|Okay, well, it is a truly genuine idea. I have never seen something about an amish detective before, so you get full points on creativity. You are a very good writer, and your piece needs a little polish, but not much. One thing you may consider: as it is now, it switches from first person to third person throughout the piece. I would recommend putting Jedediah's thoughts into Italics, or single quotes even. It would just make it a much easier read.
Also, your first two sentences are a little meandering and tired. You may simply consider changing "when everything began happening" to "it began", or even consider simply scrapping it, and replacing it with some simple imagery. Focus on painting the picture before the action begins.
You did an excellent job developing the character. I think that Jedediah was a strong point in your story, and he gained instant approval with readers.
Overall, GREAT job, very creative, a special piece. Please keep writing, you are a good writer.
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