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Review by chantelle
Rated: E | (5.0)
P.S. this is a mixed review...

There's a lot to love in this piece.
The rhyme scheme makes the poem have an easy flow.

The vivid description makes the whole thing easy to imagine.

The comparisons are just, damn brother,how do you do it?


I feel like you have a whole idea in your head, which I see through the vivid description. It's amazing, really, but at the same time it's quite a hard read. I caught myself going back to a sentence just trying to grasp what it meant. And to me, that's a great thing. I love a good ol' poem that makes me think.

This poem is a complicated one. You fall in love with it once you wrap your head around what it's about. I can just feel the idea, the metaphors, all floating around in your head. The problem is, the reader doesn't really know that. While reading this piece, I was working out every line, trying to decode them. Considering the average reader, it's one that you're going to have to contemplate a lot-A Lot- on.

At the end of the day, great discoveries always are always criticized. What you have here my friend, is great. It's genius, and personally, I loved it. I keep reading it over and over just for the descriptive writing. It immerses the reader into the moment. I would definitely come back when I would want to feel something. I could almost see what you're portraying out here. I was in the moment, although I didn't know where I was at first.
Finding my way around, I realize I'm never leaving this place.

Yours truly,
chantelle
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Review by chantelle
Rated: E | (5.0)
I do not know a lot about poetry, but I do know something about devils.and heads. What you have here is a piece that many can relate to. It's amazing, really. Thanks.
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Review by chantelle
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Ok. First up, the way this begins was actually a breath of fresh air. It's an easy read and although not much is happening, I still kept wanting to keep reading. It had the something's--going--to--happen vibes. The format is amazing, really. Dividing it into these paras was a smart move, a hell of a smart move.
Now, the story in itself, NATIVE AMERICAN? Damn, you're a genius.The introduction of Tommy was pretty great, it wasn't that long and yet it did tell me a lot about him.That's pretty hard to create, I guess.
What I don't understand why you would let go of this in the first place. I am grateful you took it up again, it takes a great deal of bravery to do so. Honestly, I would love to see where this goes. I mean, if you intend to keep it going, it's pretty great. Not a lot of people, including me, know anything about the Native Americans. Basing a story off of something lesser known is awesome.
It was a pleasure reading this piece, I hope you continue writing this one. If it ever makes it as a book, I would buy it, I promise you.
Thank you for creating this.
chantelle
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Review of Drabble #1  
Review by chantelle
Rated: E | (4.5)
sometimes I wonder if all these things in my head will ever be put into word. An here you've done it. Thank you.
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Review of The Word  
Review by chantelle
Rated: E | (5.0)
I don't know if I am qualified to judge poetry but I just have to say this one thing. It's pure genius and life is better with poets around. This one particularly struck my heart. Magic in poetry.
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