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A few quick lines about writing
by Willow0073 Author Icon
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Review by Dave Author IconMail Icon
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Greetings, Willow!

Welcome to this wondrous writing community. You are off to a great start in populating your port and finding your way around to the various activities this throughout this vast site during the short three months that you have been among us. The following observations are offered in the interest of friendly hospitality and constructive support, but they are nothing more than one man's opinions, so take them or leave them for whatever you think they may be worth.

TITLE:

The title is a critical element of your composition, because it is the portal through which a prospective reader must pass to enter the realm of your imagination. If that entrance does not spark some sort of interest, chances are he or she will move along to the next item, or maybe even the next author.

The title of this poem lures that browser across the threshold with a picture of the most important part of this process: capturing the writer's thoughts on paper before they can flitter away like fireflies in the night.

FORM & STRUCTURE:

In traditional poetry, the fixed shape of the meter, rhyme, and stanza creates an emotional distance which facilitates universal acceptance. The poet writing free verse must compensate for the lack of traditional structure by designing the title, line, stanza, and rhythm to provide the greatest impact in an efficient manner. Otherwise, the poem will be nothing more than prose in disguise. Careful design of the word selection and arrangement, the length and density of each line, and the breakdown of stanzas must provide a natural rhythm. That is, through much toil in search of precise language, experimentation with forming lines and stanzas, and extensive revision, the poet carefully crafts a work that appears natural, authentic, and convincing to the reader, and you have done just that in this captivating composition.

POETIC TECHNIQUE:

Just as the conductor of a symphony orchestra controls the tempo and power of the music with a delicate nuance, a poet guides the pace and force of the poem by manipulating sounds through word selection and arrangement. The rhythm may be smooth or choppy, fast or slow, measured or free, depending on the effect you are trying to create. The rhythms in the language of your poetry serves the same purpose as the background music in a movie, putting the viewer/reader in the right frame of mind to receive your images with the greatest impact.

The crisp phrasing in this composition generates a smooth rhythm to propel the reader through this experience very nicely, and your narrator's application of the Personification technique ( https://literarydevices.net/personification/ ) to describe the words ensures your audience's full engagement throughout.

OVERALL IMPRESSION:

Art happens in two places: in writers' minds as they create it, and in readers' minds as they perceive it. Poets explore possibilities through a lens colored by past experience and shares them with an unseen audience. They call upon a unique reservoir of such enlightenment, conceptual skill and innovative research to project some spiritual sensation upon the screen of the audience's imagination--be it joy, melancholy, shock, or any of a thousand others. In this presentation, you have vividly captured that joy writers get from this process. Thank you for sharing!

Have you considered entering the "Shadows and Light Poetry Contest" Open in new Window.?

If you are interested in learning more about the craft of composing poetry, or merely chatting among like-minded wordsmiths, we would love to have you join our discussions in "The Poet's Place " Open in new Window. group.

Here's wishing you fair winds as you continue to navigate this universe known as Writing.Com.

Let the creativity flow from your soul! *Cool*
Dave
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