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Review of Max's story prt 1  
Review by Thornton
Rated: 13+ | (3.0)
Ok, good start however you just plunge us into the story. No buildup, its like the story expects us to know what is going on. Next is your grammar and spelling. You're doing script style, however people will take you more seriously as a writer if you have it like a novel. With quotation marks and dialog actions like said and asked, that sort of thing. You have to review your story and fix mistakes. You just have to tweak it a little.
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Review by Thornton
Rated: E | (5.0)
Lovely! Glad to have you back making chapters! I saw no flaws in here, so that is good. I also love the emotion you put into it, it made for a glorious read!
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Review by Thornton
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Ooooo now you got me excited! That was a nice introduction there, a very nice look into the mind of a troubled kid. You make sure to include something to lead on the reader to wait for part two. Now, we will just have to wait and see.
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Review of Non-Humans images  
Review by Thornton
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
These are amazing, outstanding drawings! Curse me and my disability to draw and put pictures up on the Internet. Anyway, yeah, each and everyone is detailed and quite glorious. Hurray for these!
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for entry "I need a Hero!
Review by Thornton
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Bravo, perfect descriptions. For some reason, when you were describing Jerkasses with Hearts of Gold, I thought of Adam Sandler. I for one love all of them. Each one has major payoffs. Thanks for the clarification.
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Review by Thornton
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
It depends on the villain. I have one that is a villain and a hero simultaneously. Just depends. You also have guys who are evil just to see the world burn or because they are mindless marauders and reapers of life. Thank you for the knowledge.
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for entry "Interactives
Review by Thornton
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Actually, I have three interactives. I don't like it when they don't follow rules and have bad grammar. In fact, the first additions were just those two things. Anyway, those sound interesting. Tip: if possible, have the wolfess have a brother who WOULD'VE been the big bad wolf. Thought it could add some complexity, which is what all interactives should have if they have a plot. Thank you WDc for having them!
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for entry "Steampunk
Review by Thornton
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Jules Verne is practically Nostradamus. Anyway, thanks for the advice, great tips you have in there about Steampunk. I'm familiar with it, and I must say, I love machines with gears showing. Thanks for the knowledge.
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for entry "Stereotypes
Review by Thornton
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Thanks for the heads-up. This could easily help me in creating unique characters. I would love to see a genius ogre now, sounds amazing.
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for entry "Unusual Roles
Review by Thornton
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
I concur completely once again. Research on roles is key. It's glorious when I read a story that gets it right.
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for entry "Anachronisms
Review by Thornton
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Note to self: use funny anachronisms in writing for entertainment. Thanks for the tip!
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for entry "Giants and Tinies
Review by Thornton
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Maybe I'll use giants and tinies one of these days. I do love brownies making stuffs hope I eat brownies made by brownies cut by a knife made by dwarves. Ah, classic little guys, why is it that they always play the roles of makers of some sort in fantasy? Heck if I know.
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for entry "Magic and Technology
Review by Thornton
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Gotcha, don't overkill unless you're Deadpool and do it just to be awesome. Also, make you characters use tech or magic in a believable and logical way.
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for entry "What’s in a Name?
Review by Thornton
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Gotcha. I usually do this with cities and worlds more than people though. The way I do it is by using odd combination of letters that are uncommon and rare looking. Good info to know man.
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for entry "Biology
Review by Thornton
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Interesting. I always used or thought of the exatemes: humanized where they are different but act similar to Homo sapiens or Monsterized: nothing resembling what is logical, nightmarish or dreamy creatures.
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for entry "Vore
Review by Thornton
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Thank you for clearing that up. I always thought vote meant sexual things. Maybe I could make a universe like that in my stories.
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for entry "Giant Mutant Animals
Review by Thornton
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Giant monsters, always a good one. Unless you are America. Japan is where its at. Case in point, Godzilla!
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for entry "Vampires
Review by Thornton
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hmm, never was interested in them. Too warped from the originals and I much prefer weres and other creatures like that. Cirque Du Freak does a good job with them though.
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for entry "Crossing the Genres
Review by Thornton
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Got it, be like Killer Instinct by making Ultra Combos! with genres and combine them to expand fictional possibilities. Woo hoo!
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for entry "Zombies
Review by Thornton
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Now that sounds cool. I always thought they were "Brains" besides on rare occasions like you mentioned. Good movie that one by the way. I may think of having a zombie good guy, who knows?
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Review by Thornton
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Sweet! I for one prefer Asian, English, Norse, and Miscellaneous creatures. One example would be the Oni, a ghoulish being that feeds on fear. In Norse, you have Ymir, the king of the frost giants and ruler of Niffelheim. England and U.S., phantoms and colossi, giant, slow beings, mostly made of stone in the legends I've read. I'll make sure to reach across the borders even more than now.
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for entry "Were-Creatures
Review by Thornton
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hurray for these guys! Man, you do NOT drop the ball when it comes to research. Anyway, I'll be sure to check more were-creatures out.
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for entry "Anthros
Review by Thornton
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Huh, I did not know that. Note to self: make an awesome insectoid anthro. This will be useful, and I'll check out those things ya mentioned.
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for entry "Real Life Information
Review by Thornton
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
I concur completely. Research is vital. Unless you want to use only some knowledge and take a whole new skewed spin on whatever. Good advice.
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Review by Thornton
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
I am now psyched. Let the fun begin!
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