Joel I liked this poem it showed how some of us need to go within ourselves to find answers to the questions we ask. I would have rated it 4.0 I didn't because the lack of capital letters irritated me. Especially when relating to I (i).
But this is a personal preference of mine. Perhaps you intended it to be that way?
Keep on writing and having those deep thoughts.
Poppy
An interesting poem that points out how some people manipulate others. They can only be puppeteers though if we allow them to hold the stings. I liked this poem.
Poppy.
I can relate to this poem. I love to look at the moon and stars on aregular basis. Like the poem when I am feeling isolated from the outside world, looking at the night sky reminds me I'm never alone.
There's a proverb that states this:
'Why should I feel lonely? Is not our planet in the milky way.' (by anon)
Poppy
Being perfect would be boring Scar Tissue. Just love and be yourself. That way you know who your true friends are.
I found this poem moving and can relate it to the loss of a dear friend, who committed suicide because he was under pressure to achieve what others wanted him to achieve. All he wanted to do was be himself.
Poppy.
I like these allegories C.J. They made a change from the usual way of presenting things we have experienced in our lives. Sometimes it makes it easier to remain detached from the traumatic times we have gone through, by writing in this way. I feel that your life experiences have been testing at times and that comes over in your writing.
Poppy
Hello Revan
This piece reminded me of my school years and an obnoxious boy I used to sit next too. An enjoyable read. I loved the gum in the hair, revenge can be sticky as well as sweet. I look forward to reading more of your writing.
Keep on showcasing your work.
Poppy
I loved the opening of this prose. I wasn't sure about gull's trilling though, squawking, yes. When I've been in their presence they've almost seemed to shriek. Or that could have been me when i got covered in droppings.
It's amazing what you can see, when you close your eyes. especially if you meditate.
I found this an enjoyable read, that differs from other pieces I've read.
Well written, keep on writing.
Poppy
Hello Darrell
I don't know anything about lyric writing. I assume you are going to put these words to music. Correct me if I'm wrong. I do like the words though, they have a 'Poetic',feel to them. I hope you do well with the piece and look forward to reading more of your work.
Poppy
I liked this poem and the way that it points out the way we can so easily forget those in need, because we are to busy satisfying our own wants. regardless of whether we need it or not.
Poppy
This poem depicts the world in which we live today, where our safety is never certain and we need to be streetwise all the time.
I could relate to this poem. Keep on writing .
Poppy
A moving poem depicting the difficulty of 24hour 7 day a week, every week of non stop caring. Showing how the true emotions of the carer are witheld. It is easier for the professionals who have breaks from the role, but for a parent there is no such break.
Having worked with Autism, I feel that you, the writer, has shown a strong connection with the situation. Thank you for sharing it with us.
Poppy
I like the way this poem accentuates the suddenness of death and the fact although we know it's around the corner, it always takes us by surprise and leaves us grieving.
An enjoyable, even though dark read. It will be interesting to see more of your work.
Keep on writing.
Poppy
This puts over the point that some people rely on others to make them feel happy. When true happiness comes from knowing and loving oneself. It took me a lot of years to work that one out.
I liked what the poem represented.
Keep on writing.
Poppy
I could relate to this poem. I have wonderful memories of my youth, with a supportive, loving family and friends. Then the painful process of adulthood hit and the reality that not everyone is 'nice'. Surviving that period of your life makes you stronger and permits you to be who you want to be, not what others expect of you. If the people around you cannot accept that, it's their problem. I love myself for who I am and I will continue to stay that way.
The poem depicts the struggles in life perfectly. keep on writing.
Poppy
An interesting read. It highlights the point, that many people start off as, 'In the closet writers'. Because they are unsure of the reaction they will get from family and/or friends.
It is an unusual way of putting the point over.
I feel that it would have benefitted from shorter sentences in places. At times, I found myself getting breathless when reading it. I have a tendency to write lengthy sentences myself and have to pull back.
Overall I enjoyed it.
Keep on writing
Poppy
A very descriptive poem. It reminds me of when I was in a relationship and how restricted I felt within it. It wasn't all bad though. I enjoyed reading it and it reinforces my sense of freedom and the ability to do what I want, when I want. Keep on writing.
Poppy
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