Plot: I liked your sympathy for orphanges. You have a good story here, empathic, and descriptive, a little mysterious. It had heart.
Setting: Well-placed, nicely arranged.
Grammar/Spelling: I saw no mistakes.
Overall: A piece like this gives room for thought on children with no homes, and made me think. Interesting ending, with the future of the main character looming up front in the future of the story-line.
One of the funniest stories I've read on WDC. Your humor outdoes itself, as the suspense builds as to how much more food goes into this plot. It was mischievous and enjoyably naive with all of its "full plates". Great description. I read it fast, and it wasn't hard to get through. Candid humor like this is what some of us find incredible here. You have a special talent with your imagination. Best Regards for a great piece!
How heart-warming, bitter-sweet, and emotional this piece is. Such a difficult event that your husband lived through and is yet alive is really wonderful. Jewell must be priceless. I found you described it all well and it was a very readable account. I found this in this week's Spiritual Newsletter. A nice, nice feature. Best Regards.
As a statement, this poem grabs me. It fills a spiritual sense in the reader and becomes "whole" as a statement by the end of the poem. I like it for it's sensibility and logical progression throughout. No spelling/grammar mistakes.
Overall, very good.
Your option to use free verse was well-taken. You came forth with a mighty statement and it speaks of your world and what it means to you. With many problems, such that "the devil" delivers, we see through a storm in order to get
to the calm. You have chosen a good road to travel, that spiritual route. It was featured in this week's Spiritual Newsletter. I liked the title, as well. Best Regards. Have a nice day.
With the world the way it is today, this is a needed statement to realize our greatest fears and state things that are just unheard of because everyone is afraid to say them. I like your vigor, your personal attitude, your thoughtful statements. You have raised "Neoflag of Neotyranny", isn't this interesting. Well-done, thorough item. Best Regards.
Form: {Goodform. Traditional and subjective. Style: Incredible. Just a joy to read. I thought of an oldie in my mind and it give me room to breathe with this. Grammar/Spelling: Perfect. Overall: A gorgeous take on love. You've mastered it for me!
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Feather Duster
vicki
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PLOT: Kind of a prayer, Which is goodl SETTING: An essayistic piece like this stimulates me. I like your positive way of leading me out of a storm with the last statement. {jerimiah29:3} comes to mind. GRAMMAR/SPELLING: No questions.
OVERALL: Warning signs that give me the shivers. I like that. Great piece.
Plot: What a thorough job of the active voice in a recurring nightmare such as a deer in the road. My brother died that way a couple of years ago and we think that's what it was. Every accentual phrase is tight. Great job!
Setting: Dreams like this recurr and you've got a great story! The narrative is excellent at late at night.
Grammar/Spelling: Saw no need for changes.
Overall: I'm impressed. Active words are what moves through great stories for me. I like the dream world consiousness. The possibility of that with a result in a story sounds intriquing.
Feather Duster
vicki
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PLOT AND SETTING: I liked the setting of a museum for this piece. The plot moved well with the mysterious Sophie rather a strong lead character. When her husband arrived at the museum to talk with the narrative, "Alison", I was moved by the comments. Sculpting does strange things to me to. I enjoy them at museums myself. Rodin is a master. The masked storyline about the letter given to Alison and the unveiling of the surprising results was interesting. Who would have guessed?
STYLE: I like your style. The last paragraph had good imagery use. And the dialogue weaved well in and out. It was in the end stylishly romantic with sadness that touched me.
GRAMMAR/SPELLING: I saw no mistakes.
OVERALL: You gave us a good story. It was interwoven with nice steadfast characters and explained well. Having Alison a bit emotional with the goings on was excellent. I liked it, it was empathic. That "kiss" had more than meets the eye.
Feather Duster
vicki
SETTING: AND PLOT: I liked your setting. You had "her" story and "his" story separated and it was a nice way to write this. Setting it at the airport first was
suspenseful and you wonder if a guy will show up for her. I liked the way you describe. You are detailed somewhat and give us a good picture of the past for he and her. Young teens are fun and intriquing to write about.
STYLE: Your style is a little sloppy yet it probably comes from the heart. A happy ending is a good thing.
GRAMMAR/SPELLING: I saw no real mistakes that I could speak of. Sorry you had computer problems with your carriage and that some lines didn't justify.
OVERALL: I liked the theme of the drizzling rain as you concentrated in the present tense. Yet, the flashbacks to the back were equally enjoyable. You did fine. Good job!
STYLE: I love your style. You have an inherent gift for giving us a wonderful take on life. My house is not on a hill, but I feel these same emotions about my cat and my garden.
IMAGERY: You have wonderful imagery. You create a world of "color" in your stuff and this is not an exception.
TRADITIONAL USAGE: I like your rhyme and rhythm. You give us a grand scale of this in your work and it's limitless.
{:e:star}OVERALL: HOME is a wonderful place to be. And you certainly make that clear.
This is a marvelous finish to Part I. I really loved Von Pearl. What a romantic man. It really gives you a fantasy you can dream about. The whole story was congruent with Part I. This made for a great ending. Very nice, Megan.
Touching and emotional winning poetry work. I am very excited about the Saga Continuation of Two Worlds Apart. I will buy it when it comes out sometime soon. You are very unforgettable. I hope you don't mind me adding you to my bio along with Cappucine as members I admire most and feel are top game. Thank you, Sherri.
Wonderful piece of work. It lingers in my mind like a cool drink going down somewhere in the Caribbean, a place in my mind I've never been to. Without honesty in work, there is no endurance. Nice, Lady C.
Also: I hope you don't mind my adding you to my bio, as a member whom I admire: I LOVE YOUR WORK!!!!!!!
A unique and wonderfully expressed dodoitsu. I
found it like a proverb. It managed to heighten my senses. The feeling is quite uphoric. I found this a feature that itemized haiku in the Poetry Newsletter. Nicely done. Best Regards.
I found this poem heart-felt. I liked the rain motif and its certain meaning. Many lines were candid, and emotional. This was very spiritual and since I found this item in the Spiritual Newsletter, I noted how appropriate it was to read on a Sunday. Many of us feel pain like this, and yet cannot vent how to say it on paper. This was a freedom poem that gave a clear look at questioning ones own self and reason for living. Very good. Best Regards.
How fascinating. I just love a tale like this. So interesting is the blind man, that his tale becomes a mini-suspense thriller. I liked your fascinating descriptions and your journey-like vision that ended in such a fateful twist at the end. I likened it to classic Aisian Fables which give us such joy. Best Regards.
First of all, using an acrostic method in this poem is very fancy. But more so, the words were so strongly meaningful. Things we might wish we know about but don't. I found myself repeating the phrases and asking these questions. It was found featured in this week's Spiritual Newsletter with kittiaraat the helm. I really thought it was excellently thought-provoking. Best Regards. Have a nice day.
Great intrusive vision with this one. Being that kittiara featured "forgiveness" in the Spiritual Newsletter this week, it was quite appropriate to find this one in there. Your style amazes me, blends and breaks free of manipulation. Best to you. Have a nice day!
This poem reminds me of the young, raw years of a poet I know who is nearly going down in history in his more mature years. He has put out two books and I found him a melodic masterpiece. This comes close to a style that is more than what it is, it becomes a form, as it speaks. This, anyway, is what that poet did with it. Natural, a little astute which breaks absurdity, and a suspense as to what he will do next. Excellent item. Best Regards.
What a good little poem for a contest entry. I liked your cat immediately. With as many contests that are going on, I chose to review the Eternally True Friends Contest and found all kinds of animal lovers to my liking. Nice item! Best Regards.
Excellent poem. A yarn to tell, the poem speaks well, has true form, and carries a wonderful subject. I like your poem, it is natural. Rhyme by no means hinders you, it helps. Saw this in a past Romance/Love Newsletter. Best Regards.
I just love this poem. It has the heart of a lover, the lines are powerful and the line I like most is "Beloved wrack your soul for love". Your rhyme is admirable and the resistance to confusion great. A very breathable poem. Saw it in a past Romance/Love Newsletter. Best Regards.
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Plot: I liked your sympathy for orphanges. You have a good story here, empathic, and descriptive, a little mysterious. It had heart.
Grammar/Spelling: I saw no mistakes. 
Form: {Goodform. Traditional and subjective. 
