Hi and thank you for sharing your item with me . Camping is this a man thing in the USA? In the films it's always a father and son event and they go hunting. You have written the item well and in a description and detail of how you felt being away from home. Although I would have broken the story into paragraphs with a space between them, It's just how I would but the item is okay as it is.

At one point in your camping experience, you thought you heard a bear, Oh, my God I would have had a fit, just coming across a dog in the wild would have be frightening moment, and I love dogs.

The item is neatly displayed and the storyline is in a bright back ground and well clear for reading. Sounds like you had a challenge at the summer camp during the vocation, and you must have survived or you wouldn't be writing about it.
I had no distractions so therefore there is no need to suggest changes.

I enjoyed the read and the story kept my interest all the way to the end. Overall impression A well written account of your camping trip. Mary Ann MCPhedran, a member of reviewing with river.





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