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I spied some nature poetry in your port and decided to pop in and check it out for an anniversary review.

This is a two stanza poem with four lines each. The first stanza paints the dawn, the second stanza paints the sunset.

I really enjoyed the visuals in the first stanza as the autumn leaves start to pop as the sun gazes down upon them. It evokes a warming emotion.

The second stanza evokes the stars at night as a guiding light until the dawn comes again.

The 2nd and 4th lines of the stanzas rythme.

I especially liked:
Muted autumn treetops
Sprouting colors from Your Hand.

Nice word play to evoke a stunning visual laced with layers of warmth and hope.

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes.

My only suggestion, and this is tough because I like the poem as is, is maybe define the beat a bit more so it doesn't sound so stilted when read out loud.

A nice play on the meaning of dawn and twilight in our lives.

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