The words of your poem convey tremendous emotion. I feel the determination, the drive, the unwillingness to give up. I feel the hurt, the betrayal, the frustration with the system. Great use of words to get your message across. Look for words that you can cut. For example: "Believing that he was all mine
A relationship build on lies"
The word 'that' can be cut as well as 'all'. The word 'A' can be eliminated. "build" should be built, but that is a minor issue.
Keep up the attitude and your situation will improve. It may seem slow, but be proud of who you are and what you are accomplishing.
Well done!
While all of the concepts here are familiar, I am not one to memorize quotes. This is a great compilation of political thought in a well organized speech. Well done.
Personally, I prefer a story demonstrating these thoughts. As I read, my mind went through a novel I have written, most of the concepts mentioned are referred to in the story. The heroine goes through many in her life.
Good writing.
p.s. My first review and I have not figured out the gift points or ratings. Forgive me if I miss something.
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