I enjoyed the run down of Aristotle's theories as I enjoy reading philosophy from time to time. The one point I wholeheartedly disagreed with however is the point you made stating that if you attend an educational institution then your chances of being financially wealthy will increase. Most millionaires these days didn't finish high school (with the exception of people such as Bill Gates), because most educational institutions these days are a joke.
I agree with the point on virtue. With that, I will share this with you. You can't ever hope to control someone's actions, you can only control how YOU react. Live the way the world were as it should be, to show it what it can be. Live by example, hold virtue and morals to a high standard. People may call you self-righteous and other misguided things, but the thing is just because you possess virtue, doesn't mean you don't possess strength either.
I like your use of metaphor's, at times a bit over-stated but in all I found it very clever. From the moment they stepped into the car I knew she was a vampire, however my favorite type of literature and fictional works is that of the vampire so I suppose that gave me an edge. Another constructive criticism I would have to make would be in regards to your ending, the last line to be exact. It is not of the same degree that the rest of the story reached. If it is to leave it open for a sequel to this story, then even so I felt as the reader you should have elaborated a bit more...about anything. Or been more descriptive with the final words you leave your reader with.
It was sexy, devious with a bit of thrilling thrown in there as well. I could picture this Vampire Seductress in my minds eye, and she was the embodiment of grace. Who else but a Vampire =)
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