Hi SylphLuna !

I found your short story on the Noticing Newbies page and it looked interesting so I thought I'd take a look. Here are my thoughts.

Characters:

Logan, and the unnamed female character, who I'm assuming is a fairy.

Plot:

Logan is awoken to a voice that sings to him in his sleep.

Setting:

Logan's bedroom.

Narration: Voice, Tone, Exposition, Metaphors/Similes, Basic Storytelling and Diction:

The voice is third person, and the tone is suspenseful. The exposition is given in small doses, which is good. The diction is great.

Dialogue:

There was little dialogue, but since it was so short of a story, it was fine. The dialogue that was there was believable.

Beginning and Ending:

The beginning was quite interesting, and captivated my interest. The ending was sad, and a little mysterious, as I wasn't sure why they were saying "Goodbye" to each other, but maybe the mystery was intentional.

Errors:

None found.

Suggestions:

I would let us know the name of the fairy so that we can visualize her even more. Also, don't overuse the ellipsis, the ... throughout the story. Once is enough, otherwise it loses its effect.

Summary:

This was a beautiful and at the end sad story of a couple that loved each other without even knowing it, who finally met at long last, but then had to part ways. It had so much content in such a short span of words, so well done on that.

Thanks for sharing your talent, and keep writing!