A very apt description of Should and Could. I loved the idea of them being twin sisters.
This piece makes me more determined to become a follower of Could and shun Should altogether.
An amusing and enjoyable read. I hope we are going to hear more from this author.
Poppy
An interesting look into how someone feels. You describe it well. I feel that you just need to check the spelling in your work, I have to do this before I send out my own work.
Farewell, beginning, reality and buried, are the ones that jumped out. It may be that they were just typing errors. Again something that I have to check for in my own work.
I did enjoy the poem and look forward to reading more of your work.
Thank you for sharing it.
Poppy
I enjoyed reading both of these poems.
'Night', evoked a feeling of loss and a sense of hopelessness within me.
'Summer', on the other hand a sense of renewal and reprieve.
Poppy
I felt I could relate well to this poem. It reminds me of one of my own, been there done that times.
An understanding insight into the mistakes we make.
Keep on writing.
Poppy
I enjoyed reading this poem, it reminds me of the times when I've wanted to relate my feelings to soemone, but they haven't wanted to listen, so I too have turned to God,who always listens.
An emotional roller coaster.
Thank you for sharing.
Poppy
I liked the way this poem flowed and the fact that I could visualise a garden while I was reading it.
I don't know if it was intentional, but I was also fascinated about the layout of the poem, it reminds me of an urn, so this also enabled me to make another link relating to death.
I liked the general idea and content of this poem and can relate to the situation at a personal level.
I feel that it would have been easier to read if it was justified to the left and single spaced between lines. but that is just a personal preference.
What stood out to me, was the fact that some people prefer to believe that another is lying if the truth is more hurtful. Many friendships are lost this way.
I did enjoy this poem and look forward to reading more from the writer.
I know exactly what you mean about the trauma of the first draft. It took me five years to get the first 20,000 words, because I was trying to edit as I went along. Decided to spew it out at the beginning of November this year and completed it by December 4th.135,000 words to play with now. Already 5,500 into equally dreaded second draft. Keep on writing and all the best.
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