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Ashley's Eyes Open in new Window. [E]
About my daughter's friend. Her mom is an alcoholic. She's in foster care now.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Greetings, Lisa!

This is a beautiful and heartfelt poem, sharing your observations about the young lady in simply touching rhyming verse. It creates such vibrant imagery with only a few words. It's the kind of poem I would have written down and memorized as a kid. The "lion's eyes," the wild spirit, the scar, all carry the weight of a maturity beyond years and a life of lost love. When nurtured, we see the glow of reciprocation, the spirit soaring free. Sixteen years on from your last edit, I pray for the young woman and hope she's doing well and surrounded by love.

I see you could add a third relevant genre; perhaps Drama, Parenting, Children's, Psychological, Relationship or Community would be suitable. Also, for the sake of tidiness, I would suggest collapsing the explanation at the bottom into a {dropnote:"notes"}place your note here{/dropnote} which will look like this ▼ so readers can focus on the words of the poem and their personal interpretations of meaning.

You may also want to update us on how Ashley is doing these days, if at all possible.

Take care, thanks for sharing and keep writing *WingL**HeartO**WingR*
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