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a-RO/-mas FROM/ the KITCH/-en BRING/ fond MEM/-o-RIES/ = 6 feet of OLD/-en DAYS/, when LILT/Ping LAUGH/-ter OFT/-en RANG/ = 6 feet through-OUT/ this HOUSE in MERR/i-MENT as CHILD/-ren PLAYED/. = 6 feet too SOON/, the SURG/-ing TIDES/ of TIME/ would SWEEP/ us ALL/ = 6 feet a-WAY/ to MEET our DES/-tin-IES/ pre-SCRIBED/ by FATE/. = 6 feet Tetrameter is 4 feet; 6 feet is hexameter. You have the right idea, but there are a few flaws in your iambic pentameter: i WATCH/ as IN/ the DARK/-en-ing LIGHT/ Four feet is tetrameter, not pentameter, and the last foot is an anapest. the DAY/ comes TO/ a CLOSE/. Three feet is trimeter. but HEAR/ the FALL/-ing OF/ the NIGHT Four feet is tetrameter. when LIFE'S/ song IS/ trans-POSED/. Three feet is trimester. bare BRANCH/-es REST/ a-GAINST/ the SKY/ Four feet is tetrameter in STARK/ lines GROW/-ing THIN, Three feet is trimester. as DAY turns once MORE/ to NIGHT/, The stress points here are questionable, but I do not see more than three feet in any case. streaked navy sky grows dim. Again, the stresses are unclear, but you have only six syllables. Iambic pentameter contains ten syllables. All creatures caught in daylight’s fade Create a raucous noisy din- Oh no! Dark coldness now creeps in; Life’s song is transposed-silence again. Yes, mastering meter takes a lot of practice, but the end result is well worth the effort, in my humble opinion. Let the creativity flow from your soul! Dave "The Poet's Place " |