There is a tone of preaching in the poem which reads like a prose. It 's story of a materialistic nature which is refuge from the hopelessness of the life spent. But the habits are making a mess of the life and only solution to the pain could be straighten out with the right choices in the life. The message is clear but it doesn't flow that powerfully.A little editing might make it better.
A good read,
A simple poem about nature 's creation flows in simple words ,with no rhythm and with occasional rhyme. It expresses whatever it wanted to do. The simplicity makes it easy to read. There is a gratitude expressed towards the creator/the mother nature and it implies the god's hand in it too.
A good read,
Jaya h.
It is a mystical experience narrated in this document. A person seems to be lost at twilight zone. , not aware of his solitary existence and change in atmosphere . Whether it's a mind's game or not is not very clear. In hibernation, things like this experience is possible in this world actually anything is possible in any mind's game.
An interesting piece,
Jaya H.
Since I cannot be violent
I have learned to be silent.
These two lines is what the poem is all about. It's about one-directional love story with no reciprocation. The indifference towards a person who cares with the heart,can end the affair for sure. The poem describes the anguish very well. there is rhyme or rhythm but a good expression
A good read,
Jaya H.
A thought provoking piece.
The story mimics human beings. with unhappy nature due to the competition to others human being does the same thing , creates unhappiness in life. In other words, we find, the grass is greener on other side. Once we realized our trend of thinking, we can change and make happiness by ourselves but it 's not easy to do , and cycle continues as the world turns. The document covers all the thoughts ver well.
It's a different take on the Stormy weather. The poem reads more like a prose. The imaginations cross the borders of simplicity and creates a vivid picture of destruction as well as creation of other kind. The picture is vivid and thought process is of a different kind, as each mind works differently.
An interesting work,
A poem with a thought of the life as a journey is here. The idea of a journey is not always a thought in mind but memories make it obvious with the empty spaces foe a life to fill. IT flows well the thoughts are expressed well with a good choice of words.
A good read,
Jaya H.
The sad poem ends in a positive note of courage to face the grief. It's always difficult to to suffer a loss by death. The memories of a person keeps the pain of loss alive but sometimes it gives solace of courage too. that's what this poem is flowing through.
A good read,
Jaya H.
a very depressive outlook of life in 21st century. It may be harder than before to make ends meet but still it's not impossible. Some problems of this century are more troublesome than before but every life has to deal with some problems , there never is smooth sailing all the time. The ups and downs make life more challenging , I think.
A good read,
Here is a piece on one-point attention. To concentrate on the scene beyond with your mind's eye is what explained here. a little disturbance of concentration can change the perspective with confusion to face. Some people enjoy the activity, some find it useless.
An interesting thought/work,
Jaya H.
A good metaphor for new day and new life.
In just few lines both the parameters are depicted well in this document. I don't know why it's classified as fiction, when there is no plot as such. But the piece is written well and the thought is expressed in few good words.
A good read,
Jaya H.
A suffering from the broken trust is depicted in this poem. A lost love, broken promises which adds to the suffering. to have a blind trust is not an ideal situation, but it creates heartache nevertheless which can be very hard to cure and equally hard to live with. The flow is full of sad sufferings and a pain is in each line.
A good read,
Jaya H.
A tragic story of a man who lost his wife, his life-partner. from the start , an end was expected as such. so the suspense was not maintained as it should have. A suicidal death is always mystery to everybody, with the question,"is the life was so bad that there was no hope for it?'
It's a sad story that composed well.
A good read,
Jaya H.
In this short poem a natural sequence of the nature is depicted well. The petal's life mimics the life of any living on the earth. The message is clear- Life starts on the earth, and ends in the earth. The poem is written well, short but meanimg is great.
A good read,
Jaya H.
An effort to define 'Greed'. The poem tries very hard to explain greed in all possible ways but it still needs a lot of coverage. there are so many aspects in feeling such as greed it might be little hard to get through them all. I didn't like the last line as to justify the action of greed.
An interesting work,
Jaya H.
A good review of the film. The comments I liked most are:
Comedic relief, brief respite
new beginning, steady pace
then past returns
to be put in its' place
With such review the public would like to see the film at least once. It's a good advertisement for the film, I wonder whether it used for that reason or not?
It 's tiny story of a tiny person's real fears. For a reader these fears seem silly but for 2 years old those are really traumatic.
The fiction is told well. its flow is apt. the feelings of fears are expressed adequately with a drama and all.
for a small fiction all the elements of fiction are covered well.
A good read,
Jaya H.
is it the needle to end the life? the poem is based on the faith in the god. once one is connected with the god, the life gets a new meaning of kindness and hope. it encourages to be faithful to the god and his teachings so that his grace would help to live the life peacefully. The flow is good with clear message.
A good read,
Jaya H.
A lover's request to the lover. their romantic meetings are remembered in the poem with a hope to be responded by equal
urgency. The Flow is smooth and expression is clear.The feelings are expressed words of love and the intensity is as acute as it probably feels.
A good read,
Jaya H.
A mother's love for the son is expressed in this emotional poem.
A loss of the son is never recovered and the mother seems to be clinging on to his memories and his tangible things . a flow is good and the grief is expressed in each line. It seems a mother has terrible time in her life to be survived but the son is gone.
A good read,
Jaya H.
It's a funny story. Has nothing to do with the prompt though. It's a comic conversation between some drunk members in a bar at night.
It's documented well and the entire conversation is funny even though senseless. but after-all it's a story about drunk people, so no expectations of any sensible way.
A good read,
Jaya H.
A tribute to Mother nature and comments on usage of the nature by the people in the world, is what makes the poem interesting.
I liked the beginning the most: Among majestic pines and mountain streams
I see reflections of divinity,
A flow is good and expression is well developed.
A good read,
Jaya H.
This is the first time that I'm reading the poetry form. It's simple in structure and in flow too. The subject is very simple and there is not much to say, but simple story about cat's life. There is nothing complex or preaching . a tone is simple as the subject matter, in fact simplicity is the virtue of this short poem.
A good read,
Jaya H.
It's difficult to review just one piece of serially written document.
But whatever the link presented in this piece is well documented and surely gives the idea of some secretive deals in process. It 's not interesting enough to make me read the whole serial, but idead is good for WDc.
Jaya H.
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