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Biography, short stories, all styles of poetry.
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Horror, Dark because I am not fond of voluntarily being scared.
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True stories and experiences
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Anything that scares me
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Review of Tact and Charisma  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Joy,

Your essay Tact and Charisma came up on Read & Review. I enjoyed reading a well-written, informational piece. Your thoughts and work that went into comparing the two traits are evident. I miss the times of peace between the ugly wars going on right now. How much of peacetime can be attributed to leaders with tact and charisma who kept war at bay? I see a degree of ugliness underneath some leaders with charisma who were well thought of. Your essay was thought-provoking. My biggest takeaway was that charisma is outward and tact is inward. Thank you for writing about an important topic. Your expertise as a thinker as well as a writer is admirable.

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for entry "Thanksgiving 2023" 
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hello there!

I found your poem Thanksgiving 2023 linked on our newsfeed. It is my first poem of the Fibonacci form. I admit I was surprised so much could be said in so few words. There was the sight of the turkey with the sizzling sound as it cooked, and the fabulous odor as it cooked ready for a feast. The focal point of the holiday brought up a pleasant image in my mind of Thanksgiving in the past. I checked the Writer's Digest. It suggested there are over 100 types of poetry forms. I bet you have used a lot of them! Thanks for the experience. I liked this one a lot.
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Review of Glory's story  
Review by tracker
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Mia,

Your poem Glory's story moved me. When a person is young, they think there is plenty of time to choose the special someone. It is one thing if they just don't find someone to love who loves them back. The lure of someone who is a possibility when older is worth taking the risk.

Keep on writing. I will be back again to see what new pieces you've written.

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Review of Victim of Changes  
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hi Dave,

You achieved a powerful piece here of free verse. Constructed so it looks pleasing to the eyes with the pattern made by the size of the lines.

You shared such a personal hurt. Each word was necessary to paint the horrible picture of a memory that will never go away. I like the pattern, the words that told a huge tale, and the purging of something so traumatic and sad. This is a serious contender for the writing contest. I know you will do well. Keep writing. You are able to write in all these different genres because I think it challenges you. It is a good lesson for me who hides behind exclusive short stories. Bravo for a job well done.

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Review of Sadie's Gone  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Hello Happy Writing,

I found your story on the Shameless “Plug” Page. I am happy to review Sadie’s Gone. The review is based solely on my own opinions. I hope they are helpful.

Overall Impressions: Your story is original and unique. I had absolutely no idea how it would end. Keeping an audience in suspense is the mark of a good story. I liked a lot of dialogue. I found out information about your secondary characters by the words they said and not by you just telling me about them. That is another example of a good story.

What I suggest: Your story has good grammar and perfect spelling. Drawing to your attention are the quotation marks. When you have two thoughts in one response, quotation marks go at the start and end of both remarks. You would want to go in and delete the extra quotation marks. Example: “Did she just move away?” “Did she go on vacation?” You would want to remove the two quotation marks after away, and before "Did".

Congratulations on a clever plot. Your writing style is terrific. It flows well. It would be easier to read if you would please double-space between paragraphs. This is a great start to your portfolio. If you have any questions please let me know.

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Review by tracker
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Jay,

I found your poem The Discipline of Aging Well on the BY ONLINE AUTHORS recommendations. After reading the poem I found the words to the scripture you referenced. It gave me insight into the deeper meaning of your work.

Overall Impression: I related to looking in the mirror and envisioning myself half my age, or more. I was engaged in the piece simply from the title. I was looking for the key to aging well.

What I liked: I like poems with this rhyme pattern. The rhyming words give it a pleasant pace that facilitates understanding. Your description of retirement changing “From mop to pen” is one of the perks of no longer working a traditional eight hours a day, five days a week.

After reading, I read the Bible passage again. I researched “This too shall pass.” I found a theological article explaining the passage in LinkedIn by Plez Lovelady, Jr., PhD, Chancellor of Beulah Bible College & Seminary. His point of view was from a biblical perspective. I put the link below. My mom told me any time I was having a tough time with something "this too shall pass." I appreciated your poem’s fuller meaning from reading the article.

One area that other readers might find natural was the capitalization of some words like “The Staring Man.” I believe this is poetic license. However, it distracted me because I hesitated to figure out why the words were so
important. I also learned the word “blest” which is an archaic form of blessed. For a novice poetry aficionado, like me, it seemed misspelled, yet it wasn’t. Lastly, my personal preference is poetry without exclamation points. It seems a poet is trying to tell me what I should pay more attention to. It has me hesitating again.

Everything here is my personal opinions and observations alone. Please take what is useful to you. Your symbolism is first-rate. This poem has a universal appeal to those of us who are or have experienced looking in the mirror. The most important message for me was to keep going. This is a well-written and very well-rhymed poem. My concerns do not detract from the quality which is why I rated it five stars.

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Review by tracker
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
I love these C-notes. They are colorful. They're also whimsical. It took me a long time to know what a C-note was. I have looked at a couple of places with shops for them. I have this bookmarked so when the occasion arises I will have them sent. Is this something you can purchase and just keep until you want to give it out? I also wanted to know where the images originated. Thanks for continuing to run this source of cute C-notes that are also reasonably priced.
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Review by tracker
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Alicia,

It is tracker again stopping by to see how you are doing. I also looked for a piece of your writing to review. The title of this one The Best Parts of my Childhooddounded like it would be happier than the writing about the awful bullying.

I liked your story about when you were seven and eight. It was wonderful to see you had a smart teacher to say you are an angel. We need positive words said about us in our lives. It gave you confidence. The ability to endure the awful bullying may have been better knowing you were an angel. Your vivid dreams were described very well. The book you drew for your rabbits was a special thing to do. Do you still have it?

Thanks for writing a positive story about the good times. There are some edits needed to correct some things in the way some sentences were written. For example when you said "Me and him" it should be "him and I." You may want to look it over to see if there are places to correct things like that. With that, I have rated this a four and a half stars. I loved it and I love seeing you writing many stories. You are a good writer with lots of details about your experiences. I hope you keep on writing.

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Review of Save the World  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Queen NormaJean walking again,

Bravo on a fabulous flash fiction piece. Incredibly original. Such a strong opening line hooked me solidly. I loved the description of breakfast. I felt like I was sitting near and watched these odd occurrences with the red car and the carriage and skateboarder. It was a tight piece with every word describing then moving the story on to its conclusion. So much was left to the imagination. The only thing I would think about is the genre of "other." We want more people to read this so I would select one that might direct more people to fall upon it just like I did under Read & Review. Great writing and an enjoyable read.

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Review by tracker
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Anna Marie,

I noticed your entry in the Thankful Poetry Contest. I entered the same contest. With my entries already in I thought I would read a few entries. I was so excited about yours that I am giving you this review.

Overall Impression: The first positive is centering the poem so there is a nice shape to it. it sets the mood for clear and concise comments about the nature of things to appreciate and communicate while showing gratitude with an attitude.

I suggest under genres you exchange "other" for another. People look for things they like to read by the genre they are interested in. Educational or emotional could fit.

The structure of the syllables allowed for a lot of clear guides to what is suggested as right and good. There are so many fine points you make in a structure that makes it seem not under any constraints. I hope that makes sense to you. It was a pleasure to read all aspects of life you covered. It brought great reminders to my awareness this evening. I am happy to tell you I hope it does well in the contest. You are an experienced writer and your style is pleasing to the eye, ears, and mind. Good job!

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Review by tracker
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Ncap,

Welcome again to this wonderful writing site. I left a link to a group I am in called disABILITIES Writers Group. You are welcome to click on the picture I posted and come take a look around. A major focus here at WdC is to read and review each other's work. The entry you wrote today "Growing in God's Grace" came up on the Read & Review tab. With a few words, you said a lot. Life has so much to offer, even when it is not the way we would like it to be. Writing out feelings helps organize your mind to stay focused. There are many here willing to help you develop a style or read stories, thoughts, or anything you write and give you some feedback. During the month of November, many members accepted the challenge to write 50,000 words in 30 days. It is called NaNoWriMo. This site is always buzzing with activity. Feel free to ask any questions and keep on writing!

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Review of Lost and found  
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Rated: E | (4.5)

Hi Jaya,

Your story "Lost and Found" came up on the Read & Review option. I see you have been a member for a very long time. This piece is from a few years ago. The review I am doing is just my opinion. I hope it will be useful to you.

Overall impression: The opening two sentences had me engaged right away. I liked the characters. I think I am more like Kay. How could a free trip to the Bahamas go awry?

Your descriptions are vivid and painted the background and form very well. The plot had a twist and turn which made it interesting to read to see what choices they would make. I shudder to think if this was a longer story what would happen?

Mechanically, there are areas for making it easier to read with double spacing, especially with the dialogue. I would give it another edit to complete paragraphs where there is a space then another sentence like here:
"...raining thick driven by a furious wind.
Before long she lost control itself".

You would want to move the sentence starting with Before back up to come directly after wind.

Thanks for the great read. I noticed some recently modified works. I would like to come back and read some others. Keep writing!

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Review by tracker
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi Dave,

I saw your piece "The Tale of the Pumpkin-headed Scarecrow" and wanted to give you a brief review. This is just my opinion so hopefully, there is something useful for you.

Your story is unique and original. I really believed you were not only talking to a scarecrow but that he was talking back to you. You were in control of the dialogue leading up to the twist of your new muse at the conclusion. It was a little difficult to keep up with who was speaking throughout. I did manage and enjoyed the discussion about writing more eloquently.

You do a terrific job. I look forward to more stories from you. If you need a prompt there are scores of them right here under Writing.com Tools. I think it is easier to write when there are not rules of a contest and a deadline to deal with. Thanks for the good read!

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Review by tracker
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Alicia,
A big welcome to you. I am so glad you joined WdC. I found your entry “Childhood Best Friend” on the READ A NEWBIE listed on the right navigation panel. I am honored to review your story. The feedback I give you is just my own opinions. I hope they will be useful to you.
You have had some sad times growing up. What a relief it must have been for you to have a friend who would look out for you and back you up. The bullying you endured had to hurt so much. Children can be so very cruel.
You told your story starting with a terrific opening sentence that got my attention right away. In the sentence, you answered who, what, and where this part of your childhood occurred. I sat up straight when I read the word bullied. I cheered Tori as she was backing you up, like a good friend would do. The games you played like fairies and witches sounded like you used your imagination. It sounded magical. Most of the time having fun is better when another person is enjoying it with you.

I have a suggestion regarding repeating the words “a lot.” It might be more interesting not to repeat the same words. You could substitute the word “often” or “frequently.” I would love to have a little bit of a description of Tori. She was bullied too but it was not clear why. I wonder if she is short or tall, things like that. It would be nice to have some dialogue between you.

Congratulations on a great job. You have a wonderful conversational style. Your writing seems to come naturally. You know how to take your life experiences and write them down in a pleasing form. I noticed several with a similar theme from your childhood. I read a couple of them. Though sad memories, I still immensely enjoyed reading about you and your childhood friend.

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Review by tracker
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hello,
This piece "Things NOT To Do In Barbados" came up on Read & Review. I liked this list of what not to do in Barbados. I wonder what a list would look like for my own city. I liked the way you made your list. The number with what not to do is followed by the next line that explains why. It is so easy to follow that way. There are a couple of things that would really bother me. The biting bugs and the pickpockets. Being in the Caribbean, however, is enticing. I enjoy vacationing in a tropical climate.

Your essay is flawless mechanically. It was an interesting topic that taught me about an exotic vacation destination. I see you write every day so I won't say keep on writing. I will say keep on writing in excellence as you do. I have never been disappointed when I read an entry I may read from your newsfeed posts.

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Review of Warmth  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello and welcome!

I see you have a poem published. I am not sure why it is listed twice. I am pleased to review it. My comments are just my personal opinions. I hope you find it helpful.

"Warmth" truly gave me a warm feeling. The choice of words flowed smoothly. The rhymes were sweet and seemed effortless. It was a pleasure to read it. My favorite line is "reliving, reveling, coveting, experiencing." It gives the poem movement. The lady at the end had spent all of her years with dreams. Her life light had gone out. The contrast between the two quilts was especially effective.

As a suggestion, I mention the genres you assign to your poem. Even though the choice of other is there, it does not give a clue what your piece is about. Readers will look for pieces to read using the genres you assign.

Congratulations on writing your first poem. You have well-developed writing skills. I look forward to seeing new things in the near future. Great job!

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Review by tracker
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello AmyJo-Giving Thanks as I can,

Thank you so much for the breast cancer awareness word search. I am a survivor while mourning my late mom and my older sister. I lived far from each of them so relied on phone and email contact the majority of the time they were will. The word choices were all significant to my experience. I like the pink awareness ribbon as the cover art. It is a wonderful support ribbon with the words resolved, support, and victory among others. It means a lot to know there are compassionate people. You are one of those people to provide this fun word search. Thanks again!

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Review by tracker
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello, Stoneheart,

I followed up, after my welcome note to you, to review a piece of your writing. Except for your books, I read everything else. I wanted to get an idea of your writing style and select one to work with. Your play on the words "Love is a Many Splintered Thing" stood out. I honestly heard the song being sung in my mind when I read it. Here are my thoughts I hope will be useful to you.

Overall impression: You qualified this as just some thoughts and it was written appropriately in a more casual manner. Your queries and statements are similar to things I think about. Most can relate to them.

What I liked: I like your vulnerability to put down personal thoughts. It is a good thing because we all like to know that our own thoughts are not crazy. I found the enigma interesting in that a person can run hot and cold; a universal truth.

A suggestion I have is regarding the genre selection. I am confident you may have no one read with only "other" to direct them. That may be your purpose. Using genres for others to see could be personal, biographical, and emotional.

I enjoyed reading your thoughts. It helps one to get to know more about an author. There is the tab biography you may want to complete. It looks like you are devoting a lot of time to your books. I can't wait to see the final copy. Keep on with your very good writing.

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Review of Staremaster  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Foxtale,

Thank you for requesting a review of Staremaster. I am pleased to provide you with my opinions. I hope they are of value to you.

Overall impression: The words clever and unique came to mind immediately.

What I liked: I liked the conversational tone. The first line hit home when you said you were “supposed to be walking for exercise.” I know how that is. Mister Macho was the ideal name for your jogger. I winced at the contact with the cable. I imagine a male reader would relate even more to that. I can only imagine how that hurt while he was looking around furtively to see if there were any eyes on him. The play on words in the title escaped my notice at first. I looked at it too fast and thought it was Stairmaster. Throughout your story, descriptive word choices showed me clearly what happened. Words like buff, guffawed, gazing in adoration and others made it a good read. The synopsis of the story about balance made sense when I was done reading.

There is only one suggestion for the genre choice. “Other” is really vague. I might substitute entertainment as the third genre. That way those looking for some fun could access your piece using the specific genre search.

Congratulations on the success of your work and this story in particular. I noticed it was modified a few days ago. Whatever you may have revised, it worked. I thought Staremaster was brilliant. Original with humor and double entendre throughout. I don’t read many like this very often. Flawless 5 stars!

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Review by tracker
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi thea marie,

I found your piece showing on "By Online Authors." Here are my observations.

I am lucky you stopped to make your list. I liked the variety of things on it. It is wonderful to know what your want and what makes you happy. What you contribute, like the story you will publish, gives you a feeling of accomplishment. Memories, the good ones, become more important as one ages. What one would think of as a small thing, like pens and paper, is a huge deal for writers. Those are the tools of our trade.

It would be helpful for the reader to number the joyful things. They are listed one after another all together. Perhaps double spacing will make it easier to read and more helpful for you to refer back to your list.

Thank you for sharing things that bring you joy. I tell others never let anyone steal your joy. Keep up the positive joyful things in your life.

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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Hello Mayron57,

I found your story “The Lily White Boys” on the right panel In By Online Authors. The title attracted my attention. I am pleased to give you this review. These are only my opinions. I hope this is helpful to you.

Overall Impression: The first thing I noticed was the large font making it very easy to read. Thank you for doing that. I liked your characters as you showed them to us through the dialogue. It moved the story along while vividly stopping with the several people who were getting sucked into the concrete. I knew just enough about them to care about what was happening to them.

There is one word correction with the word “adults’s.” Adults is already plural. The apostrophe after the s makes it possessive so it would be “adults’ obtuseness.”

You are a marvelous storyteller. Your story is original, creative, and unique. Bravo and thank you for giving me a great story to read.

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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hello,

You may remember me recently leaving you birthday wishes. I came back to review one piece you wrote as a newbie sixteen years ago. It had no title which I had not seen here before. I am attributing that to being a newbie.

Overall impression: The genres gave me a preview of what your poem was about. Your poem stood out aesthetically because it is written entirely in italics. I have always been in love with love and that is what I was ready for.

You were true to your genres. From “I wake: my Heart is Singing” to “Encircling my globe” I was all in. I saw your spirit soaring and felt it float. I liked the flow, the words, the sentiments, and every other thing about your personal love poem. Who would not want to be the object of your affection?

Suggestion: A title, please.

You are a wonderful talent. I want to be moved by words. I want to be taken in and taken away to a memorable experience. I had both of those wants fulfilled. Thank you. Your poetic voice is eminently supreme. Kudos for a work to be proud of. Even without a title, your otherwise flawless poem is rated five.

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Review by tracker
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello Mãlík

I saw your story on the panel on the right of my screen called by online authors. I am honored to review “The Power Of Your Subconscious Mind.” These are solely my opinions. I hope they are helpful to you.

Overall impression: The title caught my attention. I was intrigued. Your poem is true to the title. You shared philosophy in a poetic story. The syllables flowed with words that gelled. It felt like it poured out of you with the knowledge you had to tell. Your skill at using specific rhyming words is awesome.

I liked the context of your poem the most. The mind is still a mystery to science. Your descriptions like “Gospel consciously starts to sink” and “A sponge-like blank state of a child” show the activity actively and visually. The message you reveal in “Your subconscious is malleable; you can change it to mend your life. What a great source of hope. The statistics of ten percent reality as things happen with ninety percent being how you look at them is a dramatic figure. Knowing all things in your life depends on choices puts the onus on you to change or adjust as needed.

Suggestion: I so much want this to be in quatrains. Reading one line at a time tends to have me pause then read the next line as if it is the next chapter in a narrative. Congratulations on having no mechanical errors.

Thank you for passing along what you learned. I got out of it that if things don’t work out it is most likely because of the choices you made. It is so easy to blame anything or anyone instead. Great writing. I am rating it 4.5 stars for the little bit of difficulty reading it one line at a time.

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Review of Uncle and Nephew  
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Hi Sonali,

What a clever poem. I happened to read the book for a college class assignment. I am happy to give you this review that tells my opinion only. Take what resonates with you.

Overall impression: Your poem is solid. The pace and rhyme just sang to me. I should have had your poem to sum up the plot instead of reading over 300 pages! I was left with a good feeling reading quality work.

Suggestion: For those who may not be familiar with the story, I am not sure it can stand alone without maybe a hint in your description they are from 'The Lord of the Rings."

Thank you for using the daily prompts. Your work is beautiful laid out with the poem centered. It looks nice and is a great read. Keep the writing coming!

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Review of The Fading Shadow  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Sumojo,
Your "The Fading Shadow" appeared on read & review. I am happy to give you my review. This is only my opinion. The opening line grabbed my attention right away. Learning you had a shadow intrigued me. Following up by revealing you are an only child conjured up some of the stereotypes. For me, I envied only children. They would assuredly have their own room. I was sixteen before I had one of my own.

The suggestion I have is to double space when you write "But that was then" so you know it is a new paragraph. The rest of the mechanics are perfect.

I felt bad about the outcome meaning you can no longer see your shadow. He is still beside you even if you can't see him. I like your writing very much. You have a good way of telling a story even one of exactly one hundred words which was your assignment. I encourage you to keep writing. I see you recently posted that you had revised a piece. That is something we don't do often due to the fast pace and keeping up with other activities like contests. Thank you for sharing your story.

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