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 The Trial of Good Ole' Saint Nick Open in new Window. [E]
Someone is taking Santa to court,but who? A little short for the spirit of the Holiday.
by Kerr Cole Author Icon
Review by Dave Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Greetings, Kerr!

Welcome to this wondrous writing community. You are off to a great start in populating your port in the short two weeks you have been among us. The following observations are offered as part of the "Invalid Item" Open in new Window. for our "WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group" Open in new Window., but they are no more than one person's opinions, so take them or leave them for whatever you think they may be worth.

TITLE:

Unless your name is Stephen King, or that of some other famous author, whose reputation is enough to attract a fawning audience, the title is one of the most important elements of any composition. It sets the tone and prepares the reader for what is to come. If that entrance does not spark some sort of interest, chances are he or she will move along to the next item, or maybe even the next author.

The title of this little tale lures that prospective reader through the gateway to your imagination by stirring his curiosity about what "Good Ole' Saint Nick" could have done to deserve going to trial.

PLOT:

You have certainly concocted a creative set of developments all motivated by Timmy's extreme desire to seek vengeance upon Kris Kringle for not fulfilling his sworn duty.

NARRATIVE:

There are a few glitches in the logic of sequence. For example, in the second paragraph, your narrator states that "For an entire year Timmy has been in his room...", but later in that same paragraph, "...it was only July", which is only half a year. These minor discrepancies can easily be corrected with a closer examination.

OVERALL IMPRESSION:

This was an entertaining exposition with an entirely unexpected resolution. Thank you for sharing this product of your fertile imagination!

Here's wishing you fair winds as you continue to navigate this universe known as Writing.Com.

Let the creativity flow from your soul! *Cool*
Dave
"The Poet's Place " Open in new Window.
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