there was a fault

A song I wrote after reading the fault in out stars . I want your HONEST reviews

Verse 1
It was an epic
Echo of a lyric
You stared at me and I did too
Drowning in an imperial affliction
And your intoxication
Life can never be trusted
And we won't be remembered
Chorus
Minutes were precious
Like was your status in my heart
Like a rollercoaster
Time was running faster
Hopeless and breathtaking
But it stops
And in the blue of your eyes I could fall and drown
Pain's our fate
And there was a fault
Verse 2
Your vanity and my narrasism
Oh ! your utopianism
And through the pain we could see the sparks
Champagne cups tasted like the stars
Having to get enough of your eyes
Before you leave...
Bridge
Recall the night at Amsterdam's sky
You held me tight as I cried
The train came and took you and now
'm in the tunnel waiting for my time.


It was an epic , echo of a lyric...