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Review of Jim  
Review by Just Thinking
Rated: ASR | (3.0)
I really liked your story. It would be nice to have that kind of after life while we wait on judgment, and I must say it was pleasing to read a graveyard story that had a nice un sinister vibe to it, unlike
the stuff I write. Your story was interesting with out gore or evil. I have no pointers for you the story read just fine to me, so thanks for writing it and please keep on writing.


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Review of Soundtracked  
Review by Just Thinking
Rated: GC | (4.0)
Great song! Really gives you a glimpse into a perspective of some one who has seen the gloom

or has looked down the rabbit hole, forever changed by what he seen. Thanks for shearing the

song. I'm not sure what to judge you on in this contest, I just wanted you to know I liked the

song, and would never have got to hear it if you had not posted it. Thanks again.
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Review of PETS R US  
Review by Just Thinking
Rated: E | (3.0)
I like it. As a matter of fact...I'm going to put a character with ADHD in my next book or

short story, why? Because I liked your weird little tale. I'm really not sure how to review

you(because that's what we do here) with out judging so I won't any further than this...

I liked it and would encourage you to keep on writing, because you seem to enjoy it and I

enjoyed reading it.


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Review by Just Thinking
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Wow! I actually teared up when I read this lonely existence you so wonderfully wrote about and

Just so you know, that is hard to do with me. Her loneliness and hopelessness came across so

much in this piece, I so much wanted to write to her and tell her she wasn't alone..then I

remembered this was just a story written from a brilliant writer. I have no suggestions for

you except to keep on writing your good at it.



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Review of Aysha Conora  
Review by Just Thinking
Rated: E | (4.0)
First of all...You're so right, I really can't argue the points you made. That being said,

you exspressed your thoughts and conveyed your emotions very well through the whole piece.

Even with this piece being fiction the story rings through, well maybe not story the

introduction rather and you have me wanting to read the the full story. Long story short

you should continue to write... in my opinion any ways.



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Review by Just Thinking
Rated: E | (4.0)
Let me start by asking, What happen to the woman? You never gave closer to the blood from

the woman,was she stabbed, shot or bit by an animal Like a bat or wolverine? That being said

I enjoyed the story very much and think you have a great talent. I could actually see the

wet dewy morning with the muddy path, you did a really good job describing the scene, and I

was in anticipation to know where the dog had gotten off to or what the dog might have

found. I Liked the story and think you should keep on writing.


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Review of Adventure Awaits  
Review by Just Thinking
Rated: 18+ | (3.5)
That ain't even right! I have to say good job on a clever deception. I was so into what was going to happen next and trying to figure how all this was going to tie together. It was a pleasant twist and the story was in interesting the whole way through, I didn't even scroll down to see how much story was left and that's saying something. It flowed well, great job
and thanks for sharing.


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Review of September Rain  
Review by Just Thinking
Rated: E | (3.5)
Doesn't matter from which emotion or memory this short but invoking piece sprang from,
it only matters that it found it's way to the surface. I read and then reread this piece
and sunk deeper in a memory from long ago. I think that's what makes a piece wonderful, it's
ability to invoke passion or dread or maybe just a long thought or two. I don't know how to
judge poetry for it has so many variations and style, so I ask two questions of myself
did I enjoy reading the piece and did it move me in some small or large way, and the answer is yes to both. I enjoyed your writing and thanks for sharing.


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Review of Moonlight  
Review by Just Thinking
Rated: E | (3.0)

Another great job there Kayla, I love the the hope that this piece delivers to us. Keep on writing, you are doing great.
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Review of Days go by  
Review by Just Thinking
Rated: 13+ | (3.5)

I must say I enjoyed this piece immensely. I feel that this is a strong person who had a life of of hard choices and dread. My heart goes out to her,
along with my admiration. You really did a great job at conveying those emotions of this person and I felt them. I guess what I am saying is job well done and keep on writing.
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Review of A Better Story  
Review by Just Thinking
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)

I like this story a lot, the reporter grew as did your readers. I love the fact you used your very limited allotment of words and was able to shed a light
on the rare acts of humanity... to love one's brother, and that a dis proven assumption isn't a disappointment but the most news worthy of the reporter's
options of the evening. I enjoyed reading your story.
God bless you in every good thing you do.
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Review of Ocean Boy  
Review by Just Thinking
Rated: E | (4.0)

Liked this poem a lot, the determination of the boy to build the sand castle fortress and the fortitude of principle to destroy the labor intensive
project thus depriving the ocean of that satisfaction. I had fun reading this poem, I think you write free verse very well. Thanks for sharing your writings
with us. God bless you and yours.
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Review of Shutdown  
Review by Just Thinking
Rated: 18+ | (4.0)

Wow I really liked this story. I was taken in at the beginning and enjoying the story, but then you went boom and hit me with end times reference
and I got goose bumps. I loved the way your story was presented and it was easy to follow. You kept my interest from start to finish. Great job as far as I'm concerned keep on writing, and thanks for sharing.
God bless you and yours.
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Review of Ocean Moon  
Review by Just Thinking
Rated: E | (3.5)

How about bravo! I'm a native born Floridian and spent a great deal of time at the ocean,and I have had very rare but very powerful moments while standing on shore. I thank you for bringing those memory s back. I think you did a wonderful job with the limitation you had. Thanks for sharing
and keep on writing.
God bless you and yours.
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Review of My Hair is Purple  
Review by Just Thinking
Rated: E | (3.0)

I like this story, it was funny and had me rooting for the color green. As I am new to writing such small stories, I have no criticisms to offer you
I think it to be a great little story given the amount of words afforded us to use. So in short I just wanted to tell you I enjoyed reading this piece and hope you get someone more learned that I to give you any pointers or criticisms if any are needed. Good job and keep on writing.

God bless you and yours.
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Review of Clinically Sane  
Review by Just Thinking
Rated: GC | (3.5)

Well I hate to say it, but I really enjoyed your story. The reason I hate saying that is, I'm writing an entry for this same contest and just realized I have to step it up a notch. The fact is I get bored pretty easy and that limits the stories I can read. To many authors drag there stories out to far before any intrigue happens and then my mind wonders. That didn't happen here. So the best thing I could say about this piece is that I read every word of it, I don't
have any criticism for this story, it flowed easily,made since, and kept me interested the whole way through, the exact things needed to keep reading.
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Review of The Storm  
Review by Just Thinking
Rated: E | (4.0)

That is the kind o poem I like. You wrote about a tree and the way he not only sees the storm,but on a very deep level how he fears it.The tree twist and bends not wanting to give in, sounds just like us and our every day storms we face.You did a wonderful job telling the tree's story and conveying all his emotion as though they were real. Thanks for sharing your perspective on this, I doubt I'll ever look at my trees in a storm the same way again, I find it hard to be leave you are a newbie. I liked this very much...So please keep on writing.


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Review of Jeb  
Review by Just Thinking
Rated: E | (3.0)

I like where you where you were going with the poem's concept, and I enjoyed the meat of the story, dead Jeb finds love etc. The criticism I have would be the timing of this piece. The flow should be smooth and even, if you were to even out the sentences to a closer amount of words, and keep the ryme
at the end of the sentence and not in the body of the sentence she will smooth right out. The ideal and premise was really good I think you are on your way to becoming a well written writer.
Good luck and Keep on writing.


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Review by Just Thinking
Rated: 13+ | (3.5)

I enjoyed your story very much. It read very well,kept me interested, and the response reluctantly given by Charon at the end there
spoke volumes. You showed a lot without being to descriptive and boreing. I think it to be a really well written story with a unique
perspective on the damn's journey. Keep on writing.
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Review by Just Thinking
Rated: E | (3.0)
First part had a little of a rocky flow to it, but parts two and three were great, with smooth flow and good timeing on your rymes. The substance of this piece came across with great ease, and took me back to the time or two when I threw a coin
in a well. Never once did I ever look at it from the coins point of view, now that I know that even the coin thinks it's foolish
to do, I'll try something else. Enjoyed reading this piece.


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Review of I Ain't Afraid  
Review by Just Thinking
Rated: E | (3.0)
I found your poem to be very amusing, and now have one more fear for holloween.
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Review by Just Thinking
Rated: E | (4.0)
Brovo! Very well writin. The flow of the poem to me was right on, I didn't trip on the last lines of each section like I sometimes do on poems
that are writin in this style. Your ryme didn't seem forced and you included alot of funny situations that made me laugh out loud. I think it's a
wonderful tribute to the late great Dr. Seuss, no editing required as far as I'm concered. Thanks for writing this piece, I haven't read anything that made me laugh out loud in a long time.


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Review of There's a Catch  
Review by Just Thinking
Rated: 18+ | (3.5)
Wow, thats a really intense story. You had me fooled in the room he put her in. At first I thought she was sitting on the remains of other victims of these guys. Good mis direction. At the end I do have a question, is Teresa chained to the wall? And if she isn't chained to a wall
why did the key in the other girls mouth upset her? Over all very interesting story, very entertaining. Like the whole mountain of keys
with only one promising freedom them, I think it was very original consept.


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Review of Don't Tell  
Review by Just Thinking
Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
Really good story. I liked the way you took us through the emotions and conflict he had to deal with. The fact that he was willing to forget about justice in order to spare her feelings proves his loyalty and devotion to her. I so enjoyed this piece. There are one or two spots that you might have forgotten to put in a word or might have added a word that interrupted the flow. That being, it was a good story.


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Review by Just Thinking
Rated: E | (3.5)
Let me start out by saying bravo on getting me to read your poem, The way I interpided the title I assumed it was going to be about a apperition or specter of some short. It was only a few lines in when I knew it was going to be about the haunting memory's of love once held, and then destroyed and it's shards flung so far into the future that it gurantees that all your would be suiters are tainted in some small way.
I really enjoyed this piece, you put it together very well and it was interesting to the very end.


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