|The words of your poem convey tremendous emotion. I feel the determination, the drive, the unwillingness to give up. I feel the hurt, the betrayal, the frustration with the system. Great use of words to get your message across. Look for words that you can cut. For example: "Believing that he was all mine
A relationship build on lies"
The word 'that' can be cut as well as 'all'. The word 'A' can be eliminated. "build" should be built, but that is a minor issue.
Keep up the attitude and your situation will improve. It may seem slow, but be proud of who you are and what you are accomplishing.