First of all, my reviews are intended to be helpful and encouraging, not hurtful in any way. Use what you feel works for you, and leave the rest.
What I Liked
First of all, my favorite lines are:
Line 3: People wanting a better life -
Line 7: Give me your huddled masses -
Line 10: Our ancestors were immigrants
I feel very much like you do, AmyJo, though my husband has brought up a few points that should be considered, also. I just wish there was a solution. While camping at Organ Pipe National Monument a month or so ago, near Lukeville, Arizona (on the border), we noticed several Border Patrol vehicles and helicopters in the area. I spoke with a few of the locals from the area, and two different women found it disturbing to watch how the immigrants were treated. I know there's two sides to this, and I don't feel like I know enough about it to comment too much further, but like I said...I feel very much like you do.
I felt that your choice of the courier font was perfect for this piece! Your poem also flowed nicely. Nice work!
Suggestions/Comments to Consider
I have no suggestions for consideration.
Final Thoughts
Well-written, AmyJo. You spoke from your heart.
Have a great day and... K e e p on W r i t i n g ! Cubby ")
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