This is a good, simple to answer survey. I enjoyed taking it. To me, poetry is awesome. I enjoy saying something so profound in such little words. Check out some of my poetry. Teardrift is one of my favorites. weeowl
Interesting story although it does need some work. The tenses are scattered (past and present mainly) You've got a good thing going here! Keep it up. Weeowl
This poem has an interesting effect. First, you're missing an "s" in the first line word: LIVE(S). So the first few lines I'm bombarded with the word love, so I feel that mood...almost sickening (hehehe) Then you slam me with the anger and hate and passion which is what I identify with better at this moment. I understood what you were getting at and I appreciate this wide range of emotions you brought with this poem. Very interesting ;) write on! Weeowl
There are no words for me at this moment. I pause. I have volumes to say in my head, but my tears are holding them back. My own experience with a drunk driver on a cool december night almost two years ago reverberate in my mind. I'm going to his Grave two days from now to celebrate his birthday. Please read The Hit in my portfolio. I want to say so much...and yet, I'm silenced. Weeowl
WAY TO GO GENEVA!!! I experience this exact thing. You think you've got all those barriers safely up and then someone comes along and gets in. And though they "aren't the one" we get to learn something from them, whether it be something about ourself or something about people in general...or in this case, you learned about the undying power of love. Great job, my friend, great job! WRITE ON :D Weeowl
Wow! This is incredible! I was drawn into the story from the title. I was right there with her as she faced this horror. I've experienced something not like this, but similar. I enjoyed this story from word one. Your character was well written, I felt her emotions, her troubles, her anger, her struggle with witnessing it all, or witnessing enough and letting go. I loved the end! It filled me with a sense of power and freedom! Thank you for sharing this awesome piece with us! I am honored to have read it! Weeowl
Oh this is clever! I thoroughly enjoyed it. I found myself questioning right along with the questioner. I at first thought...a person. But then as lines were mentioned, I began wondering, 'is this thing human at all?' That's awesome when you take the theme and match the words to create the same effect. Quite clever indeed! Weeowl
I like this. It IS a place where the impossible is possible...a place where a heart can soar with not attachments. You did a great job here. I enjoyed it. Weeowl
This is good. I understand what's going on and it's a great theme to write on. I was especially struck by the first few lines. The only line that was confusing was the first line of the second stanza. Please correct that and it should flow smoothly again :D. Great job. Weeowl
OH I LOVE THIS!!! The beach is so comforting and to see that writing of the problem in the sand is touching. I might try the same thing when I go this coming month. I was at the beach on my birthday. I woke up before sunrise and greeted this new year with a pretty spectacular sunrise. What better way to start a new year? Thanks for bringing the shore close to me again right now. Weeowl
Wow! This is incredible! I saw the image and then I FELT the words which left me breathless. With my experience of Goddesses, you nailed it! They are beautiful, seductive, and sensual. To them, and it is a theory I've adopted, Love is a sensual experience...taste, touch, smell, sight, and sound. Well written! Weeowl
Good work. I could feel the pain of those thorns in my heart. One minor spelling problem 8 lines from the bottom: Can YOUR turn my black roses red? As a topic related to this poem, The person you're looking for is right in front of you when you face the mirror. How do I love myself? you may ask. Acknowledge the simple things you do. Although we feel most pain in our heart, Love is a sensual experience. Touch, yourself or another, taste love in good food, wine, chocolate covered strawberries, hear the song of love and peace that a dove sings to you, smell the red roses that beckon to feel your nose on its petals, see the wonder that you exhude. And that's my little rant on that :P I was touched by this poem. I've felt your pain. There is hope and I'm not just saying that. One day, you will believe it too. Write On! :) Weeowl
Wow! Incredible! BRAVO! :D I love this poem. My favorite lines are "Their Ikea inspired Isolation cells" and "trapped in a metropolitan jungle." Your descriptions are perfect! I see these people and I feel their pain. Fabulous writing! I look forward to reading more of your work! Write on! ;) weeowl
I feel your pain. You wrote a really great poem here, the longing for a few more minutes...the missing of the simplist moments...the touch of a hug...all of the above and so much more. I hope that through your writing you can heal this loss. May you find peace in your mourning. Blessings to you...weeowl
BRAVO Phoenix! you have strong characters, well developed conflict, action, and a lot of emotion! I didn't read part 1, but you made that not matter. I enjoyed this and felt the emotions of Arden, the fear of cam, and the ignorance of Julie. I'm highly impressed with your talent. There are a few misspellings so you might want to go back and edit those. Simple things that you mistyped while in the heat of the story! Thank you for writing this and write on! ;D weeowl
hey Kindredspirit! First I love your name. Second, I love this poem! You did a wonderful job. My favorite line is "Speak Written Word, not your mind" That is a powerful statement! YOU GO! Write ON! :D I feel this poem and I appreciate that. Thank you for sharing. Weeowl
Wow! This is incredible writing. I really felt it which is what I'm trying to accomplish today. I need to feel the pain...and this...worked...My body is tense and I want to run away, instead I'll write to get the pay. :P Poetry is non-stop. Thank you, thank you, thank you! Weeowl
WOW!!! Thank you for writing this! You have me smiling so wide! I thoroughly enjoyed this! Why? because you took me through those dives and waterfalls. What an amzing ride! You have amazing talent. Please keep writing! I look forward to reading more. Weeowl
I found myself crying at this. Your writing really touches something inside of me. I grew up quicker than I expected. Abuse in preschool, learning all about lukemia the first day of kindergarten by a friend who had it. Seeing the blow that caused her death. Buried in leaves after playing with neighborhood boys. Yet, today, I am soaring high. My dreams are coming true and I am unstoppable! There was one typo that I noticed. Second stanza 3rd line "clowns maker her laugh" Emotional writing is the best. I hope somehow this child can embrace the joy no matter what age. Healing hugs to you! Weeowl
ACK! This is going to keep bumping around in my head all day. Hello May I help you? I don't know if the repetition works here. I think it does. It makes you bump your head against a brick wall. But you did a good job here. It's definitely unforgetable Hello can I help you? :D LOL Weeowl
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