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Review by Tiki Tobi
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Eee, I'm glad there is more :) I feel really bad for Derrick, BUT I WON'T TREAT HIM DIFFERENTLY XD Anyways, I can't wait to read the third chapter :)
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Review of Brooklyn's Life  
Review by Tiki Tobi
Rated: E | (3.5)
Wow... this was pretty deep in my opinion. If this is actually a true story, then please send my regards to Brooklyn if you are able to contact her. After reading this, I had a feeling, kinda like wanting more. If you have any other stories like this, or a continuation of this one, I would be happy to read it. I guess, reading this made me thirsty? Anyways, the only feedback I can give is to work on sentence structure, or "Grammar" (Ex: Periods, commas, transition words). Otherwise, well done!
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Review by Tiki Tobi
Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
Wow, this story was quite something. The story line is interesting, and the characters were likable and easy to understand. It was a little confusing at first, but it makes more sense after rereading it a few times. Good job on this, and I'm silently hoping that there will be more to the story (Or maybe there already is a second part?)
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Review by Tiki Tobi
Rated: E | (5.0)
This was a really good story, I just loved how it was written :) Keep up the good work!
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Review by Tiki Tobi
Rated: E | (4.5)
Aww, this was really sweet, and sad.
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