I highly enjoyed your poem! I love the subject itself! The only problem I could tell was you had some extra words that could have been omitted. To help with the flow. I tried your poem this way and it sounded good to me. In the first paragraph ( 2nd sentence) leave out the first word 'and". In the second paragragh ( 1st line) just omit the word "now" starting off. You did such an excellent job on it and I look forward to reading more of your work!
I just loved this story! Normally I get bored upon reading short stories but this one had me bewitched from beginning to the end! It was told well and the descriptions put me right in the scenes as they were told sentence by sentence. You did an excellent job as far as I'm concerned and I'm looking forward to reading more from you!
That was different and I liked the different questions. Some of them wern't the normal dull ones! For intance the one " why should I tell you?" That was funny but honest!
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