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Voice on the Bench  [E] a poem from my book Luck`s a Liar  |
| Greetings, Bi0Hazard! Welcome to this international community of writing inspiration and support. The following observations are offered in the spirit of friendly hospitality and constructive support, but they are nothing more than one person's opinions, so take them or leave them for whatever you think they may be worth. TITLE: The title is the first step in the process of engaging an audience. It is the portal through which a prospective reader must pass to enter the realm of your imagination. If that entrance does not spark some sort of interest, chances are he or she will move along to the next item, or maybe even the next author. The unusual directive sparks a sense of curiosity in the mind of that random browser. FORM & STRUCTURE: The poet writing free verse must compensate for the lack of traditional structure by designing the title, line, stanza, and rhythm to provide the greatest impact in an efficient manner. Careful design of the word selection and arrangement, the length and density of each line, and the breakdown of stanzas must provide a natural rhythm. That is, through much toil in search of precise language, experimentation with forming lines and stanzas, and extensive revision, the poet carefully crafts a work that appears natural, authentic, and convincing to the reader. Dividing the composition into several stanzas helps to control the pace and sharpen the focus, allowing your readers to absorb each impression before moving along to the next. IMAGERY: Imagery is the lifeblood of a poem. Like a craftsman carving, molding, painting, and polishing wood, stone, clay, or some other material, the poet uses words to shape and paint pictures which present some lyrical impulse or spiritual truth. Rather than TELLING the audience about those feelings, the poet SHOWS the impressions through distinct images that project emotional overtones and associations with other images and events. In this way, the poet stirs an emotional response from the reader. Strong active verbs and vivid specific sensory details capture the essence of this experience exquisitely. While the "old man" appears to be a figment of your narrator's imagination, it is not unusual for artists to have this kind of internal discussion CONCLUSION: Poems are drawn from our own awareness. Whether that awareness comes from personal experience, observation, or research is irrelevant. The poet takes an idea based on that awareness and converts it into a poem that will transmit some piece of truth, no matter how grand or how trivial, about the universe we live in. Each poem has a specific moment when that truth is revealed. The last four lines of this poem capture the essence of the abstract quality known as "persistence," a necessary requirement in our pursuit of "art." OVERALL IMPRESSION: You have clearly expressed what this process is all about. Thank you for sharing! If you are interested in learning more about the craft of composing poetry, or merely chatting with a few like-minded wordsmiths, we would love to have you join our discussions in "The Poet's Place " group.Here's wishing you fair winds as you continue to navigate this universe known as Writing.Com. Let the creativity flow from your soul!  Dave "The Poet's Place " * All items are rated in accordance with the guidelines provided in "Comment-In-A-Box" .
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