Reading this poem brings to mind brings to mind every thing I love about poetry, The words you choose are excellent and are really depict your poem.. By that I mean, the words you choose paint a picture, and I can see what you write.
Now, keep that analogy in mind, think of your self as a painter. A painter paints within a boarder, his picture is defined by where it stops, or better put, how it is contained. Now what does that mean for us as poets. I think it is a defense of rhyme and meter. While the words you chose are wonderfully descriptive and filled with poetic imagery, I will not remember them as I lie awake in bed tonight. Your thoughts will not stick in my head, so your message will not resonate in me for hours. I cannot meditate on your message or consider your philosophy.
These are the thoughts of a fellow artist and rising star, take them as you will, Just remember that we do not write for our selves, we write to convey a message and our the way we portray the art is as important as the message.
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