An article is well written. It's packed with emotions and talks about all the aspects of difficulty to be separated from the special bond. It's trying to "let go" . Nobody can train you or warn you about the feelings. , even if one is aware of the signs of break-up.
Well done,
Jaya H.
A beautiful Autumn season is pictured in this poem. Instead of colors the poem is picturing all other subtle changes in the nature which attracts the poet. The flow is good and picture is very vivid and imaginative. The frosty wind is like an alarm of the Winter.\
A ggod read,
Jaya H.
It's hard to write using a prompt, which limits your muse.but sometimes it prompts you write also. This poem is a dialogue between two hearts, and very touching at a time. but sometimes it seems in vain, when it seems only one way expression, but the thought process and message is very clear.
A good read,
Jaya H.
It is a piece written as a depression speaks in a sad tone,totally withdrawn from the world. and reevaluating the life all over again with a depressed outlook. The piece needs a positive note , but by writing it out may be there is a release of all melancholy feelings.
An interesting work,
Jaya H.
It's talking about the universal truth about nature. Thought process is clear and expression flowing smoothly.The paradox of natural existence of any two things is caught well. A similarity in differences is well pronounced in the Nature as well as in everyday life.
A good read,
Jaya H.
A good metaphore of memories and sandy beach. To be with memories seems to be a good pass-time job here. But memories have a tendency to be around without an invitation and they can be disturbing too sometimes and not always pleasant. It's not easy to select only pleasant memories to be stored and delete the unwanted one. The poem gives an impression to achieve the task.
A good read,
Jaya H.
A good patriotic poem. The pride and emotions spilled everywhere. A real tribute to the veterans who gave his life to the country to make citizens safe in the world,The grief of the family is displayed very subtly in just two lines.The patriotic tone is flowing well through out the poem.
A good read,
Jaya H.
The poem is on current problem of lack pollination and its effect on productivity or shortage of produce. all the points are discussed well in this poem. A flow is good and narrates all the ponts involved in this problem. A hope to stop the death of honey bees is earnest in the poem and it make a valid point.
A good read,
Jaya H.
The poem about fear and loneliness.
It flows well depicting all scary things in words, though rhyming seems deliberate , there is no ease or smooth sailing. of course the topic of fear can 't be smooth. It's not clear what 's more fearsome, the noises or thw loneliness.
A good read,
Jaya H.
It's poem on lost love, which is the most popular topic on WDC. It has the same expressions of loss and lust, which only in memory now but it 's enough to torment today. The memorizing the old acts of love doesn't reduce the pain but only revives it. It's depressing to read about such a pain.
A nice to share it,
Jaya H.
The change in season is well described in this poem the changes from fall to winter is described with subtle moves. the flow is good with a clear rhyming scheme.I didn't like the last line, especially the phrase"autumn dies' it 's in effort to maintain the rhyme,I believe.
A good read,
Jaya H.
The poem is full of reflections., which covers every aspect of life. every experience is a reflection of the thought process. The poem flows rough with a lot of mixed thoughts sprinkled around. I think, it needs focus and then should be rewritten again which might improve the presentation.
A good read,
Jaya H.
The magic of the innocence in the childhood is displayed well in this poem. A flow is good with no rhyme or rhythm observed. The last 4 lines are the essence of the poem. The theme is unique and expression is apt to the topic. the carefree life of a child is a gift itself.
An interesting work,
Jaya H.
A story about a pet, a cat. It's cute and written with so much love that some drawbacks in behavior are converted into love , in this story. any misbehavior is explained as a an attachment and instead of disciplining the pet it seems it's pampered badly.
A good read,
Jaya H.
It's difficult to take the criticism by the readers, especially unknown readers. But if you want to write, it's always good to learn from criticism, but not to get upset enough to to stop writing. sometimes a reader finds something which is never noticed by a writer and it may matters for improvement. There should be a judgement about when to pay attention to any critic or not.
Jaya H.
The fiction is very realistic. The school work for some students is very boring but for some it's interesting enough to get it done on time. Being young enough to get away from school work is always invites to different type of time-pass. With all kinds of dis attractions the school work is done here and then there is always time for music and rock.
A good read,
Jaya H.
An amusing way to look at the fact of aging. No one can avoid it or stop it but everybody likes to hide it or cover-up the signs of aging. Even if you decide not to act like an old ones but your body has limitations which can't be overruled just by thinking. In this high tech world, there are many assets can be utilized effectively to help but the they are not invisible also.
A good read,
Jaya H.
The break-ups can be very upsetting which can change the personality with added bitterness. The break-up is documented here with emotional roller coaster. Since it happens all of a sudden, with no intimation or warning, one can't prepare oneself and to carry the burden of the feelings can be easy for some but for all.
An interesting work,
Jaya H.
A love poem is the most popular item on WDC. This is not any different , which is full of emotions , anxiety and passion. Love is blind so that only good things come in mind and expressed over and over again. The poem reads like a prose, appealing to be accepted.
An interesting work,
Jaya H.
When one has a hope with heart, smile and soul, there is no room for regret or despair. The poem is well written with positive mental attitude expressed here worth sharing. The flow is good and message is clearly given. The main punch line here is 'I have seen hope'.
A good read,
Jaya H.
The spiritual poem ends in abrupt. It's really like a prayer whose life is guided through the highest command. When such a belief is there t, the life bound to go smoothly because with the belief there goes some discipline around which keeps the actions or choices on the track.
A good read,
Jaya H.
A positive look at the situation of lost love. The love can be lost but one shouldn't be hanging on to it but carry-on with the life with positive attitude, is what the message from this short poem. It reads like a prose but thought process is clear and it moves well.
A good read,
Jaya H.
In search of a heaven, The poem moves along the praise-worthy elements about oneself. It seems The bliss is what feels like heaven. The poem reads more like a prose. there is no rhythm or rhyme. The topic is good but the expression is not as deeply thought as necessary for the theme.
A good read,
Jaya H.
The experience of working in Morgue at night shift is well documented. especially on Friday, the 13th, seems to be more troublesome than ever. The experience is horrible and its difficult to fathom it and the reader just wants it to it to end and when it does, reader can't agree more to take a day off on the next Friday, the 13th.
An interesting work,
Jaya h.
A nice short poem I liked the last lines the best:
'Come Mom' my son called me,
'Ere the fleeting shades fly past,' That tells a lot about the glorious aspect of the rainbow.
The nature is full of wonders and the poem is talking about the one of it.
A good read,
Jaya H.
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