This is excellent! I know you posted your work for some recommendations or some constructive criticism. I just can't find anything wrong with your story.
I do believe you have the beginnings of at least a light novel. If I might recommend putting some work in before this part of the story. I think it would be great to talk about moving into her new home and how Roland fixes up the closet. You could talk about closing her little shop in town and some people stopping by as she closes up the shop. Also give some background on Penney. I think Penney is a great character. At least these are some of my thoughts of where I would start. It would give a good overview of the town and the people that live around Willow.
I hope this helps.
Fifthwood
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