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Review of Love In Motion  
Review by Barbara
Rated: E | (5.0)
OMG the movie titles are so eloquent and fit very niely into this poem of the heart. You have written a very good story in rhyme, and put so much feeling behind every line.

My favorite all time sci-fi movie is The Day The Earth Stood Still, because not only is it entertaining, but it has a moral, that if everyone in the world followed, this would be a great and wonderful world to live in.

I have used the phrase Gone With The Wind, a few times in my poems.

The use of movie titles in this poem of the heart are cleverly interwoven into the feelings of the narrator.

Thank you so much for sharing this poetic adventure.

With best wishes always,

your friend,
Barbara

"If I have to be this girl in me, Then I have the right to be."
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Review of The Caged Bird  
Review by Barbara
Rated: E | (5.0)
Abuse no matter in what form, is wrong. There should be harder penalties for those that abuse children and women. Please read my poem I Am A Survivor, in my 18+ Only folder.

Thank you for sharing this very sad and painful poem.

With best wishes always,

your friend,
Barbara

"If I have to be this girl in me, Then I have the right to be."
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Review by Barbara
Rated: E | (5.0)
OMG WhiteWolf, this is so perfect. It is written from the heart, and from deep in the soul. This stabnza is so true too.

My aching heart does not covet to face.
The life now lived in sorrow.
It can no longer bear to deface.
The life I lived the morrow.

My aching heart either will not covet to face this life I live in sorrow, because it will no longer deface the I lived on teh morrow. My port is filled with the sorrowful I lived on the morrow, WhiteWolf, and such forced sorrow should be a crime.

I can identify with this poem in every line, that is why you I gave you the high rating.

Welcome to writing.com, and I hope that we become your extended family, as WDc has become mine...

WRITE ON !!!!!

With best wishes always,

your friend,
Barbara

"If I have to be this girl in me, Then I have the right to be."
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Review of I am a girly-girl  
Review by Barbara
Rated: E | (5.0)
(Giggles), but I am tho. And OMG I just love wearing dresses and skirts, because they are so pretty, and like I talk about boys all the time, just not in a romantic way tho. I AM a girly-girl, and I am proud of it too. I could never, ever be a tomboy, even tho that is what everyone tried to force me to be. But like, I stood strong and I refused to let them destroy this beautiful girl in me.

Thanx for sharing Abby, this is a wonderful poem.

With best wishes always,

your friend,
Barbara

"If I have to be this girl in me, Then I have the right to be."
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Review of The Escape  
Review by Barbara
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Wow! This is just great. A dimension where kissing the same sex is illegal? Sounds like most of the states, especially the conservative state of Wisconsin.

Great scenery, dialogue, and drama. Nice Work Andrew, keep it up, and this could be a longer story in your own universe too. Thanx for sharing.

With best wishes always,

your friend,
Barbara

"If I have to be this girl in me, Then I have the right to be."
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Review by Barbara
Rated: E | (4.5)
I like these because they all contain a single theme. Nice work.

With best wishes always,

your friend,
Barbara

"If I have to be this girl in me, Then I have the right to be."
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Review of Cloud Watching  
Review by Barbara
Rated: E | (5.0)
OH Andoe, this is so beautiful. I'm still in my cocoon waiting to emrge as the beautiful butterfly I was born to be. I really like this, because the metaphor here can apply to a person like me. Thanx for sharing Andoe, this is a really beautiful poem.

With best wishes always,

your friend,
Barbara

"If I have to be this girl in me, Then I have the right to be."
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Review of The Cemetery  
Review by Barbara
Rated: E | (4.5)
Anna Lee, this is a very decent poem of solitude, and meditation. There is always a treasure to be found in the cemetery, because of all of the different years on the monuments and head stones. There are untold stories in the cemetery, and these are the musings of a wandering soul, is what I get out of this. Thanx for sharing Anna Lee.

With best wishes always,

your friend,
Barbara

"If I have to be this girl in me, Then I have the right to be."
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Review of Driftwood  
Review by Barbara
Rated: E | (5.0)
So beautiful and so surreal. Our minds often play tricks on us with our eyes. I like this a whole lot. Thnx for sharing.

With best wishes always,

your friend,
Barbara

"If I have to be this girl in me, Then I have the right to be."
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Review by Barbara
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Make that "Doesn't like where life has led her." Because I too have the same unpublished life, afraid to ask a guy for a date, being lonely in my isolation, with just me and my computer, so I can post my writings. I don't grill anything tho, and I am uner a severe cloak of depression and sadness and loneliness. OH well, such is my life.

Thanx for sharing because this hit home with the force of a 20 pound sledge hammer.

With best wishes always,

your friend,
Barbara

"If I have to be this girl in me, Then I have the right to be."
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Review of From Me to You  
Review by Barbara
Rated: E | (4.5)
Thanks Shylah, this is a very good poem of the coming of age, or not (giggles). When I was 10 years old I could not even think 5 years ahead, let alone 47. I'm 57 now, and it seems only like yesterday tho, that I was romping in Calumet, Michigan with my friends, and being silly and laughing at the boys.

When you visit my port, you will see that I have always been female, in my soul, and I was treated that way in Calumet. But my mother had other ideas, and that's when everything became dark for so many years.

But I still see my preteen years as tho they were yesterday. Will I ever grow old? No, because this body may wither and die, but my young soul will always live for eternity.

With best wishes always,

your friend,
Barbara

"If I have to be this girl in me, Then I have the right to be."
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Review of Sad thoughs  
Review by Barbara
Rated: E | (4.5)
Interesting...If I would have wrote this, I would have called it "The Rose In My Heart." But the words in these stanzas are very true. Thnx for sharing.

With best wishes always,

your friend,
Barbara

"If I have to be this girl in me, Then I have the right to be."
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Review of Prayer  
Review by Barbara
Rated: E | (5.0)
Thank you so much Fouzii for sharing this with us. Thes short prayers are very good, and people need to understand the worth they project. I have another prayer for you...

May the Lord Jesus bless you, and those whom you love, and be with you always, and at your side constantly. Amen.

This simple little prayer asks the Lord to bless us and our loved ones, as well as walk with us and be with us always.

With best wishes always,

your friend,
Barbara

"If I have to be this girl in me, Then I have the right to be."
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Review by Barbara
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
I reallylike the mystery behind the story plot. The way Jake was thinking seemed very real to me, and the setting in the desert, and the need for a beer, came out to be very real.

There are just a few mistakes I saw when I was reading. Mostly punctuation and word omissions.

In the 3rd pargraphe you wrote:

"Actually, this time he was speaking to his truck. Jake wasn't the type of guy would his truck or favorite handgun a woman's name." You omitted the words "who" and "give."

"Actually, this time he was speaking to his truck. Jake wasn't the type of guy (who) would (give) his truck or favorite handgun, a woman's name."

And the last line of the 3rd pargraph is too halting. You wrote:

"Now even in Blue River. In the middle of the Nevada desert. In 110 degree heat. It was just Jake and his Hemi." This is how it should be written:

"Now, even in Blue River, in the middle of the Nevada desert, in 110 degree heat, it was just Jake and his Hemi." The only period should be at the end of the sentence to make it flow better.

In the 4th pargraph, the word nonplussed is spelled wrong. There should be 2 "S"es.

In the 2nd line of the 6th paragraph the word period is spelled wrong too. Only one "R" in period, please (giggles).

In the 2nd line of the 11th pargraqph, you spelled "serenading" wrong. S e r e n a d i n g.

In the 3rd paragraph, in the second line, there should be a comma after cowboy, not a period.

There is a spacing and punctuation error in the 4th line of pargraph 11 too.

"The liked the get up;the boots, the hat, ripped jeans,..." Instead of the semicolon, there should be a comma, and then a space. and the first word of the sentence should be "they."

And in the 6th line of the 12th paragraph, you have the word "to" written twice, when it should only be once.

But this is a good story tho, just the errors I saw as I read it, kind of detract from the even flow of the story. I'm also looking forward to reading the second part, too.

With best wishes always,

your friend,
Barbara

"If I have to be this girl in me, then I have the right to be."
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Review of The Christmas Box  
Review by Barbara
Rated: E | (5.0)
Judy I will give you 5 stars for this because this is a positive story. I will also give you an A+ because of the subject matter of the story. Finding a box of letters from orphans to Santa Clause, shows a very decent and caring heart.

The way the woman was thinking in this story too, is what we have all gone through, and not just on moving day, either.

I'm sorry I didn't get to this before, but I have been back in the hospital again.

With best wishes always,

your friend,
Barbara

"If I have to be this girl in me, Then I have the right to be."
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Review of The Special Tree  
Review by Barbara
Rated: E | (5.0)
Child abuse is such a degrading crime. It doesn't matter if the child who is abused is hurt physically, sexually molested, or psychologically damaged in some way, child abuse is so degrading.

In my port I have several poems that describe a life that should have never been. The worst child abuse that canhappen is when the child is abandoned because of a selfish parent, who has no more respect for the child, and then sends the child to an institution, and then signs away parental rights, to add insult to injury...I have one poem called I Am A Survivor. I feel it says a lot of what I have been through, without all of the details.

Child abuse MUST stop.

With best wishes always,

your friend,
Barbara

"If I have to be this girl in me, Then I ave the right to be."
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Review by Barbara
Rated: E | (4.5)
Yes Khalish, just simply love us. The secrets of womanhood transcend body boundaries, and are captured in the female soul. What it means to be a woman, and how it feels to be a woman, is a gender secret we will take tothe grave...lol. Actually tho, it is open to different interpretations from each woman, because even tho we may think alike, our thoughts are varied, and complicated. Thnx for sharing. OH! By The Way! This is no longer a MAN'S world, we just let you guys think it is.

With best wishes always,

your friend,
Barbara

"If I have to be this girl in me, Then I have the right to be."
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Review of Main Street  
Review by Barbara
Rated: E | (5.0)
This is just so perfect. This is another story of yours that has taken me down memory lane. I enjoy reading about Wisconsin in the 1950's, because I was in my pre-teens, and mostly I lived in Calumet, Michigan, with very good friends of my family. But when I was here in Milwaukee, we would go to Woolworth's 5 & 10 cent store on Wisconsin Avenue. They had all kinds of novelties there, as well as a full restaurant. Sometimes I would go downtown by myself to the Warner Theater to watch a movie, and before I went to the movie, I would stop in at Woolworth's. I'd go to the soda counter and order a cherry Coke. Remember those? They were good then, before Coca Cola ruined by selling it bottles. I still say the cherry Coke still belongs behind the counter and made the way they were then. Cherry syrup and Coca Cola.

There is a Gilles custard stand on Bluemound Road and about N. 76th street today. And I don't know if it is still there, but we have or had an Edith's Bridal shoppe on West Mitchell Street on Milwaukee's south side.

Your two stories that I have read, have brought a smile to my otherwise sad face. Thank you soooo much for the memories.
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Review of My Heart  
Review by Barbara
Rated: E | (5.0)
Oh Jessie if only this could be true. From the time I was 3 til the present, I have struggled to be with that someone special, but it always eludes me. I try to break free, but then I find I'm chained to the wall of fear. Until I came into writing.com, sadness was my one and only true friend, with loneliness snickering at me, and abandonment stabbing me in the back.

Then I came in here, and posted my writings and found that friendship really does exist outside of sadness.

Everyone here has been great, and I don't know what I'd do without their kind reviews and advice.

Jessie WELCOME to writing.com. I hope all of your experiences here are good ones, and that we become your extended family, as WDC has become mine.

This poem is so right on, that I see nothing to change. WRITE ON!!!!!

With est wishes always,

your friend,
Barbara

"If I have to be this girl in me, Then I have the right to be."
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Review of A taste for it  
Review by Barbara
Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
Okay it is good as far as two guys talking BS, but that's about it tho. And you are right, you do need to take this further. Have you ever seen the movie "They Shoot Horses Don't They?"

This movie is told in flashbacks as to why this guy shot this girl in thehead killing her instantly. If you havn't seen it, you should, it could give you an inspiration as to how to carry this story out.

The plot and dialogue are solid tho, but it needs to be taken further tho.

With best wishes always,

your friend,
Barbara

"If I have to be this girl in me, Then I have the right to be."
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Review by Barbara
Rated: E | (4.5)
Very good write. This is how I see myself after I complete my transition into physical womanhood. I am now in transition, and in another year I will be complete. I will carry myself proud and stand with my head straight, and be as the solid oak tree, because the girl in me will finally be.

With best wishes always,

your friend,
Barbara

"If I have to be this girl in me, Then I have the right to be."
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Review of Common Courtesy  
Review by Barbara
Rated: E | (5.0)
OMG Hazel, this is just too funny and sooooo precious. My 2 shepard mixes know the words please, excuse me, and thank you, as well as no, yes, good dog, bad dog and "come on puppies," which means it's outside time.

With best wishes always,

your friend,
Barbara

"If I have to be this girl in me, Then I have the right to be."
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Review by Barbara
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
For sure. Thnx for sharing. I thought this was well expressed and written. I see nothing here that needs any improvement.

Also, welcome to writing.com, I hope you find a home here, as I have.

With best wishes always,

your friend,
Barbara

"If I have to be this girl in me, Then I have the right to be.
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Review of ??????  
Review by Barbara
Rated: E | (5.0)
This is truly a very emotional poem. There are spelling errors throughout the poem, but I was able to read it as tho there weren't any.

This is very good, and except for a few grammatical and spelling errors, this piece is very good.

With best wishes always,

your friend,
Barbara

"If I have to be this girl in me, Then I have the right to be."
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Review of Mother For Sale  
Review by Barbara
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
It is sad that some countries are not as rich as others, and that the people have to struggle to make ends meet.

This is very nicely written, and I see nothing that needs improvement here.

Also welcome to my home and family, since my real family has disowned and abandoned me. Writing.com is my family now, and I have made many new friends here. I hope we can be your extended family, and that all of your expereinces here are good ones.

With best wishes always,

your friend,
Barbara

"If I have to be this girl in me, Then I have the right to be."
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