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Review by Joseph Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hi yojina, I came across this poem while random reviewing.
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My impressions of the poem: "The Sun That Shines for the Moon" Open in new Window. by yojina

Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:A beautiful tale of forbidden love that is so strong that it is known by only those who share the unspoken secret.

Artistic Voice and Imagery:I see two souls that long for each other against extraordinary circumstances, yet accept the realization that time has dictated for the moment.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: I see no problems at all with the grammar spelling or mechanics of this strong and delightful poem.

yojina, thank you for sharing your poem.
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Review by Joseph Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hi George A Hopkins, I came across this story while random reviewing.
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My impressions of:"In the Shadow Of the Hills" Open in new Window. by George A Hopkins

Clarity:A good title for this tale.

Writing style:Folklore war drama.

Are all 3 genres listed?Yes, by listing the Max amount of three genres your work will be available to more readers and browsers searching in that genre.

Is the structure and format easy for the reader?A good structure that is easy for the reader.

Is the dialog appropriate for the speaker?The dialog does seem specific to it's speaker.

My favorite line:---In that moment, it was as if he and the celestial bodies were one, entwined in a dance of light and shadow, stretching across the vast expanse of space---

My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions:A well written tale with strong character and good descriptions. This helps the reader to relate to the character and picture the setting.

A great job with the descriptions of the character. This helps the reader to feel as if they are getting into Oliver's mind.

A mysterious ending that leaves the readers imagination working while wanting to turn the page to learn more.


George A Hopkins, thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions:Consider experimenting with a stronger title, this will help catch the attention of browsers or potential readers.

WRITE ON! KEEP WRITING! GOD BLESS.

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Review of The Watcher  Open in new Window.
Review by Joseph Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hi rainyplot366, I came across this poem while random reviewing.
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My impressions of the poem: "The Watcher" Open in new Window. by rainyplot366

Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter: A well written tale emphasizing the art of watching and observing others.
This entertaining tale is very informative.

Artistic Voice and Imagery: I see the image of an elder in a different dimension watching and observing the lives of people on earth while writing his book.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: No problems that I see with the grammar spelling or mechanics of this entertaining tale.

rainyplot366, thank you for sharing your poem.

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Review of Pinky  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Hi Beholden, I came across this story while random reviewing.
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My impressions of:"Pinky" Open in new Window. by Beholden

Clarity:A good title for this tale, however it could better describe the content of the story.

Writing style:Horror fantasy drama.

Are all 3 genres listed? Yes, by listing the Max amount of three genres your work will be available to more readers and browsers searching in that genre.

Is the structure and format easy for the reader?A good structure that does make it easy for the reader.

Is the dialog appropriate for the speaker? Good dialogue that does seem to be specific to its speaker.

My favorite line:--- Arabella realised, without surprise, that the spirit of her grandmother had fled, in those few seconds while she examined the box.---

My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions:A well written tale with great descriptions that help take the reader into the story.

Strong characters that are well described. This helps the reader to get into the story.

Well told story in an entertaining manner. This helps hold the readers attention.

Beholden, thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions: A good proofread and edit never hurts especially after not reading the work for some time.

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Joseph
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Review of Him and I  Open in new Window.
Review by Joseph Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hi Ambience24, I came across this poem while random reviewing.
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My impressions of the poem: "Him and I " Open in new Window. by Ambience24

Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:A well worded short and entertaining poem. This poem expresses a lot in its short 8 lines.

Artistic Voice and Imagery: I see the image of two souls lost in the river of time where the current occasionally brings them closer together yet they are unable to connect.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: No problems at all that I can find with the spelling grammar or mechanics of this delightful poem.

Ambience24, thank you for sharing your poem.
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Review of Chapter 8  Open in new Window.
Review by Joseph Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hi Davejesi, I came across this story while random reviewing.
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My impressions of:"Chapter 8" Open in new Window. by Davejesi

Clarity:The title could better describe the contents of this chapter. Consider Lovely and Deadly instead of Chapter 8.

Writing style: Fantasy folklore drama.

Are all 3 genres listed?Yes, by listing the Max amount of three genres your work will be available to more readers and browsers searching in that genre.

Is the structure and format easy for the reader?The structure and format are fairly easy for the reader.

Is the dialog appropriate for the speaker?The dialog does seem specific to it's speaker.

My favorite line:---I AM SO f***ED UP---

My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions:An interesting tale with strong characters as well as good descriptions. This helps the reader to get into the story better.

Reads much like a first draft, consider a good proofread and edit to shorten some of the longer sentences. Starting a new paragraph when the speaker changes helps the reader to follow the story-line easier.

A lot of good stuff in this entertaining tale.



Davejesi, thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions: Consider a good proofread and edit to correct typos and punctuation errors. Shorten the longer sentences as well as the longer paragraphs to make it appear more inviting to readers and browsers or potential readers.

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Review by Joseph Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hi again Wandering Thoughts, I came across this poem while random reviewing.
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My impressions of the poem: "It's God's Perspectives To Rule." Open in new Window. by Wandering Thoughts

Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter: An interesting poem with a great main theme also several lines that repeat.

Artistic Voice and Imagery: I see the image of a world with a false prophet who is deceiving most everyone that will listen.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: No problems at all that I can find with the grammar spelling or mechanics of this interesting poem

Wandering Thoughts, thank you for sharing your poem.
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Review of New Hunter  Open in new Window.
Review by Joseph Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hi Hihohyena, I came across this story while random reviewing.
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My impressions of:"New Hunter" Open in new Window. by Hihohyena

Clarity:Seems to be a good title for this tale.

Writing style:Folklore entertainment drama.

Are all 3 genres listed?Only two are listed, by listing the Max amount of three genres your work will be available to more readers and browsers searching in that genre.

Is the structure and format easy for the reader?The structure is somewhat easy for the reader.

Is the dialog appropriate for the speaker? The dialog does seem appropriate to it's speaker.

My favorite line:--- None of this once wonderous décor could hold his interest anymore; he felt like a wild dog in an ornate cage—a beast, meant to be free, trapped behind beautifully disguised prison bars.---

My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions: A well written and very entertaining tale.

Good descriptions that help the reader to picture the setting.

A good and unique storyline that helps to hold the reader's attention throughout the tale.

Hihohyena, thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions: Consider a larger font size with a bit more line spacing to make it easier on those readers with weaker eyes.

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Joseph
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Review of George and Maggie  Open in new Window.
Review by Joseph Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hi Humble_Poet PNG, I came across this poem while random reviewing.
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My impressions of the poem: "George and Maggie" Open in new Window. by Humble_Poet PNG

Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:A beautifully written delightful poem that reads much like a true story. This helps the reader to relate more to the story holding their attention better.

Artistic Voice and Imagery:I see the image of two souls caught up in Rapids of time yet still able to share their emotions.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics:No problems at all that I can find with the grammar spelling or mechanics of this delightful poem.

Humble_Poet PNG, thank you for sharing your poem.
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Review of Say Nothing  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Hi again Sumojo, I came across this work while random reviewing.
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My impressions of the story: "Say Nothing" Open in new Window. by Sumojo

Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:Well written description of a character in a short dark mystery style. The words work together to give the tale a realistic flow that grabs the readers attention.

A nice ending that leaves the reader wanting to turn the page.

Artistic Voice and Imagery:I see a dark prison cell where dark force's are at work.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics:No problems that I can find with the grammar spelling or mechanics of this well written short story.

Sumojo, thank you for sharing your poem.
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Review of The Cotton Field  Open in new Window.
Review by Joseph Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hi RJFuller, I came across this story while random reviewing.
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My impressions of:"The Cotton Field" Open in new Window. by RJFuller

Clarity:A great title that describes this tale well.

Writing style:Fiction folklore drama.

Are all 3 genres listed?Only one is listed, by listing the Max amount of three genres your work will be available to more readers and browsers searching in that genre.

Is the structure and format easy for the reader? The structure is fairly easy for the reader.

Is the dialog appropriate for the speaker?Yes the dialog does seem to be appropriate for it's speaker.

My favorite line:---Because we had to pick this cotton. We had to stay out here all day, week after week, year after year, picking cotton!" he boomed.---

My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions:A unique story-line that maintains a consistant and realistic flow. This helps keep the readers attention.

A well described setting that helps the reader to picture the scene.

Good strong characters that are described well and share good dialog. This make the story more real for the reader.


RJFuller, thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions: Consider a good proofread and edit with possibly a few more line breaks toward the end for the long paragraphs. This will make it appear more inviting to the reader or potential reader.

WRITE ON! KEEP WRITING! GOD BLESS.

Joseph
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Review of Grandma  Open in new Window.
Review by Joseph Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi Angel, I came across this poem while random reviewing.
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My impressions of the poem: "Grandma " Open in new Window. by Angel

Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter: A beautiful poem dedicated to your Grandma.
Grandma's are such a blessing for us with their love as well as the wisdom of age that they have earned.

Artistic Voice and Imagery: I see the image of a soul being blessed with the wisdom of years from Grandma who is trying to help them avoid mistakes that they made while teaching them about love and family.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics:No problems at all that I can find with the spelling grammar or mechanics of this delightful poem.

Angel, thank you for sharing your poem.
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Review by Joseph Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hi Chaim Tal, I came across this story while random reviewing.
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My impressions of:"Meditation at the Western Wall" Open in new Window. by Chaim Tal

Clarity: A good title for this deep how to meditate article.

Writing style: Religious, meditation, description article.

Are all 3 genres listed?Yes, by listing the Max amount of three genres your work will be available to more readers and browsers searching in that genre.

Is the structure and format easy for the reader?Nicely structured so that it is easy for the reader.

Is the dialog appropriate for the speaker? The dialog seems to be specific to it's speaker.

My favorite line:--- Before approaching the Wall, find a quiet place nearby. Close your eyes, take a few deep breaths in and out. Focus on your breathing.---

My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions: Reads like a true story, this helps to grab the readers attention from the start.

Well described informative article full of good sounding advice.

Well written in a how to meditate style.

Chaim Tal, thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions: Write on!

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Joseph
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Review by Joseph Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi Detective, I came across this poem while random reviewing.
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My impressions of the poem: "I Just Want to Sleep" Open in new Window. by Detective

Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:A beautiful short peaceful lullaby. Starting as well as ending with a strong line that most everyone will relate to.

Artistic Voice and Imagery:I see the image of a hardworking soul tired from daily labors then drifted off into a happy dream-world.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: No problems that I can see with the grammar spelling or mechanics of this entertaining peaceful poem.

Detective, thank you for sharing your poem.
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Review of The Portrait  Open in new Window.
Review by Joseph Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Hi Amethyst Angel, I came across this story while random reviewing.
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My impressions of:"The Portrait" Open in new Window. by Amethyst Angel

Clarity:A great title for this entertaining tale.

Writing style:Paranormal family drama.

Are all 3 genres listed?Yes, by listing the Max amount of three genres your work will be available to more readers and browsers searching in that genre.

Is the structure and format easy for the reader?A nice structure that is easy for the reader.

Is the dialog appropriate for the speaker?The dialog does seem to be specific to it's speaker.

My favorite line:--- "The finest art adorning my walls means nothing to me without him. I would give it all to charity in exchange for the one painting which will come from his hands."---

My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions: A well written emotional story with great descriptions. This helps the reader to get into the story.

A great story-line that holds the readers attention well.

Amethyst Angel, thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions: Keep writing.

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Joseph
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Review by Joseph Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Hi Tashabrown (DEIB),I came across this story while random reviewing.
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My impressions of:"The Weaponization of DEIB " Open in new Window. by Tashabrown (DEIB)

Clarity:A good title for this tale.

Writing style:Sci-fi rough draft style.

Are all 3 genres listed?Only one listed, by listing the Max amount of three genres your work will be available to more readers and browsers searching in that genre.

Is the structure and format easy for the reader?The structure appears to be in rough draft style that is not that easy for the reader.

Is the dialog appropriate for the speaker? The dialog does seem appropriate to the speaker.

My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions:A lot of good stuff here. Seems to be a rough draft version of a future masterpiece.

Tashabrown (DEIB), thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions:A good proof read and edit never hurts.

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Review of Chapter 10  Open in new Window.
Review by Joseph Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hi Darkscape Entertainment, I came across this story while random reviewing.
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My impressions of:"Invalid Item" Open in new Window. by Darkscape Entertainment

Clarity:The title could describe the contents of this chapter better.

Writing style: Teen mystery drama.

Are all 3 genres listed?Yes, by listing the Max amount of three genres your work will be available to more readers and browsers searching in that genre.

Is the structure and format easy for the reader?A good structure that is easy for the reader.

Is the dialog appropriate for the speaker? The dialog is specific to it's reader.

My favorite line:--- Not surprisingly, Imperial embodied an enticing and compelling world, so as the boys accessed the front desk, excitement flourished.---

My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions:An entertaining tale with strong characters using realistic dialog.

Written and then interesting style with a good easy format for the reader. A good opening that grabs the readers attention and holds it well throughout the chapter.

Darkscape Entertainment, thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions:

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Review by Joseph Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi again Wandering Thoughts, I came across this poem while random reviewing.
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My impressions of the poem: "Heal The World Through Love " Open in new Window. by Wandering Thoughts

Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:A beautiful peaceful world is painted through these words. If only the world would do it, so simple yet so complicated.

Artistic Voice and Imagery:I see the image of a world where all live as equals in peace trying to help their neighbors.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: No problems at all that I can find with the grammar spelling grrammar or mechanics of this delightful poem.

Wandering Thoughts, thank you for sharing your poem.
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Review of your eyes  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hi sapphire kuyeus I came across this poem while random reviewing.
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My impressions of the poem: "your eyes" Open in new Window. by sapphire kuyeus

Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:A interesting style for this mysterious romance poem.

Artistic Voice and Imagery: I see the image of lost lovers traveling in the river of time only able to get glimpses of each other occasionally.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: No problems that I can find with the grammar spelling or mechanics of this delightful poem.

sapphire kuyeus, thank you for sharing your poem.
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Review of Angels Weep  Open in new Window.
Review by Joseph Author IconMail Icon
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Hi fyn, I came across this poem while random reviewing.
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My impressions of the poem: "Angels Weep " Open in new Window. by fyn

Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter: An interesting short poem touching on many interested ideas. I really like the opening line.

Artistic Voice and Imagery: I see the image of angels weeping crystal tears that fall into the river of time.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: No problems that I can find with the grammar spelling or mechanics of this entertaining work.

fyn, thank you for sharing your poem.
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Review of The Open Bottle  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Hi Weirdone-Back in the games, I came across this poem while random reviewing.
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My impressions of the poem: "The Open Bottle" Open in new Window. by Weirdone-Back in the games

Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:A entertaining poem with repeating lines.

Artistic Voice and Imagery: I see the image of a mythological world with a girl surrounded by bottles all sealed with lids.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: No problems that I can find with the grammar spelling or mechanics of this entertaining work.

Weirdone-Back in the games, thank you for sharing your poem.
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Review of Color of Urine  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
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Hi Tito, I came across this story while random reviewing.
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My impressions of:"Color of Urine" Open in new Window. by Tito

Clarity:A good title that describes the contents of this article well.

Writing style:Informative health article.

Are all 3 genres listed?Only one listed, by listing the Max amount of three genres your work will be available to more readers and browsers searching in that genre.

Is the structure and format easy for the reader?A good structure that is easy for the reader.


My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions: A very informative and well laid out article full of interesting information about the subject.

Tito, thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions:Consider a blank line between paragraphs, this will make it a bit easier on the reader.

WRITE ON! KEEP WRITING! GOD BLESS.

Joseph
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Review of Lucky Error  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hi again QueenNormaJean Cheerleader Soon, I came across this story while random reviewing.
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My impressions of:"Lucky Error" Open in new Window. by QueenNormaJean Cheerleader Soon,

Clarity: A good title for this tale.

Writing style:Relationship drama.

Are all 3 genres listed? Only two are listed, by listing the Max amount of three genres your work will be available to more readers and browsers searching in that genre.

Is the structure and format easy for the reader? The structure and format is easy for the reader.

Is the dialog appropriate for the speaker? The dialog does seem specific to it's speaker.

My favorite line: ---
“Are you John?” I smiled back at him. ---

My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions: A great tale, short simple and to the point just the way today's busy reader likes things.

Well Done!

QueenNormaJean Cheerleader Soon, thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions: None.

WRITE ON! KEEP WRITING! GOD BLESS.

Joseph
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Review of Seasons  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
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Hi Odessa Molinari, I came across this poem while random reviewing.
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My impressions of the poem: "Seasons" Open in new Window. by Odessa Molinari

Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:A strong and emotional work that catches the readers attention well from the start and holds it well through-out.

Artistic Voice and Imagery: I see young love in the low point of time yet then moving through time to the high point where all is better and we learned from our mistakes thus making us stronger .

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: No problems at all that I can find with the spelling grammar or mechanics of this the delightful work.

Odessa Molinari, thank you for sharing your poem.
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Hi again Winchester Jones, I came across this poem while random reviewing.
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My impressions of the poem: "While the World Held Its Breath" Open in new Window. by Winchester Jones

Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:A delightful and entertaining perception of the first moon landing.

A great idea for this entertaining work.

Artistic Voice and Imagery: I see the image of Neil Armstrong landing on the moon and pranking everyone watching.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: No problems at all that I can see in the grammar spelling or mechanics of this entertaining short story.

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