I think your poem is very good. You have managed to construct easily read prose with a complex structure. You have also outlined your philosophical beliefs with great elegance. As your poem exposes your beliefs, I have briefly outlined my perceptions (so you can see how I interpreted your prose) and logic in deciphering your verse.
I like the use of comparative analogy with Brownian Motion (at least I hope I have hit the nail on the head!!!). Personally, my belief is held in the random movement of molecules based on the erratic and seemly irrational movement of smaller particles. Your poem specifies that the words come from the unknown, carrying emotions and ideas to you the receiver;
"Like the misty image of a distant past
Indiscernible yet unmistakable
Like a prophesy yet unfulfilled
Whispering uncertain destinies,"
This is interesting. Basically, you as the receiver are not creating the meaning of chance words, but instead are receiving emotion from the actual words. Personally, I feel the opposite way, that random brain activity creates a word, that we then interpret and attach meaning to. However, I can see your point and respect it; and it is written very elegantly.
You bring the idea a step further by suggesting that the actual words come from the domain of god, following his/her/its plan.
"Written in stone by the hand of God
Etched in hearts by the voice of God
Blinding the ears of men
Like thunder and lightening
Exposing Trojan truths
Daring perception beyond it boundaries
Fixing, mending, bowing, breaking
the words come and the words go…"
I am not Christian, or Atheist but Agnostic (http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Agnosticism), and I have to admit I don't believe, or disbelieve in god (I'm still awaiting the verdict!!!), so please don't be offended by how I interpreted this passage. I believe this passage expresses your belief in god and mysticism (that these words have the ability to expose you to truth). I came to this conclusion from the passage, "Exposing Trojan truths, Daring perception beyond it boundaries". According to wiki, "Mysticism .... is the pursuit of communion with, identity with, or conscious awareness of an ultimate reality, divinity, spiritual truth, or God through direct experience, intuition, instinct or insight", so you can safely believe in mysticism and be Christian (I know mysticism is not a pretty sounding word to Christians, but that's the philosophy I identified the passage as belonging to). I suppose your closing statement of the poem led me to this interpretation. I think you have really achieved a great deal, by showing so much of yourself, so elegantly, in such a short passage.
Overall, I can find no fault with your poem. It is beautifully written, enjoyable to read, and has made me think.
From a fellow rising star,