Wow this story gets more interesting, thank you for sharing with me. First it is an interesting plot and without giving anything away, and you keep your readers in susspence.

The item is designed and displayed well and you have given exciting details of your story. I was on the edge of my seat when you were in the lift and when you met your husband. You chose a foremat easy to read and this is good, because the words were just the right size for any age group to be able to read in comfort.
I have no preference to a favourite line I liked all of the story. The story has structured your item well and the imagery blends into the storyline and flows well.
I found no reason to suggest any changes as the story has no errors and needs no edits any of the passage.
I enjoyed reading your item and I can't wait to read the next one. A job well done.

Overall impression A well written item with an interesting story line. keep writing . MARY ANN MCPHEDRAN a member of reviewing with River.

















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