A poem to console a friend, who is suffering from the accident. The situation is unique and it's hard to understand the pain easily, but trying to understand is enough to console a sick person. The hope to relieve the pain or hurt is always helping to heal. The sonnet is constructed well and full of sympathy.
A good read,
Jaya H.
This Acrostic poem is full of the love for the great niece. Every letter carries a special quality of the relation with unconditional love expressed in each line. The characteristics of the niece expressed in the poem are very commendable, and well appreciated by the aunt.
A good read,
Jaya H.
It's a tribute to the love.
the last two lines are like summary of the whole thought process:
So, thank you my darling for loving me just as I am,
As for the thoughts of others, we need not give a damn
It's well done.
Jaya H.
The moon reflects the precious moments of sharing in this prose like poem.
It's talking about the lifetime memory in moon-light. The moon remains the same but our memories attached to it can be changed or can't be relived the same way.A flow is little patchy but expression is clear.
A good read,
Jaya H.
A thoughtful short poem/free verse. It flows well ans in few lines giving the message it intends to.. I liked the last two lines:
the container is nothing but what it contains
contents created from immaculate refrain
these lines express the thought processs behind the poem, I think.
A good read,
Jaya H.
The man created hate and fear, losing compassion or love . The topic here is 'God creates, and man disposes'.
The poem is constructed with the steps of God's creation. In the name of religion, Man does whatever he chooses to do. A flow is little patchy. The account of the each day doesn't relate the real message but extends the poem unnecessarily , it can be edited and tighten to its point.
An intrestiong work,
Jaya H.
A good Etheree:10lines on marriage.
The bond marriage creates is well documented The flow suits the theme, covering all aspects of marriage ceremony.
The harmony in the event is depicted gracefully. it's hard to write for any contest where there is limited roon for originality and choice.
A good read,
Jaya H.
A will to be recognized is what's behind this document. To remove the fear of inferiority complex is what's expressed in this piece. the repeat references could have been avoided to make the piece more positive. It's weak presentation makes the feelings of being weak stronger than needs to be.
An interesting work,
Jaya H.
The last but one line ,'Life is what you make it to be' says it all. All other kinds of life mentioned in this poem are various choices people make.
The content agrees with the theme. the free verse flows well in short thoughts/lines.
It reads like a prose basically because it lacks rhyme and rhythm.
A good read,
Jaya H.
The theme is unique. The chat room on a computer is never described as this before and the imaginations expressed here are quite unique, usually one chats on the site to solve problems related to the site, mostly personal. but I never thought it can be use to relieve any loneliness. The flow is adeuate.
A good read,
Jaya H.
An helpless appeal for the freedom or support is written in this free verse. A desperate cry for a support in every stanza. A reader gets the feeling of helplessness very well. A solution for such a loneliness is not apparent anywhere,there are only questions everywhere.
A good read,
Jaya H.
It's story in poetic form. There is no story as such but an answer to a question. There is no rhyme or rhythm but the flow is adequate to the poem/story which really reads as a prose. The theme and title go hand in hand, but the purpose is not clear.
An interesting work,
Jaya H.
A pleasant story of the friendship. The visit to India , for English friends is well documented.
a flow of the poem is well established for the story with proper rhyme scheme. As the footnote says, the WDC friends are honored with feelings. A gratitude and love reflects throughout the poem.
A good read,
Jaya H.
an essay written here is thought -provoking. The educator writing about a real education which doesn't necessarily acquired by getting the degree if there is no motivation and will to learn. To attain the education the writer suggested 10 steps which could be used as tools by anybody wishes to be educated. The author gives high status to GED.
A good read,
Jaya h.
It's quite a story full of unseen events and since everything ends well it's believed to be the god's wish. The faith makes the life liveable as well as more pleasant.
The work of the god never finishes, but man's work has limitations it seems. This is not a fiction,may be a memoir-partly.
It's not a non-fiction either but document moves well with a timeline
A n interesting piece,
Jaya H.
A nightmare of modern times, which can be avoided. This poem reminds of a bad time, some vicious act which is simply unnecessary and vicious. making us aware of vicious mentalities and attitudes still around in the neighborhood one can not predict anybody. The terror of this act are mind-shattering and scary to the core.
A good read,
Jaya H.
A nice short poem. The image prompt is not properly justified , I think. The background should have been described as well.Of course it nay not be possible to fit into the form , probably a condition for the contest entry. It sometimes hard to write within rules and boundaries.
A good read,
Jaya H.
The first two lines: You did not pass this world alone
A piece of us went with you
Make you to read more. A very emotional tone of the poem comes out very naturally., and very appealing.
The expression is clean and touching.
A good read,
Jaya H.
The poem is on the most used topic on WDC.,-the romance-love.
The poem is full of love words and is singing a love song. The memory of his love makes an emotional impact in the poem. Each stanza is full of urgency of seeing each other. It feels repetition all over but talking about the love is always like that.
A good read,
Jaya H.
It's a good commentary on the weather change and prediction of day's weather. still the Nature suggests the timely change every year and the chores are planned accordingly. the migrating geese gives a better weather report than the TV's weather-command. A good sketch work of change from Autumn to winter,
Jaya H.
a comment on life in general. It has negative tone, it's an individual opinion stated with conviction. The winding path males the journey more challenging. Making a right choice is an essence of living. The unknown future make s the life more interesting and makes one wonder about his/her decisions at every step of the way.
A good read,
Jaya H.
This is a poem of children's play. Their curious mind is looking for a new play, new adventure all the time.
A simple adventure of climbing with a makeshift slide, instead of a regular way, is an amusing effort displayed in this poem. The poem flows like a prose, no rhymes or rhythm seen anywhere.
A good read,
Jaya H.
A picture of beatnik era is displayed aptly in this free verse. The passion, and the behavior is painted well,.
The flow is good with a matter of fact fluidity in lines. It is written with a focus on a theme and told like a news story.
It's easy to read and follow without any guess work needed for a reader.
An interesting work,
Jaya H.
A good rhyming poem about writing poetry. A good flow with a good choice of words. A poet has no boundaries about ideas, locations or thoughts. It's said a poet can see what the sun can't. It's a good release process for a stress or any discomforting thoughts.
Catching the moonbeam and its thrill is described in this poem. The excitement in each line. the flow is smooth, the idea is good and displayed adequately. but there is not much to tell and the feelings can be expressed in so many words only.
A good read,
Jaya H.
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