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Greetings, Roland!

Welcome to this wondrous writing community and to "The Poet's Place " Open in new Window. group, in particular. You are off to a great start by populating your port, finding your way around to the various activities available on this vast site, and meeting lots of new folks during your first three months among us. The following observations are offered in the interest of friendly hospitality and constructive support, but they are nothing more than one man's opinions, so take them or leave them for whatever you think they may be worth.

TITLE:

Unless your name is William Shakespeare, or that of some other famous poet, whose reputation is enough to attract a fawning audience, the title is one of the most important elements of any composition. As the only thing a prospective reader will see while scanning the list of items in a writer’s port or the Table of Contents in a book, it serves as the door which must be opened to enter the realm of the writer’s imagination. A name gives the composition a specific identity. It sets the tone and prepares the reader for what is to come. If that entrance does not spark some sort of interest, chances are he or she will move along to the next item, or maybe even the next author.

The title of this poem invites that browser to share a familiar intimate experience with its implication of repeated circumstances through the plural form of the name identifying a specific weekday.

FORM & STRUCTURE:

In traditional poetry, the fixed shape of the meter, rhyme, and stanza creates an emotional distance which facilitates universal acceptance. The poet writing free verse must compensate for the lack of traditional structure by designing the title, line, stanza, and rhythm to provide the greatest impact in an efficient manner. Otherwise, the poem will be nothing more than prose in disguise. Careful design of the word selection and arrangement, the length and density of each line, and the breakdown of stanzas must provide a natural rhythm. That is, through much toil in search of precise language, experimentation with forming lines and stanzas, and extensive revision, the poet carefully crafts a work that appears natural, authentic, and convincing to the reader.

Although the single body of text seems to be in fashion these days, I believe you could help to control the pacing and sharpen the focus by dividing the composition into several stanzas. The stanza breaks would help to control the pacing and sharpen the focus, offering the reader an opportunity to absorb each impression more completely before moving along to the next.

IMAGERY:

Imagery is the lifeblood of a poem. Like a craftsman carving, molding, painting, and polishing wood, stone, clay, or some other material, the poet uses words to shape and paint pictures which present some lyrical impulse or spiritual truth. Rather than TELLING the audience about those feelings, the poet SHOWS the impressions through distinct images that project emotional overtones and associations with other images and events. In this way, the poet stirs an emotional response from the reader.

The specificity of detail paints a distinct picture of this scene and engages the reader's senses to draw him into the portrayed experience.

OVERALL IMPRESSION:

Just as the conductor of a symphony orchestra controls the tempo and power of the music with a delicate nuance, a poet guides the pace and force of the poem by manipulating sounds through word selection and arrangement. The rhythm may be smooth or choppy, fast or slow, measured or free, depending on the effect you are trying to create. The rhythms in the language of your poetry serves the same purpose as the background music in a movie, putting the viewer/reader in the right frame of mind to receive your images with the greatest impact. Thank you for sharing this enchanting interlude!

Here's wishing you fair winds as you continue to navigate this universe known as Writing.Com.

Let the creativity flow from your soul! *Cool*
Dave
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