It's different kind of a poem, where reader is left to fill in the blanks,but there are still some errors in those few lines.
The thought process in this poem is very vague. it flows not so well with a patchy emotional feelings spread around for a reader to figure it out. The style is strange but the gist of the poem is established.
An interesting work,
Jaya H.
The horror story of lost love affair and the reaction s fierce that uncontrollable anger ready to even break the lover's neck, for the disgusting behavior expressed by the lover.
To handle the break in the relationship can be hard but it should be sensible, afterall when there was love was involved for a some time.
An horrific words in this document,
Jaya H.
The age old question is trying to find the answer in this poem, though unsuccessfully. The situation is documented well but why the feelings are like that can not be answered . The poem reads like a prose, with a rhyming lines sometimes. The expression and thought process is clear but final solution to the problem posed in the poem is not achieved.
Agood read,
Jaya H.
An tribute to Beethoven in this poem. It's a lot of imagination and it flows like a lyric. A poet must have a knowledge of beats or knows singing. It has no rhyme but it's rhythmic.The rhythm may be little scary, but I didn't get the connection to the halloween theme in the poem.
An interesting work,
Jaya H.
This incomplete story of Emma is written simply. There is no plot revealed yet , it just introduction of a main character,I believe, of the story. It is so far is very sad situation for a motherless girl with no anchor to her life.
It's moving well but needs reediting, to fix some spelling mistakes or typos.
an interesting incomplete work,
Jaya H.
The poem deals with the empty emotions of an ALS patient. the restrictions in movements makes the person crippled gradually with the disease and patient ha lost any hope but a fear is mounted all life. It's emotionally packed and reader feels as helpless as the patient.
An emotional read,
Jaya H.
The poem is dark enough for to understand it clearly. What is the thought process here? it's difficult for me to understand fully even if it reads more like a prose. is there a guilt, can 't be spelled out, is there some strange behavior involved. all is mysterious in here.
An interesting work,
Jaya H.
A picture of imaginary existence, silent existence is displayed here. The description is vivid, but convincing.
It moves well, its character is very fluid in choice words. Either you believe it or not the existence could be very comforting for anybody who believes in spirit.
A good read,
Jaya H.
A good message from the dead loving people in this poem is a spiritual belief for a believer. for a non-believer it could be some nonsense thinking. The spiritual message flows well with a good choice of words. any mourner could be consoled by the positive message to rise up.
A good read,
Jaya H.
A good simple advice for all of us in this poem.
It's done well. The simplicity in living everyday life is recommended in this free verse. The style and flow is good. , it may be simple but hard to follow , especially day in and day out, the consistency probably hard to keep.
A good read,
Jaya H.
It's the realization that makes this poem interesting. The true aspect of the relationship is sometimes not understood and things are taken for granted but this poem reveals the meaning of a relationship which was a real awakening but interesting. The free verse is composed well but the flow is little patchy somewhat.
An Interesting work,
Jaya H.
In this poem historical events put together in unique way. the messages from them are not very clear but rather hidden. The flow is good with A scheme of rhyme well maintained. The comparison here with the ancient cultures is farfetched and doesn't appeal to a reader that profoundly.
An interesting work,
Jaya H.
A story of a lonely lady well told in this poem which flows well with a rhyme. There is someone unique being there but nobody hardly knows her but her existence is notice by her garden and well established living standard. The loneliness she preferred has caused her unpredicted end.
An interesting work,
Jaya H.
In last but one line there is a grammatical mistake in construction. The poem is about ta broken heart. It is full of emotional ride, up and down, mainly down with no positive thoughts about mending it. The loss is for sure and the person is really falling apart and needs a positive avenue to visit.
A good read,
Jaya H.
The poem reads more like a prose. There is no rhythm or rhyme. The theme is well expressed with a good flow. to understand the problems in the relationship and end it before it gets impossible is wise thing, a positive behavior which is documented well in this poem.
A good read,
Jaya H.
'Worthy 'of what? it's not very clearly mentioned here . Is it all the happenings in life? or is it the praises people have? it expresses the gratitude towards the Almighty about giving strength to go through the span of the life in happiness and adversaries. The flow is good.
A good read,
Jaya H.
The poem is telling a story of a crime of banging another person's wife. to run -away from the crime is not always possible , running away with fear makes one more frightened of being caught. This story is well told with a display of a guilty emotions. The plot is well handled.
A good read,
Jaya H.
This is a game called 'Mind over body'. To recall the ancient life styles and its routines is possibly a good pass-time activity but there are very few who can entertain these thoughts to the reality and most o f us relive the in the dreams. It's a very thought-provoking piece and written in a true conviction of the thoughts.
An interesting document,
Jaya H.
The poem is talking about the void created in the life.
The reason for it not very clear, but the effects of the void are emotionally depicted. The heartache here is pinching the heart and life seems cumbersome.
The poem reads more like a prose, with no rhythm or rhyme.
An interesting work,
Jaya H.
A Mom's feelings are realistic in this document.
A reference to the tummy's softness of a mom may be sweet when coming from a toddler,but its sweetness gets bitter with the knowledge of weight problem. Raising a child is a utmost important to any mom's life and worries ,joy come during that process are worth sharing.
A good read,
Jaya H.
The idea of living a life within life is curious way to talk about the variety in lives. To control any mind is always a hefty process and hard to achieve. The mind can travel anywhere without any boundaries and sometimes it even crosses the borders. to teach a mind is a tough job, and whoever is able to do it, it's a a great achivement , indeed.
A good work,
Jaya H.
The complicated personalities can be found in this poem-all possibilities are noted, except the first line. The thoughts are very clear and the theme is very unique, the expression is clear. a reader gets baffled by oxymoron status of the world around and tries to search himself/herself. The poem moves well without any rhythm or rhyme it manily reads like a prose.
A good read,
Jaya H.
A romantic , love-poem, the most popular topic on WDC. The more you read it on this site more romantic work you find here. The topic, the words all sound similar if not the same. There is anxiety of the meeting, then the separation and always a wish to dissolve into each other. All the formula is here too.
An interesting work,
Jaya H.
The last stanza is on positive note, all others are desperately sad. It would be good to know the reason for feeling desperate. not everybody feels the way poem suggests, but that is different. regarding the feelings expressed in the poem are not always that desperate but it's a choice one makes.
A good read,
Jaya H.
A poem that's lost in a love. The feelings are all over the poem with love that engulfs the life entirely. Every thought is about the love or lover, there is so much love expressed in the poem that there is no other feelings to be felt in the life. It's may be one sided too , that's not very clear.
An interesting work,
Jaya H.
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