Wow! I found myself holding my breath to see who would win! This was a creative and compelling story that kept me on the edge of my seat! It was also interesting to see that the offices of EBAY were physically effected by the battle waged by Heaven and Hell. I saw my friends and that alone provided comfort. Raphael, Michael, Gabriel, and all the ArchAngels really rock! I wonder where my soul would wind up. Great story! Write on! Weeowl
so far the replies for my cries have been amazing. This forum is a place where a person can reach out and be heard. As I get worse, the prayers are going up. My uncle even added me to the prayer list at his church. I pray too. perhaps soon these prayers will be answered. Angels have what it takes to save a life so that many more will be saved. Weeowl
Great poem. You ask some or most of the very questions I'm asking today. In this darkness I wonder what to do now, where to go, how to find fulfillment. Do I really matter? I am dead inside and I'm searching for the defibulator to bring me back to life. Messages I've received have helped...It shows that I'm being heard...somewhere. What do I feel the emptiness with? What can I do to make me feel better? Any answers? Weeowl
Great poem. Hits close to home. Searching for "me" right now...run into a wall of anguish that I really don't like. I"m listless and on edge. Perhaps a good dose of journaling is what I need. Heck, I don't know what I need. Did you come up with anything? Sharing is caring. Weeowl
Wow this is a heartwarming story. Your description of the scenery took me right there where you were. I looked on as one of those patrons at the coffee shop...it smelled so good, I couldn't resist. I enjoyed the feeling of reuniting with loved ones. This story encourages and inspire doing the right thing. Thank you! Weeowl
:) I can't help but applaud you! I had the realization today that getting attention through self destructive behavior is exactly what I've been doing. I understood that I need to change my mind about living in this physical restraint. I need to see the joy...so I'm making a joy list. I just identified with this. Good job. Weeowl
Wow! You took me through an emotional rollercoaster ride with this work of art. I felt anger, sadness, joy, pain, shock, and extreme joy. The last line is PERFECT! What a way to end it. Now there is pattern to your sentences, perhaps you can look at different sentence structures through google and use some in your writing. It adds a little spice to it. My editor told me to do the same thing :) so it's common. Great piece! Write on! Weeowl
This was really interesting and well written. At first, you were very hard on yourself. As paragraph after paragraph came, you lightened up on yourself and let your spirit gently bump suggestions around. It was pretty cool to experience that. Thank you! Write on! Weeowl
Wow. This was scary for me. I felt this child's love and determination and then when mummy comes home and to see her response, I felt the fear. Not only was the painting spoiled, but this child's spirit was spoiled. It reminded me of how many times I've been crushed like this. Great flashfiction! Weeowl
What a perfect way to describe the state of confusion you are or were in. I hate to say it, but I'm sort of in the same boat. He's a friend who moved in on every aspect of my life. I'm losing myself in him and I want my house back darnit! He's toxic to me. Did anyone give you advice on this, because I sure need some. Weeowl
Great job! You really calmed me just by reading your words. Quit(e)...you forgot the "e." Show me what your eyes see...tell me colors of vibrance, show me the life you see among nature. I agree, nature is really great therapy. It releases endorphins. I heard a report yesterday that said "we're spending too much time indoors." That's sad. I'm going to stretch my legs now and breathe in nature. Way to write, inspire, and inform! Weeowl
I like the concept of this poem. I have to admit that there were a few spots that caused me confusion. Line: 12..perhaps there needs to be another word there. who or what hit the right note to save him? Also there is something interesting about feeding the birds weird noises...I like the imagery you use. I love the message in this poem as well. Write on! Weeowl
Like needing air so frequently, I must write multiple times a day. I write at work and at home I write with people and alone I write to breathe and breathe to write so that one day I'll be free because writing is that golden key. I can escape my horrors of daily life and be entertained by my characters as they tell me what's going on. I'm happiest when I write...even the hard chapters...I'm almost finished w/ revision 3! If I could, I'd write 24-7 but of course I need sleep and my wrist begins cramping and there is that whole needing to go to the bathroom annoyance :) LOL Then I must do research and travel to get that research. I enjoyed Chicago and will have to go back there for more in depth research, and ALABAMA was like home to me. Gotta go there again too. Feeling these cities and the richness of the history there was incredible. Chicago is basically floating...tons of water runs beneath the city...that's why it's relatively haunted. Alabama has the whole civil rights history there and they care about each other...or so it felt...:P I don't mean to ramble...GREAT QUESTION! Now I"m gonna go read your pagan writings! Had to answer the poll first though...weeowl
Bravo on asking this question. I believe in God, Jesus, the Holy Ghost, and angels. Aside from the fact that I've seen, heard, and felt them all, believing in something is good. It's a great way to cope. I like the things in the bible, but I also see it as a great work of art. I actually studied it as such in college. That was interesting. Good question. Weeowl
This was definitely a unique question. Bravo on that! Now, as far as what I think of when I hear the name Bruce...I immediately thought of Bruce Almighty. Then I thought of Bruce Willis. Then I took out the U and replaced it with an A thinking of my antagonist Brace. Wow! :D I didn't realize one name could make you think of so many things. I liked the option of the chubby boy with candy. That lead me to Bruce Willis in the movie "The Kid" Good job! Weeowl
I love golden retrievers, but I also find that Boston Terriers are sweeties as well :) Thanks for bringing the sunshine of puppylove to my eyes on this dark and dreary january day! I had a lab and yes, I love them too :) He was such a good dog. Hopefully Duke will be there when I go :) Weeowl
I really enjoyed this. First, it's a powerful message. Even though the chains were shattered on the grave, you actually helped me go to that light and remember that when I don't have the fight in me, someone higher does. So you saved me from the worry of having to fight. Something Greater than me can do that. I just have to breathe and LET THEM do their thing. Thanks for saving my life. LOVE Weeowl
you captured the writing process for sure! I am working on the third revision of my first novel. I've felt the stress factor, but I LOVE EVERY MINUTE OF IT! I start a chapter with a concept and then the story leads me on many exciting twists and turns. I had a hard time finding the word poems, but other than that it was fun! Way to go. Weeowl
Wow this is a very emotional poem that takes your readers on a journey of abuse. I liked the image of the cracked mirror. I've learned that we are a reflection of others. He was cracked. You are strong and hopefully you can slowly pick up the pieces and create something new. Best of luck to you, especially as a new year approaches. Weeowl
Ack! I read this because I'm anorexic. I have a poem about it called Deprivation. You might want to check it out. It's the anorexic point of view. I hate it. Every day I obsess over food. I dread breakfast, lunch, dinner...but I do eat...most of the time. Growing up, I heard about weight the entire time. One Thanksgiving dinner was ruined when we heard a spiel from my uncle that was selling diet supplements. I took those and wound up getting ill from it. My anorexia started when I moved to CA. I knew I was in trouble when I almost passed out going up a ramp. I never really talked about it...I just ate. Five years later it's come back with a vengence. Trying to deal with it, but it is a constant struggle. Your poem speaks to me and I hope your friend gets help. Weeowl
Bravo! You accomplished what the contest wanted. In a brief amount of words, you have scenery, you have emotions, you have what's going on (someone is away on a tour of duty) and you have who is looking at this full moon...the Mom. Highly touching and I greatly enjoyed reading this! Weeowl
I know you can't hear it, but I'm clapping for you :) I love these vows. It's about accepting the person just the way they are. The words are well chosen and clever. You really got the love in there. My favorite line is when you say, "You are my hunny bunch, my sweetie pie and dear..." It just brought a smile to my face...and gave it that intimate twist. Great job! Weeowl
great job! I must say that I'm a little confused if this is a dream...or only in dreams can you love her. The bloody tears are a great and poignant image. A line that is really good is: I am just only me. At this point, I feel a sense of acceptance and then you continue loving whomever it is. Weeowl
wow! this is a very chilling poem. I wonder if she purposely threw herself back because it was placed after you mentioned wanting a knife. If I were in prison I would sit there and contemplate my death. The guilt of whatever I did to get me in there would be too great to bear. To be a teenager in this spot...I don't know. Great poem. Weeowl
Wow! excellant job! I was on pins and needles the entire time. You took me through all sorts of emotions from fear, to confusion, to fear again, to horror, to holy crap batman! :P That ending was quite a surprise and a delight. I gasped and was like "He knew! He did it on purpose!" What does Jason do next? keep writing! Weeowl
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