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Review of Loocked in a cage  
Review by Barbara
Rated: E | (5.0)
OMG, this is exactly what I have been asking myself since I was 12½ years old. My mother sent me away to an institution in 1961, because she refused to accept the girl in me, that I still need to be, physically.

For 45 years I have cried because of a life that was denied to me time after time.

It has only been in the last 3½ years that I have finally been accepted as the girl I truly am, and a doctor who would prescribe the necessary hormones so that I could actually begin my journey physically, to complete womanhood.

In my port are many poems that are similar to what you have written here. There are stories too, that are just the opposite tho, that have love, acceptance, friendship, hope, laughter, trust, adventure, and every thing else nice. Please visit my port, and you will see what I mean.

Also wewlcome to WDC. We are a family here, and I hope that your experiences here are all good ones, and that you let WDC be a part of your extended family, as they have become mine.

With best wishes always,

your friend,
Barbara

"If I have to be this girl in me, Then I have the right to be."
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Review by Barbara
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
This is very good. The only problem is, tht you may want to go back through it and correct the speeling errors.

To know why this story hits home, visit my port, and read some of my writings, especially my extended bio.

I was 12 years old and sent away to an institution, and I had never done anything wrong.

With best wishes always,

your friend,
Barbara

"If I have to be this girl in me, Then I have the right to be."
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Review of Harsh or Not?...  
Review by Barbara
Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
This is a little hard to understand. I see that you are in the pain of lonleliness, but there is no description of why she left, and all of the emotions that go with a break up.

This could be worded just a little differently tho, because if she left you without a reason, the reason is missing.

It is also unclear if your 2 boys are living with you, or with her.

I use a lot of songs and movies to make my point sometimes, and the song that would be very appropriate here is the Bellamy Brothers song "Some Broken Hearts." The chorus of that song goes like this.

"Some broken hearts never mend,
Some memories never end,
Some tears will never dry,
My love for you will never die."

I use this chorus quite often when I think of how my mother left me to fend for myself at the age of 12.

This also fits your situation too.

I think if you re-worded this poem to be a little more clear, people would understand it better, and your ratings would be better too.

With best wishes always,

your friend,
Barbara

"If I have to be this girl in me, Then I have the right to be."
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Review of The Sea  
Review by Barbara
Rated: E | (5.0)
This is very good. If only I could throw my fears out to the sea and never have them again.

Thnx for sharing this with us, and welcome to WDC.

With best wishes always,

your friend,
Barbara

"If I have to be this girl in me, Then I have the right to be."
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Review by Barbara
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Sam, I'm Barbara, and I love reading different things on WDC. The authros here have such a wide range of interests, it never becomes boring. I am trying to get GPs so I can continue my ugraded membership, which expires in May.

But I have read some very decent poems, stories and ideas here at WDC. I also belong to another writing site too, and both sites are very dear to me, as I have made friends in both.

I will read some of your stories, and I promise that my ratings will be from my heart. I usually give a five because of one reason or another, but mostly because I either identify so realistically with the piece or the poem or story makes me cry or hits me directly in the heart.

With best wishes always,

your friend,
Barbara

"If I have to be this girl in me, Then I have the right to be."
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Review of Air Time  
Review by Barbara
Rated: E | (4.5)
Very interesting...thnx for sharing this with us.

With best wishes always,

your friend,
Barbara

"If I have to be this girl in me, Then I have the right to be."
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Review of State capitals  
Review by Barbara
Rated: E | (4.0)
The capitol of Arizona is Phoenix...spelled P H O E N I X...and the capitol of the U.S. is WashingtonDC...but your puzzle says they are wrong.

With best wishes always,

your friend,
Barbara

"If I have to be this girl in me, Then I have the right to be."
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Review of Trapped  
Review by Barbara
Rated: E | (5.0)
Now this gets five stars. I loved this. The drama, the rescue, the thoughts, the radio playing, the paramedic saving her, and the hospital room. Even the message from her family. This all made for a very good story.

This is very excellent, and third place is good, because it got placed. You are a very good writer, and all I have to say is:

WRITE ON!!!!!

With best wishes always,

your friend in the US,
Barbara

"If I have to be this girl in me, Then I have the right to be>'
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Review by Barbara
Rated: E | (4.5)
I really do not know. I think maybe this is a soul laughing at itself, but I can't be really be sure. BTW, just exactly what is this tho?

With best wishes always,

your friend,
Barbara

"if I have to be this girl in me, Then I have the right to be."
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Review by Barbara
Rated: E | (5.0)
Thank you Jillian for sharing this heartfelt and very tearful story. It is too bad that John let hi sanger get the best of him, and destroyed what was left of his dear wife's memory. I do really hate to say this tho, but only a man can be that violent after a death. That is what makes this so tearful, because he detroyed her memory in a fit of uncontrollable rage.

Also I'd like to welcome you to writing.com, and I hope that we become your extended family, as WDC has become mine.

With best wishes always,

your friend,
Barbara

"If I have to be this girl in me, Then I have the right to be."
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Review of The job interview  
Review by Barbara
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Thnx Dismas, for this very uhm, different story. I have read stories where sex toys were used, but never one where they were sold (giggles).

There are a few grammatical errors, spelling mistakes and there is no description of Mr. Perez, other than he smoked marijuana.

The dialogue is, I imagine, what would be said in a job interview at such an office, but I have no experience, so I don't really know.

Thnx for sharing this with us, and welcome to writing.com.

With best wishes always,

your friend,
Barbara

"If I have to be this girl in me, Then I have the right to be."
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Review by Barbara
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hey I Love Nick, I'm Barbara and I had fun doing this one. Kind of made me remember a love I had wanted so bad, but he couldn't see for who I am. Oh well (giggle). Thnx for sharing this with us.

With best wishes always,

your friend,
Barbara

"If I have to be this girl in me, Then I have the right to be."
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Review of Emotions  
Review by Barbara
Rated: E | (5.0)
This was kinda hard but challenging at the same time. Thnx for sharing.

With best wishes always,

your friend,
Barbara

"If I have to be this girl in me, Then I have the right to be."
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Review of Long story short.  
Review by Barbara
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Thank you Emma for sharing this delightful story. The only thing I would suggest tho, is not to run the dialogue with the unspoken parts of the story. Everything running together, seems to hurry the reader along. Just Separate the dialogue in separate lines, from the unspoken part of the story.

Other than that, the story is sound, and the plot is real.

Welcome to writing.com, where I hope all of your experiences are good one, and that we become a part of your family, as WDC has become mine.

WRITE ON GIRLFRIEND!!!!!

With best wishes always,

your friend,
Barbara

"If I have to be this girl in me, Then I have the right to be."
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Review of The Inner Child  
Review by Barbara
Rated: E | (5.0)
A very good question, Mary. I have been asking myself that for 44 years. "Where did that child in me go? Where is she? I find her, then she plays hide-n-seek all over again. But she is coming out more and more, as she pokes her head out more from around her hiding place. Thnx for sharing, Mary. Very thoughtful poem.

With best wishes always,

your friend,
Barbara

"If I have to be this girl in me, Then I have the right to be."
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Review by Barbara
Rated: E | (5.0)
giggle I couldn't get the one for the first movie to get an oscar for best picture, but I did get the rest. (Giggles).

With best wishes always,

your friend,
Barbara

"If I have to be this girl in me, Then I have the right to be."
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Review of As The Wind Blows  
Review by Barbara
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Thank you for this wonderful and enlightening story of a hurricane evacuation. I live in Wisconsin, and what we have here are snow storms and tornadoes. I don't think I'd like living in any of the gulf states, because of the hurricanes. Thnx for sharing.

With best wishes always,

your friend,
Barbara

"If I have to be this girl in me, Then I have the right to be."
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Review by Barbara
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
This is cute Kare. I laughed while reading it. The title is very descriptive, and the poem flows the way you write it. I have been writing poetry since I was in the 5th grade, and I just love good poetry like this can make me laugh. I really needed that. Thnx.

With best wishes always,

your friend,
Barbara

"If I have to be this girl in me, Then I have the right to be."
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Review of My Time  
Review by Barbara
Rated: E | (5.0)
Luckee this is a very subperb poem. It is just the perfect wording that speaks to me.

If you'd like to know why I am still crouched in the corner being held by the dark, visit my port. Even though I am getting away from the dark poems, and writing more light and wonderful poems, I am still in the dark. I have been here in the dark for 44 years.

Thanks for sharing this with us. And, welcome to writing.com. I hope all of your experiences here, are good ones, and that WDC becomes your family as they have mine.

With best wishes always,

your friend,
Barbara

"If I have to be this girl in me, Then I have the right to be."
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Review of Drinks  
Review by Barbara
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
WOW! 2:10 to finish this. These words were not that hard to find. Thanks for sharing.

With best wishes always,

your friend,
Barbara

"If I have to be this girl in me, Then I have the right to be."
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Review of Wishing  
Review by Barbara
Rated: E | (5.0)
Starlight, starbright, I wish I may, I wish I might, have this wish, I wish tonight. For 5½ years I wished upon that first star, that my wish to be physically female be granted, and that I may be taken home on the beams of the moon, and I would be in my own bed soon.

You can't wish upon the moon tho, because it moves so fast, and before you know it, the wish didn't get there. But the first star of the night, will not move so fast, and will always be there through the night.

This is a great poem tho, and I can see that you don't look at the stars because they are further away than the moon. I love looking at the stars, and I still love looking at cloud formations, and playing the silly game of what they look like (giggles).

Thnx for sharing this with us.

With best Wishes always,

your friend,
Barbara

"If I have to be this girl in me, Then I have the right to be."
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Review of Ocean of Misery  
Review by Barbara
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Shadow, only those of us who have been there, can understand the ocean of misery. I have been and am still there. If you'd like to see my ocean of misery, visit my port.

Thnx for sharing this.

With best wishes always,

your friend,
Barbara

"If I have to be this girl in me, Then I have the right to be."
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Review of Poems 2004-2005  
Review by Barbara
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
I give you five stars, Jen, because everyone of these poems are so very true. Only those of us who have been there can relate to the emotions behind each and every one of these poems. I have been there. Not that I committed an illegal act, but for who I am and always have been.

They tried to kill my soul, but it came out unscathed. They tried to make me live the life they were trying to force on me, but I resisted. They beat me, raped me, called me names, and threatened me, but I bore my scars with pride that I am still me.

Please read my poem I Am A Survivor, posted in my port.

Everyone these poems speak to me, that there are others out there going through the same or similar things I have endured throughout my life.

Even with missepllings, these poems flow, and tell a very dark message to everyone. They speak through emotional thoughts and heartfelt bitterness.

These poems should be posted in every classroom, every priest's office, at the entrance to every church, at the doors of the social services building in every county throughout America and beyond. They should be posted in every home, and should be read by every teenager throughout the world.

Thnx for sharing a little bit of your heart and soul.

With best wishes always,

your friend,
Barbara

"If I have to be this girl in me, Then I have the right to be."
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Review by Barbara
Rated: E | (5.0)
Patricius, or Patrick as he later became known, was born of Roman parents, and learned the Roman Christian faith. Later on tho, through visions, he was invited by the Celts of Ireland, to come and teach them the word of God.

Today he is a saint, and rightly so. He did what no one had done in 400 years of Christianity. He went to Ireland, to convert them to the "faith."

But he did it in a most respectful way. He treated everyone, including women and children, with deep regard. This was a task no one before him even attempted, because the Roman Catholic curch saw the Celts of Ireland, to be heathens and therefore not human.

Throughout history, people different than the "mainstream," were treated as non human. Women, children, Jews, gays, eunichs, slaves, etc.

Only one cross-dresser was ever considerd to be human, and that is the Chevalier de Eon, who dressed as a woman for his entire adult life. His prowess with a sword however, earned him great respect in France, and he was often sought out for fencing lessons.

He left France for the Court of Catherine the Great of Russia. There, he would be treated like a woman of royalty, and would give the peole of court fencing lessons, making them experts in handling a sword.

But other than the Chevalier de Eon, no other non-mainstreamer would be considered human. Even today, with the gay marriage bans all over the country, the "mainstream" is again treating human beings as non-human and not deserving of the rights of all other classes of humans in this country.

St. Patrick mae sure that the people he was missioning to with the Gospel of Jesus, and the words of His Father, were treated not only wiht deep respect, but also as human beings, deserving of the Gospel of Jesus, and conversion from paganism, to Christianity.

I may make lime Kool Aid on St. Patrick's Day, but no alcohol, because St. Patrick's Day should be a day of prayer for everyone around the world, that has been affected by St. Patick's conversion of the Irish Celts.

May god continue to bless the soul Of Patricius, now known as St. Patrick of the Excluded.

Thnx for sharing this insightful poem, because it made me re-read the history and legacy of St. Patrick, through his Confessions and Letter To Coroticus.

With best wishes always,

your friend,
Barbara

"If I have to be this girl in me, Then I have the right to be."
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Review by Barbara
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
I love this, it is filled with emotion and longing for someone you have had, but lost, and cannot have again.

The is just one thing tho. The second last line in the 6th stanza ends withe word "is". "Is" should be the first word on the last line of the 6th stanza, because written as it is, interrupts the flow of the poem. Other than that tho, this is a very good poem of emotion and longing...I think I already said that (giggles).

With best wishes always,

your friend,
Barbara

"if I have to be this girl in me, Then I have the right to be."
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