I appreciate your poem. I love poems about nature and especially about trees. the poem may lack a specific meter but it defiantly has a repetitiveness to it which is vital to good poetry, even free form. So good job there. my suggestions are to add a comma at the end of each line. and consider taking out the word "and" at the beginning of line 9 (the line that begins "and without a will..."). I just feel it would flow better. But I suppose that kind of thing is subjective. those are my thoughts. Keep up the good work!
This is a really good short story. Using an animals perspective on the crucifixion is something i have never seen before. I enjoyed how the donkey was the same one jesus rode into Jerusalem on. This story is definitely riveting, primarily due to its unique perspective looking through the donkeys eyes. I also appreciated how the story brought in other animals and main characters from the biblical narrative. The only thing that could be improved that I saw was in paragraph 9 i think it says "while walking with man". I think this should be "men". Thanks for the story. I would be grateful if you reviewed my story Back to Basics #2074944
I am intrigued by your short story. You make some very good points that more Jesus followers need to hear. There are very deep thoughts presented here. I think the experience listed at the bottom in blue makes a much better ending. It could be integrated into the final paragraph. Also, perhaps the quote from www.theworddaily.com could be cited properly. Aside from that I thought this was a great devotional thought or newsletter article. Thank you for sharing your experiences.
Please review my short story of a religious experience called Going Solo With God #2074943
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