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 Review #3980867 |
 | I'm floating in space again  [E] A recurring dream about the Earth  |
| (4.0)  Overall Impression Your dream created a gorgeous piece of prose. The entire piece was mystifying and mesmerizing. Diving In The first paragraph is effectively disorienting. The concept of 'nothing' can be comforting, as in 'nothing really matters at all,' or horrifying, as you expressed. I'm not an interpreter of dreams, so this is not commentary. What an odd object (whip) to appear in this type of dream. It brings to mind cowboy westerns, and is contrasted immediately by modern day satellites. Outstanding imagery presenting first glance at earth. You caught me with the image of "popping." We think of so many ways to destroy our planet, and the verb you chose brings forth the delicacy and vulnerability of our home we carelessly use. The simplicity of this line was evocative and striking. This is all I need to keep me alive. I was almost upset with your dream when I read about the whales using their flippers to propel you. I had this whole mystical, magical mood, and the flipping image created seemed cartoon-ish compared to the other paragraphs. We can't edit our dreams, though! Fine Tuning ▼ Closing thoughts I applaud your style bringing this dream to the conclusion. Using a full stop between [appreciate] and [How] created a much greater impact than what might have been traditionally punctuated.   My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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