Hello, ~Minja~!

I'm offering you this review in celebration of Earth Day, which is marked on the 22^nd April every year, and on behalf of "The Earth Day Challenge" 

Thank you for being aware of our planet and the environment.

What I liked

I really like this. I absolutely ADORE what you've done with the shape, ie. the zephyr effect near the bottom, making this look like a swirl of autumnal leaves. Very, very visual and awesome, especially the "slowly" bit, which has a kind of onomatopoeia like effect of forcing the reader to read slowly, s l o w l y, so that we get the slow falling sound, too. Awesome! You should do well in the Shadows and Light contest, imho!

What might need work

Since this is personification, and you speak about Death like a person within your poem when you're a leaf, I think you should capitalise Death like any name.

… withered, weak / to live for another spring. - I think you need "withered, too weak / to live" to make this clearer.

the sky offers dancing performance - sounds a bit awkward. Perhaps simply: the sky offers to dance

Thank you for sharing!

Best wishes,

Bob






My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .