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Printed from https://www.writing.com/main/books/item_id/2156493-The-Book-of-Masks-Homepage/day/10-17-2020
by Seuzz Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 18+ · Book · Other · #2156493

A hub for the "Book of Masks" universe.

The Interactives
"The Book of MasksOpen in new Window.: A high school student discovers a grimoire that can make magical disguises.
"The Wandering StarsOpen in new Window.: Sequel to "The Book of Masks."
"Student BodiesOpen in new Window.: A high school student is turned into a blue goo that can possess people.
"Student Bodies: Transfer StudentsOpen in new Window.: Reboot of "Student Bodies."

For non-WdC Members
"The Book of Masks: ArchivesOpen in new Window.: Dodges the "Servers Busy" barrier!
"The Book of Masks (Abridged)Open in new Window.: Introductory storylines for new readers.

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"BoM/TWS Message ForumOpen in new Window.: Community for readers of the interactives.
"BoM/TWS/SB WikiOpen in new Window.: Notes and documentation for authors. Spoilers!

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6/30: Interactive: "Golems Three-ishOpen in new Window.
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October 17, 2020 at 5:57pm
October 17, 2020 at 5:57pm
#996128
Sometimes you have to get a project entirely out of your head before you're able to work on something else. I have a feeling it's going to turn out to be that way with the "Incredible Hulk" script. TBH, I'm having a hard time reading and polishing my BoM chapters—

Oh, latest now up: "Memories From Another MeOpen in new Window. (interactive) and "Memories from Another MeOpen in new Window. (public)

—while I've got this script inside my brain. Never mind writing new BoM stuff.

The script that I published as part of BoM was based on a watching of a single episode of the series. But I went back onto Daily Motion afterward and watched a bunch more, and found that my script was somewhat out of continuity with the rest of the series. I also found that both my version and the original episode didn't quite capture the nature of the relationship between Bruce Banner/Hulk and Rick Jones, at least as it is dramatized in the other episodes.

So that left me dissatisfied with what I'd written.

Then, too, I discovered that, far from being too short, my script was far too long. I did a partial transcription of an episode -- writing it out in the same format and degree of detail as I'd used in my script -- and found that it was working out to about 1 minute of screen time per page. [**] At 29 pages, my script was way too long for a 22-minute cartoon.

So I spent yesterday and today revising the whole thing. I started by shortening dialogue and tightening conversations. Then I ruthlessly chucked out a couple of scenes and radically truncated others while adding some new ones. By the time I was finished, there was little left from Michael Reaves's original script save for the Puppet Master's ability to spy on and copy people on the streets. It might still be slightly too long, coming in at 22 1/4 pages instead the 22 even that it should be at.

I've left the BoM version up, and posted the revised version as a standalone item in my Portfolio, for any that are curious: "Invalid ItemOpen in new Window.

[**] The one-page-per-minute rule is a common one when judging movie scripts. Apparently TV scripts tend to run a little longer. There seems to be very little consensus on how long an animated-TV script should run. Many cartoon scripts are typically very detailed on shot breakdowns, which means they run closer to a rate of 2-pages-per-minute. But because I'm eschewing as much "shot" detail as possible, my script wound up running closer to the usual length.


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