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The Corona lullabies  Open in new Window. [18+]
Just a poem
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Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
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Greetings, Sam!

Ugh, this brings back unpleasant memories of the pandemic! I never had the shots, mostly due to fear about what's in them and the utterly undeveloped technology behind them and the lack of testing which went on. Things seem to have settled down, though; I remember when the rabid conspiracy theorists were claiming anyone who took the "jab" would be dead in a year... Obviously that hasn't happened.

You state your frustrations with the situation in a way that at first appears factual and then takes a turn to the surreal, as we are introduced to a mysterious Sam who bids farewell to a cold, cruel world riddled with coronavirus. I'm not quite certain of the satire involved; I've always struggled with recognizing satirical work. It's just something in my brain that wants to take a story at face value... At any rate, you state your points well, with a memorable viscerality which leaves us with questions. Is the ending a self label, a burst of frustration at an unreasonable planet? Are you the Sam in question?

I noticed nearly everything in your portfolio is labeled "a poem," with identical cover art images. Do you get many reviews like that? People are aware that it's a poem when they're browsing the search page. They want a hook in the subtitle, something that tells them this particular poem is worth reading. Can you frame it as a question, so that they want an answer? Can you simply detail a little bit about what it is? Even a line count would help people decide. And specific cover images help differentiate the work within your portfolio when people decide to visit. It ensures you look like you're taking the site seriously. Otherwise I feel like your whole portfolio is sliding under the radar. I don't remember meeting you before, and I've encountered thousands of authors on here. Which reminds me, you might as well add a third genre to this one. Health or even Mythology would work, since you bring in a mythical character.

Take care, thanks for sharing, and keep writing *WingL**Heartv**WingR*


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