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I've finally found what Brannon needs.

His conscience only makes him crueler as he takes ownership of the problems of entire worlds, and wages war on them.

Taking ownership and waging war only lead to more controlling and manipulation., on his part--and on the part of his government.

Rebellion and coup will not stop the people who are already following his lead!

What he needs is a Polynesian view. To stop being an owner and start being a

'Kahu.'

A sacred caretaker.

To treat them with the kindness and respect of a treasured pet, not the harsh manipulative discipline of a cold warrior.

No matter how kind and goodly the people might be, they are still caught in that pincer of ownership and control. How can he find his way out of it?

Sadly all the people in Larrikesh are the same--although less sophisticated.
I've added a new entry to my book, "Thoughts of a Mad Man" Open in new Window.:
         "White Room: Where to display your setting (reflection paper)" Open in new Window.

Just some thoughts as I prepare to deal with white room. Basically I was about to make this an email and I thought better. (Eh, Raven Author IconMail Icon ?) It also went from a paper about why this was hSard to more of a what to do about it. So if you're writing scenes that are too much like a radio show, check out my thoughts on the subject.
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Bonus tip: if you're pestering people with too many general thoughts emails--or especially if you're sure they're interested--maybe these emails could also fill out your blog. It usually only takes a little editing to generalize one of these.
Joto-Kai Author Icon - you are never pestering! But it's a good blog. :)

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Thanks so much. I'm glad you liked the post and I'm kind of excited--I discovered a relevant limiting belief. As Oliver (student wizard) would say, I found the right thread to unravel.
Offering 5000 gp for a review of The Harbinger, will do a 'review request.' on request.

A woman raised in a grim-dark hellscape must deal when the tide of mindless violence recedes without taking her.

For details respond here or in my email; the piece is locked. Passkey available.
My character is currently in a calm state despite finding out that a) the person who makes life worth living just got blown away (she was hoping to go first) and b) she's not dying because the war is over.

I need her to go to a hysterical state. She is going to scream in the face of an armed enemy soldier.

I don't know how to do that.

Don't get me wrong: I go there more than anybody I know. She's my self insert in this story. I *should* know exactly how to get there.

I feel like an NBA star saying, "You gotta ghostwrite the part where he does the free throw. I don't know anything about it."

And come to think of it, okay, that is exactly how it is. Because knowing how to do is not the same as describing how to.

*Blush*

Besides, if I knew how I get from point A to point B I would go to point C instead.

JOURNALING TIME
Yes,exactly journaling time! Also, time to do the mind trick of "it's ok, nobody will ever read thia, so I can do it just how I want/how it first occurs to le, even if it feels silly/wrong/cheesy". Just do it, without judging it.
Raven Author Icon - It's going to take a LOAD of nonjudgmental. I'm guessing Heaven will have to take out a loan if they spot me.

It's all self talk, asurring the reader that she's special and strong and completely in control.

She's not like all these half-mad people who don't appreciate the gift they've been given. She's going to quietly retire and collect her thoughts before stepping up.

Rebooting an old story with a new POV. It's coming along really well---and I finally found out what Larrikeshi mean by their favorite swear word.

Unfortunately I happen to be falling for the character I killed off before the beginning of the original story. In the original version I never met him. But they make a great couple. Made.

I'd say "To the ovens with that" but, that---that is where it went.

So Talesh is starting her corruption arc. If that's what it is; she's defiantly going worse (From applauding evil to trying to perpetrate it.)

Right now it's set up. I can't wait to experience the climax of this story from the person who actually cares about it.


That moment where she looks her enemy in the eyes and begs him to destroy her. It's a story of depression and grief and PTSD that I think I've earned the right to tell.

...but only as a person not as a writer. For that you earn the right to tell a story by telling it right.

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Follow the story and your heart, and you will get there!
Good luck!
Favorite line for today:

"People often steal what cannot be forced upon them." "In the Face of Apocalypse" Open in new Window.

Our secret agent was talking down an unarmed woman who intended to provoke an enemy soldier. Just days after Brannon had started a ceasefire.

Have you recently read, written, or revised a line that was worth thinking about?
Offing your Stars
(K---Unaliving---your Darlings)

I have a beloved piece that began as a chapter, "In the Face of Apocalypse."

The story is heavily seasoned with the world building that came in with the first book of my unpublished series.

For years I've been driving to distill enough of my world building to keep the reader up to speed. And you know, I've almost got it.

Almost!

Which a shame. We barely glimpse the story of Talesh, struggling with a malignant identity that has no place in the new world.

Or maybe it's a good thing--it's a story I needed to tell, not one I had the power to tell.
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Love putting deep lines in a character's mouth so it sounds like something else.
In this case, Feles is sounding diabolical--as a peddler of a kinder, gentler Borg tech, as a dangerous analog of the Founders, and not valued for her insight.

"Not in fascist coordination," Feles whispered, "But in seeing and being seen---that is the great power of the link."

"Resistance should not.... StarTrekFanfic" Open in new Window.
An old Facebook post, this is a true story with names changed. (Seamus is meself.)

One of very few memoir bits, very very short.

Lemme know if you like it.

"Trixie Dips" Open in new Window.

It helps when you've something to say. "Write what you know." I think it means take the stuff you know, research the stuff you care about, and then try to cover it up with all the fun stuf you imagine.



Amateur writers copy; mature writer's steal, opines T.S. Eliot. Don't just copy reality; strip it down and repaint it so that nobody will guess it's based on some boring normal reality.
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I agree. The question shouldn't be, "Has this been done before?" It should be, "Has this been told in the way I'm telling it?"
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"Resistance should not.... StarTrekFanfic" Open in new Window.

So I've got another story for attention. You may've already seen part of it, I think it is at least complete.

Have you ever been where you would sell your soul to help a family member? Darro offers such a deal to a beautiful vendor of repurposed Borg technology... but is his suspicion in the right place? Three parts, worth the read.
I am still overeager but my first draft of the Star Trek fanfic is out. I added it to chapter 3 because the wordcount was too low. "Resistance should not.... StarTrekFanfic" Open in new Window.

Note this is in a crushed Federation where humans rely on Ferengi 💊 medicine. And some would turn to the Borg for protection.

Started on the way to a hospital bed....

I've just added a chapter to an item in my portfolio:
 Chapter 3 Homecoming Open in new Window. (18+)
The New Borg are slowly revealed
Two pages in to my library book and I need the red, editor's pencil.


It should be "Selten's exacting, Vulcan
mind" unless you mean by "Selten"s exacting Vulcan mind" to suggest the proliferation of "slipshod Vulcan minds."

I assure you that not even the less disciplined Romulan mind is ever slipshod.

Good thing it is an ebook.
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Yeah, I hate it when I run across something like that in a book I'm reading. The worst of it is, I don't if I should be disappointed in the author for making the mistake, or ticked off at the alleged proofreading program whose autocorrect function thinks it knows better. *Angry*
Soldier_Mike Author Icon - Lol I am just hoping I haven't neglected the reading as a reader too long.

I might have to puck more carefully for my pleasure reads
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If the chemical is keeping you sane is a medicine that counteracts that still an antidote or is [t]here a better word?

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Depends on the context of what you are writing but there are different words that can replace it, especially when knowing that some poisons can be medicine and some medicine can be poison. Every ones body is different so you can honestly use any word that you deem fit for that person. It can be " medicine", Medicinal Concoction", "remedy", or something of the sort. Hope this helps.
The L.E.X.A Author Icon - specifically it is my Star Trek fanfic. Knowing that humans are dependent on a Ferengi drug due to Founder biological warfare, à bounty hunter always sprays the air with a counter agent.
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