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Le Voyage Magnifique

by Dave's gone until 5/22/2024

Rated: 18+ · Book · Writing · #1236257

A log of the magnificent journey across the vast sea of my imagination.

A sig awarded for winning "The Anything Goes Poetry Contest"

A log of our magnificent journey.

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10 Most Recent Blog Comments:

StephBee

Dec 7, 2023 at 9:47pm
In response to "Thanksgiving Restoration"

My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

THE POEM

Inspired by a quote from Henry van Dyke, the progresses from feeling, to expression to action inspired by a thanksgiving gathering.

WHAT I LIKED

I like how each stanza started with "I'm thankful for..." The repetition was as soothing as the sentiments expressed.

STRUCTURE

As per the notes, this is loosely based on a monchielle styled poem.

MECHANICS

I did not spot any punctuation mistakes. The poem is easy to read.

DESCRIPTIONS

I liked: "the smell of Grammy's turkey dressing,"

PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The poem progresses much like van Dyke's quote, from feeling to expression to action/being in the moment of a thanksgiving gathering.

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Kåre Enga in Montana

Oct 30, 2023 at 1:36am
In response to "A Halloween Celebration"

Nice rhythm and alliteration! The rhymes work as well. Edit and versify and voila... you have a free-verse poem (or a prose poem) for Shadows & Light.

My dreamy brain... ghoulish? dark? My nightmares are definitely disturbing and don't always dissipate with daylight.

Needless to say, I like it.

Kåre Enga in Montana

May 19, 2023 at 9:25am
In response to "Poppies"

I do like it. The rhythm is nice. I appreciate bravery/Normandy/memory.

"because" doesn't work for me. No suggestions though.

1 Like

StephBee

Jan 5, 2023 at 5:40pm
In response to "SILENT NIGHT"

My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

THE POEM
A poem about the nature of the Christmas season.

WHAT I LIKED

I liked how the acrostic of "silent night" painted the beauty of winter.

STRUCTURE

This is an acrostic poem. It is where the first letter of the line spell out a word or a phrase.

MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. Good use of WDC ML to make the poem easy to read. Good use of WDC ML.

PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

I have no other suggestions. Nice word play. You can feel the weather nipping at your cheeks. Good luck in the Bard's Hall Contest.

Reviewed by StephB for the Bard's Hall

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Dave's gone until 5/22/2024

Jan 3, 2023 at 8:32am
In response to "The Gravel Path"

I am glad you posted this on the forum so everyone else can enjoy it.

1 Like

Kåre Enga in Montana

Jan 2, 2023 at 3:37pm
In response to "The Gravel Path"

I hurry down a grovel path
to hide from mighty blokes
residing where the mountains scream
at rabid city folks.

I soothe my wounds from acid tongues
among these squirrely butts
and count my blessings every time
White Rabbit brings me nuts.

K.E.

2 Like

Kåre Enga in Montana

Dec 31, 2022 at 12:04am
In response to "The Telegram"

Nicely done. Eastern Montana has a BIG sky. I live in the west snuggled between mountains.

I loved the openness of Kansas... one reason why I'm going back to Isan in Thailand. "A little bit of who I am" resonates with wide open agricultural areas.

Dave's gone until 5/22/2024

Dec 10, 2022 at 9:12am
In response to "The Telegram"

Thanks, Kat!

1 Like

Redtowrite

Dec 10, 2022 at 8:51am
In response to "The Telegram"

Paints a breathtaking visual and a feeling of freedom and lightness from our daily troubles. Beautiful writing. Holiday peace to you.

Kat

Kåre Enga in Montana

Aug 16, 2022 at 6:44pm
In response to "GETAWAY"

So many 'b's. Alliterative on purpose?

The Caymans may not be far enough away. I'd go to Thailand... easier to get lost in a sea of people. Or Colombia.

1 Like

August 8, 2018 at 3:47pm

#939382

When Haggard Sang

When Haggard sang
about how "Mama Tried,"
we all sympathized and cried,
enthralled by his gritty twang.

Merle Haggard was (and still is) a country music legend: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=OjCltSnl2aE

2 Like • Comment • View 1 comment

August 7, 2018 at 5:58pm

#939330

All It Takes

All it takes
is a little sunshine
and a meadowlark's melody
to vanquish
a dreary day.

3 Like • Comment • View 1 comment

August 6, 2018 at 7:09pm

#939271

My Tome

I was born to roam
and write my tome,
so others may learn
from my adventures
with crusty old gnome.

Let the creativity flow from your soul!

Dave
"The Poet's Place "

1 Like • Comment

August 5, 2018 at 3:52pm

#939163

Left and Right

Left and right,
dancing around the Nexus
between point and counterpoint,
but never the twain shall meet.

2 Like • Comment

August 4, 2018 at 5:15pm

#939115

Going Back Home

Lilac fragrance spilled across rhubarb patch,
which supplied filling for Mom's tasty pies
in childhood home.

Recipe for rhubarb pie: https://www.bettycrocker.com/recipes/rhubarb-pie/5fb648a6-4a14-4d45-a4dd-c9c56f8...

2 Like • Comment

August 3, 2018 at 12:10pm

#939040

He Wore Chagrin

He wore chagrin
like prison garb
when Facebook "friends"
exposed his sin.
Without a doubt,
he was a lout.

1 Like • Comment

August 2, 2018 at 4:45pm

#938992

My Writing Binge

When I go on a writing binge,
the structure of my life comes off its hinge
and frays around the fringe.

1 Like • Comment

August 1, 2018 at 4:50pm

#938929

Duty Calls

With haughty mien,
the pompous jerk
created quite a scene
when he was assigned
to clean the latrine.

4 Like • Comment

July 30, 2018 at 1:33pm

#938815

The Winsome Mermaid

The winsome mermaid
lured sailors to their deaths
among the jagged rocks
with her mystic song of love.

1 Like • Comment

July 29, 2018 at 3:04pm

#938771

The Consummate Writer

He stands, aloof,
observing conversations,
all the while,
capturing snippets
for his next novel.

1 Like • Comment

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