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Made many changes so the story flows with more ease. I hope so anyway! Also focused on less words. It's still a long short story though. Review for a review

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Mrs. Banks, you've got 90 days
When one passes, one is replaced
and barren smiles don't sooth the soul,

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kissed my heart with a melody...

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lost in the byways & highways
of impossible dreams
breathless like smoke or moonbeams
rising when the sun sets


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Is a story ever done? *BigSmile* After some time away, and after proofreading...I made some changes. Hope you like it! *Smile*
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I started this poem 2 years go. Finally finished it, well maybe *Wink* Some constructive feedback would be marvelous. I will review for a review.
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Eldia shuddered to think about it
It's still a little rough, but would appreciate your honest feedback. A Review for a Review!
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A new Poem...
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for purpose, for truth, for the measure of a man...
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It was a peace she didn't expect
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I' truly like a review! I'll review back,. I've been gone for years...just got my portfolio unlocked. Yeah!
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Mrs. Banks, you've got 90 days
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