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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
I have read this and the Prologue and ch2, and I have to say its an interesting story, in the good way. It looks like it will be a very interesting tale.

David.
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
You have a really good piece, well written, and something that encourages the reader to keep reading to the end.

On the hints of the story, it sounds to me like you have two characters who are not just polar opposites but might kill each other at the end but not before stopping something else first. That is my interpretation of your verse.

I don't know what style of rhyming you were going for though.

In its totality I give this 4.5 rating, you don't have any spelling or grammar errors, other then the rhyming part, which really does not bother me. I don't see any other major issues or flaws that would be a problem.

I hope this helps you in some way, and that you will continue your writing.

David.
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
You have a nice story here.

You don't have any spelling or grammar errors, nor do I see any other major issues or flaws that would be a problem. The only thing that I would suggest, in my opinion, is that you brake up the text so that it reads a little better.

With that small point in consideration, I'm giving this a four and a half rating.

I hope this helps you in some way, and that you will continue writing.

David.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
You have good story here, and I hope you continue it. This looks like it would make a very good novel or novella.

I don't see any spelling or grammar errors, nor do I see any other issues or flaws that would be a problem. So I'm giving this a five rating.

I hope this helps you in some way, and that you will continue the story you have started.

So Keep Writing.

David.
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Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
This is a powerful piece on a loss, you convey that image well with your words. As well as your hope, trust, and faith in God.

As to things such as grammar, spelling, and such I don’t see any issues or flaws. And rate this poem as a 5 considering everything together.

Keep Writing, and the aspirations of your heart and soul.

David.
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