There is a search of a path to be lead in life. The free verse is more like a prose, the expression is confused and the heart waiting for a signal to be followed. There are many typos which can be corrected by reading it again. It appears in the poem that the search is incomplete and not focussed yet.
Jaya H.
The poem has a great message delivered by the young writer here. The living trees have conversation among them is the cpncept, I enjoyed the most. The flow is patchy with no rhythm or rhyme but the thought process is expressed in clear words. Why the same trees lost the way to converse is not clear but may be human interfere there?
A funny story about a scar on uncle's face. The poem flows well with rhyming scheme.
The topic for the poem is unusual but hadled well enough. Since it's contest entry there might be some conditions to enter. The qustion of the scar on the face is answered well in this poem.
A good job,
Jaya H.
A good Fib form paired with Acrostic form written for the contest. The flow is good. The thought process went in the poem is clear. The messege is very simple. Both the forms are handled well enough. Wondering whether it's a winner in the contest? I didn't know there is a monthly Acrostic contest on WDC.
A good read,
Jaya H.
The fiction is based on a very loose plot. It's trying to include yhe necessary words for the contest entry. In doing so the fiction is losing it's grip and it needs little editing to improve it.It's very confusing to a reader. The relation in a lef, emotions and park is all messed up.
It needs some fixing to improve it with proper tools,
Jaya H.
A poem about a lost love causing a heart attck or a broken heart. All the symptoms of heart attack are descibed in the poetic way. all the treatment or diagnostic methods do fall short for realizing the real reason of the broken heart. The treatment may cure the symptoms but the not the heart.
A good read,
Jaya H.
The piece on mother is different than usual. The mother here is not kept on pedistal but prtrayed as it is. -Like reality show may be. The messege came from this piece is very practical. The title is little deceptive, but there may be reason to be that way.
An interesyting piece,
Jaya H.
The poem has the most popular topic of love on WDC. Theree are many typos in this poem, another look may solvethe errors. The love mentioned in here is laced with fear and confusion. The enjoyment or joy of lovemaking is confused with a fear of separation and rejection.
A good read,
Jaya H.
It's confusing to read the piece. It starts with a gratitude for the grace of the blessings received . But then it progresses to be a blessing itself. How can a person be blessing him/herself unless someoneelse feels that way about him/her?The famous prayer quoted at the end could be behind the thoughts but it has different emotion expressed altogether.
An interesting piece,
Jaya H.
The helplessness for not holding the time still is allover the poem. It seems the moments of love are locked in the mind but can't relive them again at a time. There are so many moments one wishes to hold in hands but the poem talks about love and acts of love in each and every stanza.
A good read,
Jaya H.
The poem has a message tat is very appealing. It reads like a prose with a good flow without rhyme or rhythm. The things unsaid remained that way with some constraints and control over the mind. Many times its necessary to be that way, but whenever it bothers your calmness, its better to get rid off them as the poem suggests.
A good read,
Jaya H.
It's all in talents for anthing. The pot of gold is around you to achieve, it takes talent and hard work.The experience is earned at any task simply by trying the right way and reaching goal in time. The message in this poem is clear, the last stanza is little awkward in composition.
A good read,
Jaya H.
The poem is like a prayer. Only thing is the answers are right there, which is unusual. By reading the poem I gather that everything asked for is already given, but not obvious. It takes a lot of patience to see it, I believe. The theme is good, it's well written but hard to believe that answers from the god are so prompt. Of course, imaginations can cross the borders...
Jaya H.
It's a mysterious fiction, written well with a flavor of subtlitiy in the plot. The flow is good. There may be some conditions or rules to be followed for the contest. The story is full of surprises and mystery doesn't seem to be solved except it could be a mind-game.
A good read,
Jaya H.
It's a good picture of spunky broads of 21st century. The cultural difference is amazing anfd portrayed well with a good flow and choice words. the popular activities for the elderly are well documented including fashions and parties.
A good read,
JayaH.
Engulfed with some unknown fear makes a person like a zombie. The touch of reality is gone, not even aware of the surroundings or the mind is filled with the same fear where ther is no way out.
The confused state is well documented in the poem and no solution seems to be available.
A good read,
Jaya H.
The prayer was finally answered. A runaway realizing the mistake and wanted to return home but had lost the way. It seems a mom has expressed the thoughts of her run-away daughter in the poem. It flows well with a good rhyming scheme. The repetiting of 2 lines makes a point more urgent.
A good read,
Jaya H.
Watching a tiny plant grow , has created this poem which talks about the life in general. With little love, and nourishment can bring the life to blossom.The metaphoe to the pregnacy and tendering the plant is well done. The flow is patvhy, but gets the message across.
A good read,
Jaya H.
If you let them make you cry , they will. By reading this poem, I felt sorry for the person expressing these pathetic feelings. Behind those lines, the loneliness or a lack of relationship is obvious. It's hard to make anybody understand any feelings when they are not interested in knowing.
A sad display,
Jaya H.
A story told in poetic way does sound fresher than in the prose. There is not real plot but just like a news item. The mayor of the community/village makes the new rule of safety by closing the road for the children to use for their play-activities, which was hiled by the parents but didn't like to pay higher taxes.
A good read,
Jaya H.
The poem speaks the truth about vanishing dreams. The free verses flow well with food coices of the words. The every step of killing the dreams is documented and it feels terrible to read them. It mainly reads like a prose but written well. I suppose with all the knowledge one stilll can't stop ruining the dreams...
A good read,
Jaya H.
The title and the content of the poem don't agree. It's amazing that the youngest member should volunteer to sacrifice his life for 11 others. The background of this event is not clear,so the importance of the sacrifice can't be judged. The poem reads like a prose but the idea is vague and can't get the 'unconditional love' s feeling.
Jaya H.
The fiction is about catching a liar red handed. The flow is patchy. sometimes confusing so that the event that should have been exciting, comes out as a drag. the punch ;inre is not interesting, though the plot seems to br good. With little editing with the flow of the fiction, it 'll be a good fiction.
A good read,
Jaya H.
It's mysterious lullaby. It reads like a prose but there a flow with a rhyme. It's simplicity is alluring. The emotional bond between the sisters is well documented. The connection to the lullaby is touching and feelings are poured all over the poem.
a good read,
Jaya H.
It's a humorous story about the missing keys. It's not clear whether those are car keys or house keys. The flow is good with a rhyme.The panic feelings are well documented. I was not sure why not check with the husband before searching all over. I'm sure he was enjoying the scene all along, that adds spice to the story for sure.
a good read,
Jaya H.
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