A deep desire to be with mother and experience her love, care, warmth and guidance is shown by the author.
There is a pain in the author's voice that develops mainly because the gentle roof of a mother's protection and assurance is missing in his/her life.
The emotions are intense, words fall short in gratitude towards a mother. Mention of missed opportunities to spend time with mother is hurting the author and he/she wants to make up for the loss.
Very emotionally written , which leaves the reader moved.
These words of wisdom tells us the basic principles of leading a happy life. Learning from our mistakes, taking lessons from them and applying it in the future is called exerience.
The poet envisions life as a multi-faceted event.
The words are flowing with maturity and humble motives.
Writing as a form of creative art well explained here. Just as the painter creates a picture on a blank canvas, with strokes of colours, a writer is seen to paint his world of imaginations and bring it to life with words and thoughts.
The writing is shown to be done on paper, a sign of conventionality.
Nice read for this day. Short and straight poem, saying much more than it actually is saying.
Tasting success after failure, Shirley is overwhelmed by herself.
Meticulous chemical testings are shown with minute details given to Chemical terms.
Until Fox tastes the muffin, the reader is under the impression that something is really discovered, but on a funny note its a muffin
This amused me
I liked reading this one...
Keep Writing !!
A scene at the dinning table is well explained with the hustle bustle of dishes, glassware, forks, spoons, the ticks of the spoons on the dishes....
juggling between serving and arranging, the lady does not come to know thats its already the end of dinner for the rest of the family and she learns that she is left alone to eat the dinner last.
Author shows how multitasking takes a toll on a lady and that she is left alone which hurts.
Nice read for this day !!
Thanks for sharing!!
Trevor's innocence is shocked at the sight of the sparrow dying.
An early childhood shown here is shattered, yet there is a lesson learnt from the episode and his mother.
A soft motherly approach is seen healing the hurt baby.
A very sweet story
Thanks for sharing !!!
Keep Writing !!
Hey Grammy.. this was an awesome piece. I can only imagine the labor but you envisioned your daughter to be the best from day one when you discovered you were carrying her.
Such is the faith of a mother, seen everywhere on the globe. Thats why mothers are angels. They are personal form of God.
You are lucky because you have a great daughter and she is blessed to have you as her mother!!!
At first when I read the title I thought this might have some insight on the Friday the 13th, but to my surprise It was a pleasure to read this one A true pleasure.
A mother at different stages of her life has different commands, different experiences.
She is a strict mother when her kids are small, but when they grow up to become teens they have their own priorities. A mother feels ignored when the children dont think it to be important to spend time with their mother.
All her possessions are now owned ber her teenaged girls, there are fights over the handing of the phone receiver..
Just as the child transitions from childhood to teens, a mother simultaneously experiences such transitions.
At the sight of his beautiful bride, the author looses his senses and traverses in a different world painted by love. He feels the love for her on the day of the wedding, at the time when they have to exchange the vows.
So much so that he has to fight back his loss of words to say I do.
A gradual growth of an affair with sweet little things decays with cries and tears when there is physical abuse. The poet is a strong lady who follows her mind and choses to walk outside this torturous relationship which is doing no good to her.
Her character is strong, the boy's character is cynical. Well explained. The rhyme is good.
My only suggestions would be as follows : ( take the ones you like, dicard the rest. It is completely the poet's choice)
1. "i" needs to be Captial I
2. In the second line " them" needs to be "the".
3. Kindly pls add appropriate punctuation marks wherever required.
Overall it was a good read. Just a little editing would make it better
A moment in time where the poet is seen sipping on a cup of coffee at a cold dark night.
The descriptions of the atmosphere outside the house, as seen from the front porch, indicates a beautiful night where everything has gone under the sheets and shades. While the poet ventures out and feels the warmth with a feeling of nostalgic coffee..
One quick edit Point : I'm setting sitting outisde
I like spending some moments in silence. Thats when one can find answers to everything, some solace for ownself, thoughts, muses etc., flow in.
And if anyone dare break this silence then they have it
I really liked this one as it is describing myself exactly when I desperately hunt for silence and sit in tranquil..
Lost and found condition on Valentine's Day, churns the poet's tummy with emotions. A heavy feeling rushes through his body on discovering that she has gone. But a smile return and a conviction re-installed when he sees a letter and a sweet chocolate ~ a token of love.
A very sweet poem written with great flow and good rhyming.
Through this very descriptive essay, the author shows why people have children these days rationally as against emotional touch.
Children need guidance and assistance in the primitve years of their development. Once they become matured enough to understand things on their own, they must learn their lessons and use their teachings to sustain life.
Belonging to Asian Subcontinent, I can very well relate to what he author is trying to say.
Children and their achievements have become like a status symbol for parents these days. There are peer pressures due to competencies which actually hampers the child and his future.
When we need the children to be self-made man when grown up, they still end up being insecured because all the while they have been living in an environment where they are taught to be better than the others. In such cases, they cling to their mothers (as rightly said by the author), for support, and in doing so, they deteriorate their development mentally, emotionally.
Why dont people think that if sand is held in a tight palm it will slip away. Keep the palm open and the sand will stay.
I always imagined how difficult it would be to write a short story.
I have not yet given a shot to it for a simple thing, and that is getting all in one paragraph and wondering what next to write.
This exhaustive information has made my life seem easy now and I will try implementing these when I start story writing sooner.
I liked Arching and Hook. I will pay special attention to those.
I am glad I bumped into this article. Something learned is something achieved.
Through this story the author tries to portray a woman stronger than she is actually heard of. She is soft but she can be as strong as Laura is.
Nature retaliates worse when Laura tries to question the final judgement. Science has grown but not to an extent where it can challenge the Supreme Power.
And this is brought out well by the author.
The story flows well. Laura is a strong character, helpless and desperate at the same time.
Emotionally strong, this story tells a lot about this mother-to-be and her years of trying to get pregnant. It talks about her trials and failures, her anxiety and disappointments. But finally she has made it. And she is happy to see her life change with the change in the colour of the test stick. Hopes and dreams start to build within her.
A very sensitive touch is given by the author on a very sensitive issue
This article is very informative in the sense that it does not talk biased on one gender.
It talks of females and males, and their common tendency to fall prey to extra marital affairs, both having the same reasons and same after-effects.
Yet, the woman affair is less talked about than the male's.
Author's stability and poise comes from the fact that nowhere in the article the statements are biased. This is a third party look
This is so cute. A perfect bonding develops with such small moments between a mother and a toddler.
It is this emotional proximity that matters the most in this relationship.
A child's dream is always to match his/her mother in some way, and the author brings that out very nicely here with the example of chasing the heart-beats and breaths.
A nice philosophical and a pratical approach given to the biggest attachment in the world - "Relationship"..
Each one has a unique connection with the other one, and it is basically a balanced give and take, but a selfless one.
Before establishing a relationship with anyone else, it is most important to establish a relationship with the Supreme Power and then our ownself. Because these are the two persons who will area actually your best companions.
Treat yourself the way you want others to treat you. Isn't it?
Thats a very good informative article to bump into.
Most writers have a lot of talent but lack a decent exposure to the reading world, and often are deprived of the knowledge that their creative writing can earn them a decent amount. That sometimes de-motivates them.
But a slow and steady step by step approach does lead to great results.
Thanks for sharing this information across the masses.
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