Love lost and found in a better way for Angela, for Danny it was a complete loose-loose situation.
Carl on the other hand was an angel in disguise who brought the colours of life for Angela and Isabelle.
This story shows the limits to which women can be strong both, mentally and physically.
The will power inherited by Isabelle is remarkable.
A very touching story of a lady with a lot of dreams.
Julianne is strong, bold, yet subtle and sweet.
The magic box does bring sparkles in her life, and that she starts living life all over again.
Lance - is a very romantic man. Every lady would love to have a partner like him, to love his wife even after he's gone.
The story ends with a massive message for one and all to remember. To move on is the key, keeping the loved ones cherished right inside a treasure box locked inside our hearts.
I loved this one !!
A heavy downpour of snow does not hamper the women's preparations and zeal for a grand wedding.
The daughter is special and so is her wedding. The poise and grace of Raine is remarkable, and Edna seems to be the perfect mom, wishing the best for the child always.
The white-cladded wedding is just perfect fit for the occasion.
The author's life represents the tree she described, full of life and energy once, now it is shattered and looks weak.
There is a want to improve after the accident, but time takes its toll, and lets author to think twice before taking any life-taking decision.
Just as the war-like situation made the once attractive tree look sad and withered, the massive car accident made the author's condition similar to the tree.
There is a tone of regret in the author's voice as she repents on the idea of seperation.
Just a little editing is required here in the below sentence:
I am wastwenty-three and was quite attractive. - I am should be I was.
Physical proximities which come after the emotional bonding is made, is sensuously portrayed here.
The melting of one in the other's bosom, the warmth of emotion and satisfaction enables the soul to be one, to bring a new dimension to the relationship.
Nice read for this day!!!
White fluffly clouds are termed rainless... A desire for a cooler day is depicted here... How clear a day it is during summer is shown with blue sky...and the warmth is shown as the trees sway.
A perfect combination for a summer to be described.
The imagery is good. The haiku flows good.
The world is crumbled into pieces with the wait of thunder-showers.
Its been too long to have the place drenched in the cold waters from the grey castles of clouds... spreading life and happiness all over.
As far as I can comprehend, the poet talks of a bird.. waiting for his flock to come back with the rains. A bird, so depressed because his family has left to far off places , in lands where vivid is the colour of mother nature.
The poem flows well, and the title suits good.
A poem filled with so much love and gratitude, brings the reader on a journey from childhood to adulthood along with his/her dad.
The times spent together are cherished, the ones that are spent staying apart are regretted.
The lack of communication is indicated where the adulthood takes dates as preferences over a growing old dad.
Too late to realise that dad is almost at the threshold of death, the poet makes the maximum of the lost times....
A lesson well learnt... I loved reading it and it left me misty eyed..
Life's lesson teached through the game of bowling, where the poet brings to light each moves and opportunities that come in the way.
The poem is written with so much optimism that its fills the reader more pepped up and motivated to face real life..
The best line I liked is: strike or you're gone... this shows how important it is to utilise the opportunities to the optimum and never fear failures.
The present is aching because of the past and becuase the future holds no home for love and passion. Trusts broken, heart aching, there is nothing called love.. but just a ghost like feeling of it rushing through the body and the mind.
All the pain felt by the poet is excruciating in the form of this poem.
The rhyme scheme is a little confusing as fed and bed rhyme, past and fast rhyme,.. but in the last two stanzas - trash and glass dont rhyme, the same with rush and stardust.. however, overall it was a good read. The construction of the poem is good. it flows well.
A nurse develops a bonding with her patient which is so intense that a professional touch is lost to a freindly touch.
The fond rememberances of Pam brings mixed feelings to the nurse that the title is justified : Nursing is always roses with thorns.
The whole atmosphere in the hospital is knitted as family, since Pam is critical.
The author brings out the human side of medical practitioners, and that a divine touch when Pam passes away on the day of Christmas.
Very good read !!
Sam - is a strong character- looking tough from outside but soft from within. And why not? She is a lady afterall. Having seen all hardships from early childhood, she moulded herself to be as strong as the Rock of Gibraltor.
But dishonesty is what she punished heavily. And thats what happened to Ben.
Very intersting and thrilling to read.
Just a little editing is needed in the following line:
"How's that, he asked?" as she took a sip --- "How's that?", he asked as she took a sip. {b/}
The title suits well and the story flows well.
Very nice read!!!
I liked your poetry. But I would humbly suggest that you work on the title. "Lonely Dream" needs some editing..
I liked the feel of being in a place which the poet thinks he does not belong to, or does not wish to.
Also, your first 2 stanzas are aabb rhyme style. then you have a 3 line stanza with aaa rhyme scheme.
for the symmetry to hold its place, kindly add one more stanza after the 3 line stanza. it should be like this
1st stanza - aabb (4 lines)
2nd stanza - aabb(4 lines)
3rd stanza - aaa( 3 lines)
4th stanza - aabb(4 lines)
5th stanza - aabb(4lines)
6th stanza - aaa(3 lines).. I think this would look more structured. However, it is completely the author's wish....
Overall it was a good read, the flow was good. The idea behind conceiving the poem lies well within the heart of the words..
The author's experience of climbing up a mountain which is snow-cladded, is expressed with all thrills. There is an element of anxiety, of hope, of self confidence. The author alongwith his good friend Tami is on a mission to go to the heights to discover the disapperance of a prior trekking group.
The adventorous author meets a rough weather and is compelled to come back to the basement, but he does not treat it as a failure. Because while on the trip upwards to the mountain cliff, he learns from Tami that living life in all respects is the key to success. Be it countain climbing or any other adventourous mission that needs accomplishments. The reader learns that life is nothing but a learning process from everyone we meet on this journey. Very nice read!!
Just one place needs your immediate attention for some quick editing:
We enjoyed he peace and serenity of making a solid home under wearying conditions - it should be the
The story is very interesting, thrilling and teaching some values to the reader.
There is a constant urge to stop the wars all over the world. Somewhere there is a war within ourselves as well.
Through this poem, the author appeals for the conscious stoppage of such brutality. That we are not preseving life like the precious most and causing continuous damage to it, disturbs the author.
Very though provoking
Nice read!!
A musical tingling in the middle of the night invites the onset of a new season.
Like a welcoming music to the change. The imagery is really good. And the poem is nostalgic.
This makes me go back 20 years down the line , when windchimes were an integral part of me during my childhood
i could not do without them...
A nice poem with a strong message for all readers to understand and implement.
What may be amusement for some, may be painful for others. Two sides of the same coin is brought out so well, with crisp description of what the fishermen and the fishes perceive.
This seems like a dialogue from a bird. A brid trying to show directions to another to find that crystal pond of refreshment for all the bird community.
The proximity is measured in terms of flight.. this is interesting to read and actually picturise..
The splitter-splatter is shown in this poem.. quite a beauty to see..
What can I say !! Its just perfect.
In just three clauses you have written down what a rose is meant. How it is perceived by majority of the people living on this earth.
A rose is a rose is a rose.. and so a poem is a poem is a poem. No comparision..
I have always enjoyed reading haikus. The reason being simple. I explore the content to really understand how come the poet squeeze everything of the ctitle into just a 5-7-5 thing !!
You have created a dazzling night. Your words sound more precious than the diamonds.
The comparision of the stars and Moon to the jewels is really imaginative.
The author rightly justifies the title, with Mr. Stan being taught a lesson to remember his life time.
The crazy communication between Stanley and the Homeless Guy brings about a little humour for the reader to actually picturise Stanley desperately awating the arrival of the bus, so that he could just go away from the Bus Stop and avoid the Homeless Guy.
And the most funniest part is when he arrives late in the office on the day he is going to get awarded for being always on time and punctual.
The way he arrived ONTIME when his mother delivered, is very well written by the author. The entire gist of the story lies in that paragraph.
It was a very good read.
A very painful story. I mean it has left me misty eyed.
The way the author tells all this without any trace of shiver, each word hits the reader's heart.
The love of a mother towards a child who needs constant monitoring is remarkable.
Noni's character is shown stronger and more matured than her age.
Just one place needs your immediate attention for a little editing
He is the kind that covers two am a.m. feedings so you can sleep.
Overall, It was a great read!! With frank confessions.
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