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*I turned off review requests cause some folks are poorer than field mice...It aint mean no nothing, email me and send what yall can.* Aint yall up to yalls neck with being poked at? Cant get nobody to just appreciate what yall done wrote? Whether yall good enough for government work, or just starting out, we get it. Yall wrote it, and yall got power to keep it. Folks write different, and at times editing smothers creativity and finding yalls own style. We want yall to write in confidence. There go plenty of other reviewers who gone fix yalls grammar, and whatnot. We aint them. Thanks for writing.
I'm good at...
Encouragement and chatting yall up.
Favorite Genres
Romance.
Least Favorite Item Types
Overly sexual writings.
I will not review...
Sexual writings, but onery will be accepted...Some Christians are so uptight with things...Like its wrong to be ATTRACTED to the opposite sex. We DO promote, support, and follow no sex before marriage on our forum. Also, no religious works- Im gone lean toward Christians and Im trying to give everybody an even playing field. Keep it WISE with requests, as some can be politely rejected: Im a Christian, conservative, as well as Republican...We dont get bullied here.
Public Reviews
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Good to know you, I'm Bride-

This was really good.
Dang.
A heap can be said when ain't a lot of time. What I want yall to pay mind to is WHAT is being said, and the creative expression.
It's impressive.
Good enough for government work, is the opener:
I saw myself today as a compulsive giver in someone's mirror...
I'm a rhymer, myself. I love to twist words, so I appreciate "giver" and "mirror." I also like the view from somebody else that's going on, which runs through this poem. The opinion of self is in contrast to another...
That's slicker than a boiled onion...
If yall a learned student, one can compare the "angry" WOMAN, to the GIRL "curled up" GIRL...Yall aint see that, aint it?
It ends with asking the beloved Divine who she REALLY is...Which is the only opinion that matters...I like how that was tied in. My take? Wonderful. Contrast, deep emotional content, and seeking guidance is all in here like a pot of hopping john (black-eyed peas, if yall ain't familiar.) Strong writing talent is on display, able to change views of author to reader, as well as subject. Well done.
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Review of Shattered  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Good to know you, I'm Bride-

The dang question we all wonder when it comes to matters of the heart:

"What's wrong with me?"
Been there, done that, critiqued the thing, tried it again...And, we're back like a ceiling fan.

Hon, you ain't gone ever get the answer...

It goes on to say the SAME thing we ALL say: "I thought I learned my lesson the first time my heart was shattered"...Take this from a guys perspective: WE think like that too. I cant name the number of dang times I ain't think something out. Problem is, we let the wrong sides of us make choices in this department.

I'm like, ONE step from blowing myself into the side of a mountain like Wyle E Coyote, with my booklearned choices in this area...

But there go ANOTHER chance, aint it? ANOTHER chance to some more damage...The author writes it here:
"But he came along"...
They ALWAYS come along...
I laughed something serious at the "his sarcastic personality," cause girls done told me that of myself...
Like: "Youre the most obnoxious person on the planet"...
I don't see HOW...
HOW you done met EVERYBODY on the planet?
Heh, heh...Just saying...
I like the uncontrollable crush aspect of this thing: "Why must he make me fall?" Eep.
What's good about this is how it's written like the author is REALLY minding this over, debating and weighing out the risk.
My take? LOVED it. Love is a risk, aint no way around it. Its a gamble, yall got to know were to hold em, fold em, and walk away...Its a song, I ain't come up with that...Half the fun is the risk, the unsettled stomach, and the butterflies. And its good to keep going through this, till folks get it right.
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Review of If Only  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Good to know you, I'm Bride-

Dang, girl...
I'm presently out here adjusting guys for these SAME offenses. Why? They make it harder on US guys dealing decent...MAN was created to be a sacrificial leader for women, and that's the gist...THATS masculinity...Yall know why a screwdriver is a screwdriver? Ain't matter if yall use the thing to snatch the membrane off the backside of a slab of ribs (which I have,) its STILL a SCREWDRIVER. It was created to screw in screws. Ain't matter if folks try to redefine it or not...Yall trust me, aint it? Well, put yall sitting britches on, and I'll explain why THATS important while reviewing this poem...



Let's begin...
"If only you knew how deep your words cut" is a line so strong, yall can hang the wash on it. This goes around more than folk care to talk about. MEN should watch what they say to women...Our words are powerful. Arguments is gone happen, aint no way around it, but the CORRECT way to argue with women is the ISSUE- Yall ain't ever personal attack or name call, cause of the power of our words...This is why when men lie, women sometimes just believe the nonsense. Yall need more proof? It's also a reason why women have a time harder than bricks leaving some guys. Theres other factors, but they use their WORDS certain ways...

A woman will follow a man to h*ll, if she really loves him...

Scooting along...

That line was painfully written, but captures the beginning of the problems. It was a h*lluva way to open. "Waiting on you to turn back Into the man you seemed to be When we first met," illustrates the decline. EVERYTHING got a progression, a seed ain't always been a plant. Woman are a certain way, and men ain't no good if they lead them on. "I'm withering Under the Weight of your insecurities," nails the thing shut. THIS is why.
Ain't no man who know his purpose acts this way..."Youre making me less than"...

Hold that thought...

There it go again. Here go the gospel: Men who know their purpose are confident, and only a weak man fears a strong woman...

Nailed it.

My take? I like how this is written. The emotions are off the charts, and it relays real time problems. This thing could easily reach out to other women in this situation. The heartbreak is all through this, but I think the author just had to get this off her chest. Nicely done.
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Review of Pretty Damn Close  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Good to know you, I'm Bride-

Well...This was IMPRESSIVE.

I'm a guy that appreciates wholehearted romance. This thing was sweet enough to give folks a dang cavity...Let's begin...

The rhyme pattern is good enough for government work. There go elements in writing and different styles. Folks free verse and all, but I LOVE to twist rhyming words and patterns. It's quite melodic, the rhyme structure here. As yall take a gander, it can EASILY be read to a tune. That's harder than p*ssing up a rope to do, cause there's certain timings,and clicks to were a pattern starts and ends...

The beginning of this thing is heart stopping. It's simple, but that there is the BEST way to communicate love feelings. Love afterall IS simple, once yall get the hang of it. It requires innocence, and "my tongue all tied in knots," is dang charming.
"I'm the sweetest kind of sore right now where you're sleeping on my chest, watching your body rise and fall as I take another breath," is the show stopper here. It made me go "aww" outloud, and girls around me were like "what?"

Me: "NOTHING."
Moving on.

I like how THAT moment is the authors favorite. It aint "how she talks or walks," it aint her smile, its when she aint even woke.

He loves her for HER.

Thing about love is, it aint cost nothing. When yall love somebody it should be for them. When yall got a demand on it, when that person ain't meet requirements, its easier than Sunday morning to fall out of love.

Remember that.

I also enjoy how this is written in a story mode. It goes from the sleeping, to what happens during the sleeping, to after. The "cover" thing is funny too. We ain't ever understand WHY girls DO that...

As a once over, this was possibly one of my favs...The reason? The HONESTY.
My take? Wonderful. Author ain't skip no beat on "putting it all out there." Its a very sweet storyline, and captures the beauty of his subject. Dang fine writing.
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Review of Is it Love?  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Good to know you, I'm Bride-

Let's begin:
A heck of a lot is going on in this thing. A better student such as myself, was able to pick things out like greens before cooking them...

Did I push it a little with the "better student" thing? Like I can strut while sitting down?

I, um...
Heard somebody else say it...I was just trying to sound...

BACK TO THE REVIEW...
DANG.

What's good about this is, the author done gave yall visuals with the words at the same dang time. That's fine penning, if yall ask me.

Romance should always be a full experience. Words. Expression. Imagination.

When these are done all on up, it paints a picture yall just stare at...And be amazed.

The sound of the rain, is a fantastic opener. It may sound simple as biscuits, but the line: "I breathe slowly," made me unbutton my top button with some heat coming out...Ooh.

Why I feel like, I'm gone always have to tell folks in reviews I'm a guy?

The name?
Oh.
It stands for something.

Anyhow...
I like "the window fogging" and "my reflection fading"... Its well placed, and paints a picture in the mind. It's crazy...Yall can ACTUALLY see this...
"in, out,in, out," just added to the previous passion...

This girl done wrote something hotter than a stolen tamale, but yall ain't see it. Its HOW she uses her words...

"I wrap myself in thoughts to keep myself warm," is scripted so elegantly, it connects the whole thing in romance, passion driven angst, and honest infatuation. My take? Dang. If this aint one of those runaway love type writings, I don't know what is. And WHY did I picture this in black and white? Love the written sounds, and the simple way of saying a lot. Well written.
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Review of I Love Him  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Good to know you, I'm Bride-

I'm a guy, the name got a long story to it...Let's begin...

Every dang poem I write got a darker than the inside of a wolf turn to it. Why? I LOVE IT. Dwindling about, it says a lot about myself in particulars, but I just plain get a kick out the fact that a deep love can go south quicker than Dixie...And girls pull that right on out me...Nothing personal, yall- Being 9:15 about it, it's the differences between man and woman that attract each other...

Thinking otherwise, compromises the value placed on the creations...

I like "my confession was useless and all it did was make the pain stronger"...Now, aint that gospel. It takes a heap holding that all in about how yall feel about somebody, until yall tell them...Then, yall at that persons mercy...Painful. "Wishing I was in her place," hurts more than a lie. Been there...But...Wishing I was in "his" place is at my angle...

Yall know what Im barking at...Geez...

"Crying to myself silently as I watched him kiss her softly in bed"...

Waitaminute, what?

I get the angle...

"My life was ruined the moment she came in"...DANG. Don't yall hate when yalls feelings get all intertwined, and pulling them apart is harder than chinese arithmetic? When somebody done became yalls world, that same person can end it...
"Nothing stood in my way in imagination, I could do anything"...Is poetic, as scary. This is what happens sometimes, yall. Thin line between a daydream and a nightmare at times. I also appreciate how it gets borderline violent...Naw, I ain't the violent type, I just appreciate bold, honest passion expressed in romantic writings...So, NO, I ain't wearing no ankle bracelet or nothing...It ends with the writer still hurt, but can't in shorts do no nothing about it, cause love makes folks do the d*mnest things...
My take? Love the passion. It was a rollercoaster ride, and I ain't 2nd guess throwing my hands up. The emotions were communicated beautifully, and I was scared a little bit...My kind of love poem.
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