran into him trying haul that infernal suitcase over this horrid pavement."
* My thoughts on the wonerful things that my beautiful sisters has in store for her.
~ wonderful
After this line, I expected a beautiful poem, or story. I appreciated the explaination on what Rett Syndrome is and what causes it. But I really want to hear about your sister after the build up in the description.
My suggestion would be to add this type of writing first, then the clinical aspects of the syndrome.
Such a beautiful story, for such a wonderful cause.
I enjoyed to vulnerablity that you wrote into your words, describing singing into answering machine when you don't sing and writing about a child, you do not know.
The additions to the links on the children and the finished song adds a reality that may have been missed by casual readers.
I am transported to coffee heaven with your descriptions of these intoxicating drinks!
Seriously now, I love the way that you wrote this piece. The admission of the failed date to the movie theater espresso was just so endearing. To bad she wouldn't give you a second chance.
A very interesting look at the world of self-publishing.
I only wish that you had gone a bit further into the descriptions as to how this was done, as well as the final outcome. How many books have you sold? Has it balanced out the monetary scales? Would you do it again?
Answers to these and many more questions would help the rest of us questioning writers decide whether to self-publish or not.
This reminds me so much of the story/movie "A Fairy Tale", about the young English girls that claimed that they had photographed fairies.
I really enjoyed the descriptions of the little girl, Tempest, as she used her imagination to transform herself as she followed her older sisters to their secret meeting. I would suggest, though, continung this story to tell more about this secret club and the little girls in it.
Such a beautifully personal momento to your beloved friends of so many years.
I loved the way the passage of time was represented through these eight letters. Even though they are one sided the information is there showing a friendship that has spand time.
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